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this fic is quite good, the author understands the original media and the Mc who seems to be the only OC is well created an her personality is well portrayed. unfortunately this book suffers from three main flaws, though if you can ignore them it's an amazing book. 1. the author keeps forgetting to put "I" into sentences for example they'll start a sentence with "am going to..." where the character was saying that they were going to. it's bad enough that it almost seems purposeful. 2. the author writes as if the reader has already watched teen Wolf (the show this is based on). as someone who hasn't watched that I can confirm this makes things a lot harder to understand, not impossible, just harder. 3. the explanations and descriptions are shortened to "character x tells character y all the details about z" when the reader was never given much details about "z" leaving me scratching my head. there were some very good opportunities to give details about the characters by how they describe things or maybe they had fun on date for example because they won some obscure plushy and it was their favorite. just the little things that most people take for granted that can really flesh out a story and give the characters lives of their own
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Hi, the name's Sky. Nice, it rhymed🤭. I'm going to review the book based on the start till the alters chapter so...Spoiler warning? Anyway let's get to it. 1-Writing Quality: There are some spelling errors or grammar mistakes in the book but there are almost non existent or if they're there you get immersed in the plot and mostly overlook it. [4 Stars Here] 2-Story Development: The story has a nice plot and it's interesting seeing as she's the mother of all vampires basically 😂 and the oldest werewolf alive, that's gotta be awesome! But it has its Cr*p too, like how the MC tries to be mysterious but actually looks like she's being lazy? I mean, sure let others do stuff since you're OP but can't you at least participate more? And the answer is Puppy has potential. There is also the fact that we don't get enough slice of life or originality to power couples interactions, most scenes are just rewrites of cannon but swapping some characters in them for Astrid. There are things I don't like about the plot but I think it'll come up on the [character design] part of the rating. [3 Stars Here] 3-Character Design: Some characters are consistent with their OG selves but that could be attributed to the author not dabbling (Using smart words to seem like I'm talking about important sh*t😂) too deep with how they could develop, there are exceptions like those directly involved with Astrid but those are counted with one hand like Chris,Derek,🤔Is there someone else? Oh yeah Gerard, Kate and Matt.(Yep one hand, the rest are the same with minor dialogues because there's someone else). There's a part on the book that said something about "the universes way of finding a way" or something like that, and it refered to Scott crushing over someone else but since she's not an argent I guess she doesn't matter, no teen romance for "wolf with alpha potential", he has stiles. Scott literally went to prom and had Danny and coach scene but didn't even meet his supposed crush. 🤷🏻♀️Plot armor right here. [3 Stars Here] 4-Update Stability: It's stable, not daily but stable. Like as in a 5 day to a week update... one short chapter but still an update. [4 Stars Here] 5-World Background: Well the world is well described or at least the scenes that are mentioned and that's a great thing to have on a book because it paints a picture. I want to talk some smack here but it'd be unrelated to this point. [5 Stars Here] [Overall:l]: 3.8 Tch... So close to 4 Stars. [Opinion]: The book is actually great and I enjoy Astrid as a protagonist a lot but the book has its flaws but I kind of expected it since it's the author's first book. Expecting perfection would be like asking someone to take there drivers license on a bus. The good but also the bad thing is that the book follows cannon, obviously with some slight changes since there's someone new and it's supposed to be from said person's POV but that's also what limits the book. What I mean is, it's completely normal to want to follow cannon, but changing things or diving the MC a presence is also needed, because even with all the power the MC is basically just an add-on. There's time between teen wolf episodes and also some scenes have minor time skips so that gives enough time for creative development. Slice of life stuff to fill it out or more supernatural stuff, or even spending some century old fortune and stuff. Scotts crush who is irrelevant now could have a bigger role in Scotts life like Allison did in cannon, a +300 surviving ex girlfriend could show up to spice things up on the drama before leaving or becoming a villain in a minor arc between seasons change. Astrid's ex(she doesn't exist I'm just showing possibilities) could end up with Lydia, Scott with Kira and Stiles with Malia. It's all about filling up the chapters. Overall I really enjoy the story and I want to see it become better or branch out from cannon. To new readers I recommend reading at least 3 chapters before making an opinion.
