/ Anime & Comics / DragonBall X: The Ultimate System [Re-Mastered]
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This is a story centered around a man named Luke who was coming from watching the New Dragonball Super Broly Movie. Sadly, Luke gets into a car accident, ending his life. Luke will be given a second chance of his choosing, meaning he can choose which world to reincarnate in. Anyone can probably guess what he will pick. He asked to be Goku and Raditz's brother but the one in between, so he is the middle brother now. Watch as Kayn(Luke) Rises to power against all the villains that invade the earth with the help of all the Z fighters and some extras who should have died in the main series or non-canon series.
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You’re off to a pretty good start just really hope you don’t end up doing the whole harem route as that will always ruin a good story. Anyways thank you for your story and keep up the great work!
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Great grammar and spelling so far (which compared to 99% of the novels on this godforsaken app is amazing) Huge potential for the plot so far and no real qualms with any of the character interactions so far Great at explaining the system and abilities What can I say? This novel is pretty awesome! ✌🏼
Yeah great start and system choice as it will be fun to see where it goes also hope this doesn't end up like most dbz stories that never get done or fast enough releases harem is ok but maybe only up to 3 so as to not side track much of the story but still have him making many next gen sayians on earth
It’s a good pass time Fanfic until chapter 50s. After that, it’s basically a cultivation novel one of the chinese wuxia thing. Clans and stuff you know.. So read it until chapter 53 and you can drop it.
IF AUTHOR IS STILL THERE THEN I WOULD REQUEST HIM TO CONTINUE PLEASE NEW CHAPTERS PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEE 🔥🔥 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
I mean its decent but it Got to the point where i was reading this story just to laugh since its not the best but its still decent and i like long stories
I simply love it, sorry about that spammer who made 4 accounts just to down your reviews 4 times. Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Xxxxxxxxxxxx Xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
I really love this fanfic. By far one of the best DragonBall fan fictions on the Web novel Web site. This novel has great pace, great plot, great main character and original characters, and wonderful grammar. Keep it up author.
I love this Fan-Fic and normally it has a good update speed but now after a long time Webnovel.com F*cks up and I can't read the latest chapter. (╬▔皿▔)╯
The english and grammar is poor, which intern makes the story feel choppy and hard to read. Obviously the stories updates are none or few and far between. But I will say that you do well with the characters and the world they live in.
The system is stupid as hell. Dont like the mc personality. Mc got too much system point at the start of the story. Mc is in trouble let buy a new technique and kill the bad guy kinda ****. And the fights are boring as hell. Really hoped it would be good but its not for my liking.
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REMINDS ME OF THE OTHER DRAGON BALL FAN FICTION WHERE THE MC ENDS UP BECOMING THE GOD OF DESTRUCTION OF UNIVERSE 2 I THINK THE ONE WHERE ZAMASU WAS FROM HE HAD BEEN LOOKING FOR SUPER DRAGON BALLS IN UNIVERSE 6 AND VADOS TOOK THEM TO TEST HIM AND ENDED UP WISHING FOR HIS OWN DRAGON BALLS HOPEFULLY WITH HIS SECOND WISH CARD HE WON'T WASTE IT ON ELISE AND DO SOMETHING COMPLETELY UNEXPECTED.
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Hope it’s not dropped. ❤️ Hope it’s not dropped. ❤️ Hope it’s not dropped. ❤️ Hope it’s not dropped. ❤️ Hope it’s not dropped. ❤️ Hope it’s not dropped. ❤️ Hope it’s not dropped. ❤️
I loved the story and characters and wish to continue reading but you have stopped updating it. everything I find a great or just good I find out that they have stopped writing it
Writing Quality: The writing in this book is good, not too advanced. I would say, for those who use this school system, around eighth or ninth grade level. It’s a little below where I read at, but I don’t mind. However it sometimes gets a little spotty, so 4 Stars. Writing Stability: Don’t even get me started... As of now, 7/1/20, the stability is worse than dogsh*t. Hopefully it gets fixed, as the author promised. 1 Star Story Development: The development of the story is pretty good. Nothing too much to complain about, the only thing I would complain about, though, is the fact it’s illogical to take in the two girls. 5 Stars World Background: As it’s based on one of my more favorite anime’s, I cant really fault the background much. It’s just... altered? kind of. 5 Stars Overall, I would say this book is a solid four, four and a half depending on the reader.
I've got to say, this is really good and I hope it never get dropped. I wanna see MC having kids Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome Awesome
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