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The best and BEAST 👍👍 please update new chapter soon, i hope u have a nice day.🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏
the story and the premise of it is good, but the way its executed is very bad, there is no build up, and most of the steps are skipped. Also the writing quality is bad. And you can't understand what he says or wants to do.
It's pretty good. Prepare for some weird grammer though. It doesn't have any huge mistakes or anything, but I think English is authors 3rd language.
I hold back my opinion, until I see how "yuri "stuff whould be handled...👀👀👀 P. S. But idea of corrupting a yuri couple and giving them a Green hat, does seems nice to me...why there is not much of this stuff? I mean ,it's a great idea. Sigh.
The characters are way too superficial, the story jumps a lot of steps (cbaracters are resisting and the next sec they are totally conquered). The english is very bad and doesn't make sense. In conclusion the story has potential but is wrote very badly
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Writing Quality :5 🌟⭐⭐⭐⭐ Updating Stability :4 ⭐⭐⭐⭐ Story Development :5 🌟⭐⭐⭐⭐ Character Design :5 🌟⭐⭐⭐⭐ world background :5 🌟⭐⭐⭐⭐
translate:I really like this novel. I must say this novel has great potential. it's okay for it to be suggestions rather than complete hypnosis. makes it more interesting.............. don't drop author...keep going[img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar]
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The best and BEAST 👍👍 please update new chapter soon, i hope u have a nice day.🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏
the story and the premise of it is good, but the way its executed is very bad, there is no build up, and most of the steps are skipped. Also the writing quality is bad. And you can't understand what he says or wants to do.
It's pretty good. Prepare for some weird grammer though. It doesn't have any huge mistakes or anything, but I think English is authors 3rd language.
I hold back my opinion, until I see how "yuri "stuff whould be handled...👀👀👀 P. S. But idea of corrupting a yuri couple and giving them a Green hat, does seems nice to me...why there is not much of this stuff? I mean ,it's a great idea. Sigh.
The characters are way too superficial, the story jumps a lot of steps (cbaracters are resisting and the next sec they are totally conquered). The english is very bad and doesn't make sense. In conclusion the story has potential but is wrote very badly
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Writing Quality :5 🌟⭐⭐⭐⭐ Updating Stability :4 ⭐⭐⭐⭐ Story Development :5 🌟⭐⭐⭐⭐ Character Design :5 🌟⭐⭐⭐⭐ world background :5 🌟⭐⭐⭐⭐
translate:I really like this novel. I must say this novel has great potential. it's okay for it to be suggestions rather than complete hypnosis. makes it more interesting.............. don't drop author...keep going[img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar][img=recomendar]
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Why not update it so much time pass anyon e know about it