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摘要
Gin is a simple man. but extraordinary salesman workers. live without family and try to live in peace. after living life as usual and life is almost stable. suddenly died from rescuing a small child who fell from the 5th floor and then turned on by the goddess to live with Satou Kazuma as his younger brother
"Maybe my own life first but now I have a family. Fine !! I'll take care of my older brother" Gin is excited.
A few days later.
"Gin, please ..." Kazuma with a burnt face and crying because forgetting to eat anything in his room.
"Yosh. Now my life just wants to relax. But why is my big brother having trouble with something constantly? Troublesome" gin with a tired face but still trying to help because he saw his brother's troubles
how does the MC's life suddenly have to be Kazuma younger brother and what fate will be accepted after this?
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This novel is just a fanfic and not character origin. if you want to know the original story please watch Konosuba. thank you
cover image not my but if the creator does not accept I used it. I will get Reid that too.
English not my language but I will learn for best writer novel for now.
I Will update 7 chapter/1 week
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this novel is good if only the grammar gets fixing its really a cute and nice novel so i hope it gets fixing to title,story background and the novel chapters it will get higher reviews than before
Not terrible since it's a half decent story but cause of the grammar it's not readable, I personally drop stories which I have to stop and re-read sentences several times until I understand what the person is saying but if there's somebody out there who can actually read this then I guess this could be a decent story
The novels follows the anime 95% of the time with the 5% left being changes due to OC... but thats not the problem. The biggest issue is that grammar is non-existent, the grammar is so bad that my guess is that its a person who dosnt even has even some degree of mastery of his naive language and tries to write in english while not knowing even the difference between "write" and "right". A 12 years old child from spanish countries that get english classes weekly at school will do better... i tried to stay for a while since it was funny, but its starting to affect my own writing skills. So i quit
Grammar needs work. updates are stable Story development is also great in my view .(tho some work may be needed to be on same level as experienced authors) Character design in also good in my view but explain a bit more about characters that are important to the story like wiz(as some people didnt read the original konosuba or watched in anime) Same thing for world development
Writing quality is readable but it's mentally taxing and you might have to re-read sentences a couple of times. Story development is a bit slow, takes about 3 chapters to finish a day that is consistent of menial tasks. Character design is pretty generic, it's just your run of the mill JP crap that you don't have to think much about. World background is pretty blank, I know it's a FF of Konosuba but why not try to build onto it a bit? You'll get some extra words in a chapter and it won't feel like everything is built on an infinite dimension of nothing. The settings are blank and stale, at one moment it's early morning and with barely any transition it's night. Overall opinion - It's okay to read as a throwaway and to read bit by bit, but for a long term enjoyment? Probably not due to the grammar and the generic elements.
Besides the very poor english, the novel is quite good and i hope to see much more :)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This series can be feel good in my view of things! MC interacts with characters very diffrently and can be more enjoyable with how he treats certain female characters. Currently it has alot of thing for it snd I would like more people to read the novel!
Just reading this novel very good start and plot'''' ...................................... I like enjoy it for sure..... ...................................... Thanks for good story....
The story is decent but the writing quality is really meh but its readable, well I just give an edit to the author since chapter 148 as I really like the story and feel like its a waste as there really nearly no good Konosuba fan-fics and as I said this one is decent. !(•̀ᴗ•́)و ̑̑
The grammar give me cancer! Just trying to understand things is headache inducing! The story is good, but just reading it makes me want to smash my head in. I'll stop for now. I dont want my remaining sanity to disappear...
I very recommended this novel for you all Update always daily 1 chapter/day Story romance good to enjoy Not just copy paste story konosuba And Harem, not just pick girl okay, But not mind your writing this book, not everyone understand English language but, learn more okay! grammar you can try fix slow or give try find your editor Please don't stop, i like your novel And good luck my friend.
keep the enthusiasm in writing and think of scolding as a hypocritical insane talk, because claiming this but still reading each chapter and waiting to be enthusiastic don't worry bad people's tastes are different Until again, my friend
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Nice man.. it's very interesting and good job for yunyun haha,...................,......................... ...,........................... ...............................
The grammar need some work ......... But overall nice story .............. ................ ............... ................ ............... ................ ...............
Well.. The novel content on its own its really good and funny. But the biggest problem is the grammar... To be honest i would expect this kind of grammar from a 10 years old child or an ***** that has been learning english for a few months from cero. The grammar is so bad that it gives headaches, no kidding THe story and setting is good and funny but the grammar is a tactical nuke
Good fanfic but it's really need editor, oh author-sama. Ane aja smpe binggung baca fanficmu lur. Sumpah kadang" ane binggung apa coba yg pengen kmu tulis wkwkwk Ya palingan coba cari aplikasi buat benerin tata kata dan bahasanya lur. Walaupun udah ane artiin ke indo ane ttp aj bingung kadang" 😂😂 Tapi sih terus aj tulis lur karena ttp ad yg baca kok
This novel is great to be completely honest Mr. Author. Can you just do what you did to your edited .chapters? Just write in your mother tongue and then google translate it! It is much better at a level compared to your current grammar, you can also use Grammarly if you really insist on using English! There is an app for both computers and mobile phones. Thank You for sharing such a good novel. Keep up the good work! Work on your grammar more :)
in this case the advice should not be affected by all the comments that exist only use things that can be used as ideas in writing and don't be cynical about your work ⅓ it must be blasphemous but ¾ be supportive, and anyhow blaspheming they are still reading your work (maybe they are tsundere)
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