摘要
Frances inherits a magical necklace from dubious sources. The Keeper of Time will now face being thrown into other times and worlds to fix up the little mishaps of history. This story is a saga of how the young woman becomes fierce warrior, shedding shyness along the way.
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3評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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寫檢討
Good and interesting story but there is some problems in the way the author sets the plotline. Like chapter 51 should be in 50 place and 50 should be in 51 place as 51 explains he story and if u directly go to Ch 50, it leaves alot of questions and plot holes for the reader as in end of Ch 49, MC said she would be in caves and suddenly she is fighting in Ch 50. So set the storyline in a clear line or give some indication. The reason I say indication is that before volume 3 she is a secret agent but suddenly in volume 3, she is said to be in college. U should also give some clear info about that. Other than some small mistakes like this, this storyline is good. Another thing I recommend is dividing long chapters into small parts. First 10-20 chapters are too long and some people likes to read shorter chapter( like me) in comparison your volume 3 chapters are of correct length
J'aime beaucoup cette fanfiction ^^ La réécriture est originale et bien faite. Continue comme ça 😊🥰 _____________________________________
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