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hey I'm rewriting this story
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the story is good grammar can be problematic a bit, but we ain't here for English diploma are we~~ the protagonist is relatable, the game seems fun overall a good read
This story have potential, it is interesting and prose The things are well placed characters personalities are defining. You are doing nice work~~ Keep up the good work author, I'll be reading
I was recommended this story by a friend and it is amazing to see something fresh on web novel. You are doing a great job author even though it seems to be your first novel keep up the good work all the best!!
Pros- Good plot Likeable characters Good game mechanics Regular updates Bing watch worthy Cons- grammar in some chapters Some transition Either way I am enjoying it very much all the best writer
i just started reading but the story seems intersting, just that the grammar is too bad. i would suggest using grammarly. even the free version would help. I hope you will get an editor. if you can't find one (which is really easy to find) i could also offer to be an editor for the novel.
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i started reading this thinking it is an average gaming novel but the potential and way it is written make me believe it can go up to the level of King's avatar, but on the other hand grammar need a lot of work, use grammarly and write on Google docs it will help alot, am rooting for you and cheering ready for more chapters 🍁🍁