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Going by webnovel’s rating system i guess this is 4 star, personally id give it closer to 2.5-3. Its not a bad fic, but unfortunately its just a canon rehash with a new character in the mix that takes Scott’s place. If thats your thing youll like it, but its not mine. Basically nothing changes from canon except for a few conversations, which then get “fixed” later so the plot still goes the exact same way. Like in S1 instead of Derrick getting shot, Astrid does, but to make it so Jackson still gets wolfsbane potion on him Derrick Astrid goes to school anyways, Derrick comes too, confronts jackson over nothing, and cuts him with his claws which have her blood in order to keep that the same. Again, its not horribly unbelievable, but it feels like the author is constantly stopping any and all creative freedom they have in order to copy canon almost exactly (with the same dialogue).
First of all welcome back we missed you and love your work keep it up also thanks for the chapter. Second everything I wanted in a teen wolf yuri fanfic and more 100 out of 100😊😊😊😊😁😁😊😁😊
I can say that it is a good story even though it has a few chapters it has a solid main character on what she is and how she plans to do it. while having the development of a good character with each character added.
I wanna give you 1 star in updating stability cause ya know, I want more chapters 😉. but I'll settle for 5☆. I am loving this story and can't wait to see how the rest of it goes.
looking forward to the continuation and how the rewrite for the second half goes hopefully you continue
Loving the read so far but I'm sad that I've almost caught up to where you've left off at, currently on ch 24 of 33 😫, hoping for more updates in the future when you have time or haven't dropped it 😅🥺. Tbh, I'd love to see a "Vampire Diaries Universe" fanfic from you, with Astrid Mikelson as the MC, maybe as Klaus's twin. A fanfic in a supernatural world, made up of multiple tv series', Vampire Diaries x Teen Wolf x Twilight {x whatever else fits in}, universes blended into one would be interesting... starring Astrid Mikelson ofc lol.
Any new updates planned for this web novel? I do hope so since I liked reading it when you had posted it with an original hybrid and her mate Allison Argent.
Pretty mid, didn’t really know what was happening at first and if there was a synopsis it would of help immensely, it also kinda felt rushed
揭示劇透 Update soon I cant wait to see Astrid's pack fully united and brought to Beacon Hills on top of how she deals with the Pack of Alphas under Deucelion
I love the powers and I love her personality. I like her relationship with Derek and Alison(except the wish from a god to make her automatically in love). But the thing that makes the fic just meh is that nothing really changes. While yes they’re changes, none of them matter. The plot and story beats still happen no matter what, the author doesn’t deviate at all even with the mc having seen the show. The mc just lets people die even tho she knows the killer, I can get it in season 1 because they deserve it mostly, but season 2 was dumb. It’s just the exact plot of the show with the mc being Astrid instead of Scott, and there being a smattering of new supernatural stuff in the background that doesn’t change anything.
It a good story, but to me it seems your running out of ideas but the series it's quite long so just stick 2 the movie I mean to the TV series and I think it'll be alright but nice nice character development you managed to find a way to add the originals backstory to it it's cool
I mean, I dont really know what else is in my top ten but this is one of them. Havent watched any of the shows mentioned anywhere but this is great. Other than some fixable spelling/grammer errors everything else is good. Characters are good, dont know about the update stability cause i just started reading today, story is good, world building is good and as i said the grammer/spelling mistakes are fixable. Cant wait to see more of Astrid and Allison from now on. Keep up the good work Author!👌
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and I was not perfect but none is but I love it so *dramatic pause*PLEASE DON'T DROP PLEASE DON'T DROP PLEASE DON'T DROP PLEASE DON'T DROP PLEASE DON'T DROP PLEASE DON'T DROP PLEASE DON'T DROP