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"A guy reincarnated in the body of Riser Phenex with a system.
This work is a piece of fiction, a fanfic created based on the original universe developed by its creators. I want to make it clear that I have immense respect for the work and vision of the original creators. The intention of this fanfic is to explore imaginative possibilities within this universe, without any intention of devaluing or replacing the original work."
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I love this so far and Just hope that you donot go akikan style or drop it.I am suggesting (it's more of asking) like you got Ezra right? Just hear me out as I am not saying to do this but just voicing out. The peerage (new Members ) Ais from Danmachi Ruby Rose (Rwby) Like I don't think anyone used them so far this way . Bring someone from other verse like Mashu (Fgo) or even Saint Martha hehe he the looks on Heaven faction will be priceless . Tatsumaki is a good choice Then Lastly like Bring someone from Marvel or DC or even some like Tohru from that Anime called dragon Maid or something I forgot anime name
Average fanfic, gives rise to mixed feelings. Unfortunately, it's mostly monotonous, the characters' personalities are cold, robotic. There is no plot as such, all the action is naive. The main character is described as a "villain", but he is more like a child with delusions of grandeur, logic in his actions is mostly absent, all his actions are impulsive. And the other characters are made to look stupid. There is no fight as such, or rather there is, but it is a light description on the likes of came, saw, won, there is no drive, tension. If you think that he (the main character) will even remotely resemble such "villains" as, for example: Professor James Moriarty from the book/movie "Sherlock Holmes" or at least Lelouch Vee Britain from Code Geass, then unfortunately you won't see it.
It's a good fanfiction so far, I can't wait to see how the plot will continue.
There are flaws but I like this.Sometimes it does feel rushed but it's just beginning so I hope you improve as you write more.I suggest something from cultivation Novels too can make interesting like that Phenix bloodline from ATG is a good one to have.I don't know how it works though as I am not a fan of those "I ,your father" type novels.Also show some conversation with his family and peerage members and not make people think it's a diary.We have to speculate some so show his wholesome moments with family too.This way even if you are villain we can see his motives as sometimes Villains are more complex than hero and make him more scheming like Aizen.No need to just brute force on his enemies.He can Humiliate Issei more like he can also talk to Gremory family or phoenix family about Issei behavior or do something more drastic but orchestrate it like why a Grafiya only interferes only when Riser is about to do something but Issei can shout whenever he wants ..I mean there are some places you just skipped over
I didn't really like the protagonist, I thought he did a lot of unnecessary things and I also don't like super chaotic things, I'm not complaining about him killing people, mostly unnecessarily, I like chaotic protagonists but I also like intelligent protagonists, chaotic but intelligent protagonists, no matter how much they change the plot or things like that, they are always in control and a lot of the time they let the plot unfold to get the most benefits or changes the plot to results that he predicted and that won't affect the world much, or turns the world upside down by doing crazy things and in the midst of the chaos he benefits, I think the best example I have and the protagonist of annihilation maker the crazy things he did always benefited him as much as possible. Other than that, I thought the story was great with good grammar and few holes in the script.
its a good fic. a little anoying with the format text ( the way they speak etc) therers just a little problem. Sona character its a little off ( a lot ) Summon characters are brainwashed ( Just puppets ) yubellana ( Puppet ) i read till the exorcists , Xenovia and irina ( Puppet) the major problem its theres no emotion , its boring
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dude, your story is good, but the text looks like generated AI, I advise you to revive it and diversify it, and try to avoid monotony and tautology
A good FanFiction, it seems that lately in the Webnovel among the DxD stories, it has only been reincarnated as Rizer Phenex and this is one of the best!
Read it for yourself and find out its pretty interesting so far hope author Rodney make him too ok too quickly ...............................
I love the whole Reincarnated As Riser Phenex trope, but this fanfic has 3 issues: - The characters and dialogue are too robotic and monotonous. This makes the characters look less realistic, and makes their whole personality revolve over Riser. - Because of the first point the romance in the novel is less heartwarming. - Unnecessary Killing. I don't mind killing but the MC in this story was a straight up murder hobo, killing people when there were better ways of dealing with them. A good example of this was the human witch used to track down Asia. Instead of killing her to hide information, a better way would be using mind erasing magic(all devils know it). Realistically her disappearance would only bring him more attention.
