/ Fantasy / Forbidden Hypnosis: Starts with a suggestion
摘要
What if you got the power to hypnotize someone?
look how he plays in an ordinary world full of beauty.
someone, who will reveal the darkness of the deepest human heart.
Arnold: "I'll show you the true essence of a beast."
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warning, this novel is an R-18 novel. Don't worry too much about the synopsis.
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The characters are way too superficial, the story jumps a lot of steps (cbaracters are resisting and the next sec they are totally conquered). The english is very bad and doesn't make sense. In conclusion the story has potential but is wrote very badly
the story and the premise of it is good, but the way its executed is very bad, there is no build up, and most of the steps are skipped. Also the writing quality is bad. And you can't understand what he says or wants to do.
I hold back my opinion, until I see how "yuri "stuff whould be handled...👀👀👀 P. S. But idea of corrupting a yuri couple and giving them a Green hat, does seems nice to me...why there is not much of this stuff? I mean ,it's a great idea. Sigh.
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It's pretty good. Prepare for some weird grammer though. It doesn't have any huge mistakes or anything, but I think English is authors 3rd language.
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translate:I really like this novel. I must say this novel has great potential. it's okay for it to be suggestions rather than complete hypnosis. makes it more interesting.............. don't drop author...keep going[img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar]
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Writing Quality :5 🌟⭐⭐⭐⭐ Updating Stability :4 ⭐⭐⭐⭐ Story Development :5 🌟⭐⭐⭐⭐ Character Design :5 🌟⭐⭐⭐⭐ world background :5 🌟⭐⭐⭐⭐