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An 'ordinary' MC meets the legendary Sun Wukong and accepts him as an 'Ancestor.' What follows shakes the very foundations of the Shinobi World...
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First of all, I apologize for being a filthy casual. I know how the system works and just reading your work and not contributing to it's success is just selfish. Have my stones from now on. Anyway, this is a review in the form of a rant so I'll give it to you straight. Writing is good, characters isn't one dimensional but the problem I have is your rep and the tone of the story. You know what type of people use this app, so you know their preferences. Even a minor slight against your MC will get you hounded and they'll say things like 'NTR!' even though the MC clearly has no interest in the Heroine. But, that's just how it is. No matter how much you say it isn't a self-insert, for you, it's not, but for the readers, it is. I suggest that you just find a balance where you write what you want and the readers want so everyone is happy. You have a reputation to uphold too, why tf are you limiting yourself and saying bs like 3 members in the harem when you did like a million in your successful fanfic. Live up to your rep my guy, if the readers want all the girls in the harem, then put them all in, you got the skills for it, right? I'm not really interested in harems but your skills in bringing characters to life is so phenomenal that it got me invested in your story. Just change the tone or something, make it a 'regret' type where the heroine finally realizes the MC's worth, and call it a day. Ps. I was surprised by the way Naruto gave up on Sakura so quickly to be honest, even tho he chased after her the whole series. P.P.S. Don't stop when you already got the ball rolling. P.P.P.S. Sorry for the one star, it attracts more attention than five stars anyway. Five stars all the way.
As could be expected from Ein. Even while chosing one of the most generic worlds to write a fanfic of he still can make it far from ordinary xD the story only started but if you want to see a growing psychopath in the ninja world, that doesn't really understand emotions and will do what cold logic suggests him then go ahead and giove it a try. You can also expect nice plot hole solving and lore expansion instead of simply following the og plot xD Be warned tho... This is like a sixth story he made and I got addicted to all of them xD
I your great-great-grandfather. I recommend this novel even if I can't find it. but hey we know this writer knows what he's doing. so what are you waiting for he go and read it
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why even bother creating a background for the character if you are going to wipe his memories anyway? just make an oc in the world. otherwise good story
dropped at chapter 124. the start of story is really amazing. the author setting up the plot and situations around the character amazingly well, and that setup make development of each of characters through their exploration of their personality, goal, interaction of each other and relationship with each other progress logical and relatable enough for me to immerse in the story and such experience make beginning of the story 5 star for me. but that experience of the amazing beginning slowly becoming worse and worse the longer story progress, one of the biggest reason because lack of great setup along with lack of great exploration that author did really well at the beginning that become less and less and less. and story progress, its become " hey there is some sudden development of the story without any setup or built up rally and I am not gonna show it to you, so deal with it". like tsunade first meeting with the mc, or mc background hidden development of his technique for example. and a lot of these sudden background development or any sudden development really, happen a lot more at a cost of another great potential development that a lot more interesting and a lot more make a sense that fit better for the plot or setup that author already did for the first place. overall it's good story but really disappointing one.
I your seventh generation ancestor order you to read this novel beacuse it’s the best and you shall advance in your cultivation(reading time and culture of fanfics) after you read it, it will also help with whatever Dao path your on.
Overall it’s an ok novel to pass the time, my only issue with it is that it doesn’t have any stakes. Everything just somehow works out for the main character. Plot points just happen without any explanation. You show us the result but not any of the, I guess inner monologue. It doesn’t really go into detail on things. Like the timeskip, you show us that Ino and Sakura try to better them selves. But you do nothing about Sasukes perspective especially since Uchiha’s are more emotional than any other clan. Same for how Naruto, somehow got over Sakura. The juicy parts are just skipped over for plot progression. It reads less like a Naruto Fanfiction and more like a Naruto Cast in a AU world without the nitty gritty bits that made the universe so good. (Delete Boruto, and war arc).
Good, good, good! a high quality author writiting a pshyopath that has a personality, unlike most other authors who try to make an MC that had a personslity but fail, much less a psychopath. plus he offed himself in a very cool way.
A masterpiece as always delivered to us mortals by the Great Ein-sama. I thought I should be one of the first reviews so I could say that,EIN DOESN'T DELETE BAD REVIEWS. it's just that his works are great that's why you can't find any 🐸🐸🐸. Sasuga Ein-sama.
Написано довольно хорошо, но после того, как мои надежды и ожидания были разбиты (Хината, Ино, Сакура), я хотел бы объявить о своем не столь почетном уходе от чтения этой, несомненно, знаменитой книги. П.с. Конечно это были лишь мои ожидания по поводу гарема, так, как помню прошлую книгу автора, но всё же пока брошу этот роман. П.п.с Автору удачи!
One more from @Einlion! Nice, and a Naruto one? Very Nice! I want this![img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
sorry man, can't give 4 or 5 stars. I think this is quite new, with mc from a different dimension who doesn't know naruto anime. However, the way the romance is a bit boring to me. what i see is mc only takes 'used' women from other men (except Tenten and Hanabi). Moreover, your MC character is too serious which makes me more bored too.... well, sorry.... I've been thinking a lot recently and I'm a bit bored right now. Well, I wish you continued success. I will also read again if the opportunity arises.
It's been a absolute delight .. quite a different MC with unique powers ... if I must say.. and with a different mode of operandi I just hope you won't force romance because of polls Tenten is a good girl.. no need to forcefully change the way of the plot for adding Hinata..
Einlon writes great stuff and after reading the 30 chapters he has released I am excited to see this develop further. We have a MC who is driven and is basically the reincarnation/descendent of Sun Wukong which I have always been curios to see in the naruto universe. Recommend!
I initially wasn't going to read this fanfic because of the name, but I'm enjoying it. [img=exp][img=coins][img=coins][img=exp][img=coins]
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Hahahahaha!!! I knew! Ein ain't gonna remain silent. Just hope this one to be as epic as EPIC. Fingers crossed 🤞🤞🤞🤞🤞🤞🤞🤞🤞🤞🤞🤞🤞🤞🤞
I, your Great Grandfather, demand that you read this novel and have a good day! If you do, who knows, perhaps you too will one day be able to carry around a big stick?