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Edgardo was a young 15-year-old student who, due to being distracted with his cell phone, fell into a sewer, due to the depth of the sewer, Edgardo died instantly when he hit the solid concrete.
Believing that that had been the end of him, Edgardo found himself in a very strange place where there was a person who would completely change what he once believed.
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mc is just stupid nobody like you and you want to help your sister I dont care what you do but he just keeps interfering in other people's business it Is very annoying to say the least
It's grammar is so bad that it is so annoying to read, stop adding the fricking enguado or what ever, because it is ver distracting, and makes is harding to read. So in conclusion, STOP ADDING HIS F**KING NAME ALMOST AFTER ALL HIS LINES, IT'S STUPID.
The interaction with the mc and god is just to stupid and poorly executed. makes me not want to read it.
Everything this novel tries to do, it does terribly. The main character is, in theory, overpowered. I say in theory because the main character doesn’t actually use this power in any interesting way. He makes a few skills for himself and he kills some bandits prettt easily, thats it. Reminder, the main character has the ability to create any skill or structure with no setback and these two abilities are only the tip of the iceberg. The mc could at least tip some of the struggling workers some white gold but he doesn’t even do that. The world building is poor. We know very little about the world and what we do know shows very little imagination. The world building revolves around the “Demi-humans” and the humans and demons. That’s it. The characters have no discernible traits. The main character has some personality but no goals, hardships, nor relatable feelings. The girlfriends have no special trait, even though he could give each of them a class set of skills, making them deities. The family has the best personality. There is no plot. The worst part of the novel is that their, literally, is no plot. The main character has no goals, doesn’t want to learn about the world, doesn’t want rule it, and overall doesnt want to make a mark. Maybe this changes after chapter 41 but considering he just picked up another damsel in distress, I have no interest in paying coins for the following chapters. Overall, dont waste your time reading this novel, “Tribe 10,000x amplification” and “ten consecutive draws to invincibility” both feature op mc and a written well(with an actual plot).
Don't bother wasting your time reading this unless you like screaming at the MC for being a dumb idiot. Story feels too robotic and weird tbh.
good story. the only complaint i have is the grammer. kind of hard to tell what is being said and what is the char thinking. and some weird termenology being used. example: the word taste makes an aperiance once in a while withe no contex really confusing
1. I got a dig bick 2. You that read wrong 3. You read that wrong too 4. You checked 5. You smiled 7. You are wandering why you are still reading this 8. You saw that mistake, right? (On 7) 10. But did you see that I skipped 6? 10. You checked 11. And saw you that I doubled 10 and skipped 9 12. I said "saw you" not you saw 13. I also skipped 2 14. You got tricked 15. Follow me for exp ;) 16. I'm just wasting your time, but if you were entertained, leave a like and happy reading! expexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexpexp
the world background is great the characters design is great but the grammar and the writing quality isn't great please this the story will be better if the grammar and the writing quality is great but overall the story is great keep it up 😀
Right off the bat it looks low effort. Pretty much no synopsis and no chapter names, on top of that paid chapters after CH 41. It is hard to read due to off phrasing, lack of grammar/punctuation.
Grammar is bad and conversations re poorly executed...................................................hj/.......\.\ ..........................
Honestly the only thing dragging this story down is the writing quality its complete trash him her them they its all over the place if this gets fix i would say its a solid 3.5 for a new writer.
And here i am trying to learn japanese, this guy can't even write in english REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
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there is not much to complain about with the story but Author-san if you would like this novel to be enjoyed by more people PLEASE fix the grammar, it has been quite terrible lately, just fixing the basic 'him her she I me we his hers' would make the story so much better and alot more comprehensive.