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The author doesn't seem to have ever seen an episode of the anime or read a chapter of the LN or even glanced at the wiki. Which seems strange, since they decided to do a DxD fanfiction. From insane timelines that make zero sense, to a plot speed that is either mach 10 or glacially slow, to personalities that simply don't match the characters, to utterly flat out and incorrect things in the story. This story greatly needs a rework and an editor. Some examples of thigs: The author repeatedly, and constantly, calls the Devils demons. Not a big deal, but greatly irritating to read over and over and over for anyone that has even a minimal grasp of the DxD universe. Characters use random titles for others, jumping from Japanese honorifics, to western titles, to using both at the same time, to just not using titles at all. Grayfia even refers to Rias as just "Rias", and Sona calls her older sister by her name, Serafall, instead of sister or onii-chan. The personalities of characters are also all over the place, having absolutely no relevance nor whiff of what the characters are like in the canon materials. The writing style is difficult to read as at the start it goes from standard literary conversation: "blahblahblah" Character 1 said, with a smile. To a script-like dialog: Character 1, smiling: "blahblahblah" To just skipping the quotation marks to indicate speech altogether: Smiling character 1, blahblahblahblah. It happens mid-chapter sometimes, making it difficult to follow. Though, it did seem to just stop entirely by about chapter 30(?) and is now just using the "script" type writing. Making the entire story seem like reading a play or movie script, instead of reading a story. The system seems utterly pointless in the story. It starts off talking, but then just stops entirely. The "luck points" are done randomly and with values that make little sense, and the "gacha reward" mechanics all seem to have the same failure rating. Seeing a "Gold Card" fail and reward absolutely nothing, not even can of soup, was almost funny with how bad it is. Really it just seems to be there to burn the randomly given luck points for no real reason at all. As for ratios it seems to be a 50/50 chance for copper, silver, and gold to simply fail and reward absolutely nothing, unless of course the MC needs a quick power boost, then it's a 100% reward chance. One of the dumbest systems I have seen in a story. The plot movement is jerky and uneven. It goes from Rias and Riser's arranged marriage to "facing off in a rating game" in a couple of chapters. Then, the same day as the rating game, Sona and Riser's family's decide to marry the two the next day. Said wedding to Sona is also somehow "greatly anticipated in the underworld" a handful of lines later. Serafall, by the way, is completely onboard and okay with Sona being married to Riser. Then its a wedding and it jumps to the newlyweds returning from a three day honeymoon. Rias and Sona have a little falling out and Sona says she has no problem and can see herself loving Riser in the future, and a chapter later Sona is somehow reporting having "conquered several difficult issues with their relationship" and the two are calling each other "love" and "my dearest". There's more, and it doesn't really get any better, but I couldn't keep continuing after the Kokabiel arc part. Roughly 50 chapters in. The story is too everywhere, filled with too many errors and major and minor things, that it isn't enjoyable to read.
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I hate the fake love talks between Riser and Sona. They just look that fake. And the system is a mix of bad and good. No so OP sadly. I wish there were more ways to earn points, and suddenly the story is moving a lot faster in regards to bonds and all. Fate is inevitable I guess
It's always interesting to read about Mc taking over Riser's body but very few ever make it actually good to continue reading. While it started all good, the MC overall just turned pretty boring through all the chapters. Everything was just quick to start and most of it just falls on the MC's lap without him doing anything. Other characters make choices and act completely OOC without any good reasoning to them like with Akeno overall and the whole situation with Riser and Sona. Fights are even boring without much struggle or even spectacle if he is that strong. Reading chapters and chapters just feels samey and even when their are things happening, it doesn't really do much overall to make it a good reading. Overall it had a good start but it just drag on and became bland as things moved forward.
Wonderful chapter can't wait for more love the context of the oval rating of the world background love the character dysfunction love the story development love the updating status love the translation output I love it all
First of all, this is DxD... So this is hsrem and this is okay. Writting is okay but seems like a IA talking and acting for other characters. Risee is a bit weak... He has strong powers and it's just a bit strong then orjginal. Next, he has a free hate against him from part of Issei's plot armor, because Sirzechs, Azazel and others don't like or trust him without any good reason. It's a good fanfiction, but for me it's becoming boring. Good luck for you in your path.
great to see a good story about riser Phenex.awesome cover art too