/ Games / Fate Online: Shadow
摘要
Tags: Power Couple, Action, Adventure, Romance, R-18, Virtual Reality, Comedy, Secret Identity, Overpowered MC, Male Protagonist and Female Lead.
The most feared Assassin in the world died because of vengeance.
What he didn't expect was instead of being sent to the nether world, he instead woke up on his younger self all before the time he became an Assassin.
Instead of going back to the life of living in the shadows. He instead decided to lead a new normal life this time and play the newly released Virtual Game, Fate Online!
Let's watch as he change the things that isn't supposed to happen while changing his fate along with it and watch him, on the road to becoming a top professional player.
Note: The Female Lead would have its own narration along in the story.
[Artwork: ptitvinc]
Release Update: 7 Chapters /week
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P.S - If you're gonna leave a low end review. Make sure its a constructive criticism, because I would certainly get it deleted, if it doesn't help me in improving my story.
I don't except hate reviews just to lower its rating because the story is premium.
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標籤
-- 收到的禮物 
-- 推薦票
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298評論
4.16
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
與他人分享您的想法
寫檢討
Wow this author is really shameless, 3 times of deleted review already cause it was getting likes from the readers since they can relate to what I said that it was full of inconsistency and we,with the author, even argued about it but dude just said "go make your own novel and make one thats better than harry potter lmao. So here I am again to make a review to counter your shamelessness of deleting low rating reviews. ** Im gonna make one again if you delete this again so yah
k... the novel is fine but there are a lot of things to improve on it, starting with. 1. Its been a while now since a lot of people point out that you wrote 28 years old in chapter 1 when it should be 18 and it still hasnt been fixed despite you thanking a reader for pointing it out and its been months!!!!. 2.world announcements as sometimes it shows the level of the monster, others, it dosnt. Its important for the level to be known as its a difference killing a lvl 10 boss while being same level than killing it while being lvl 30 for example. 3.At the start, it was said that the time was twice as long in the game but then it was said that it was only 12 hours longer and then it got increased that 1 real-world day is 2 days inside which is what was said from the start..... 3. the stats of Amanda in the game are way to high for someone level 7, her stats are 119 in total - 30 stats per level - 60 stats supposing she got all 10 like shadow = 29... Meaning her equipment adds 29 points to her stats in total, thats way to much...... either its that way, she got more than 10 in stats at the start or you messed that up. 4. It bothers me a lot the start of the novel with Shadow and Amanda having to run for accidentally instantly killing the senator's son by making him trip on a rock... even if that was enough to damage his head it won't be enough to instantly kill the guy unless he was to fall on his head from a few meters and im sure that he could have reached the hospital alive even if he were to die from bleeding inside the head. 4. it wasnt stated how the gang found out that mc "killed" the rich guy son. 5. how come Amanda was working full time as the boss of a restaurant if she was THAT good in the game and she could earn thousands dollars... dosnt makes sense and she is even higher level than MC and he is OP 6. Amanda's friend Jeny seems to be from a powerful family, how come she couldn't help Amanda from the rich guy? From what i can see, Jeny could have helped Amanda with no problems 7. how is it possible for a normal guy and girl to escape a hunt from a criminal gang plus the justice for killing a person, not to mention the senator's son!!!, the pair would captured fast and easy as they had a criminal organization and the government searching for them.... and even him becoming a high paid assassin while doing so lol... where did he even get the money for that!! 9. The mc calls little girl the sister of his friend but she is 18 years old, same age as the mc.... LOL 10. why he didnt buy a helmet for Tina? the sister of his best friend? 11. The mc wants money but as soon as he gets a new equipment he tosses the one he had out! lol, he can sell those! 12. Not much is known about the classes, not even the assasin class as what they can or cant do... Such as use 1 or 2 daggers 13. No world announcement was given when the mc CREATED a skill... you would think that such an amazing thing would create a world annoucement but nothing happened... All things considered, this leads me to believe that you dont have any guide while writing this nor you are keeping track of things. Its likely that you must go back to read what you wrote on X chapter to remember instead of writing down important things on a separate file. I recommend using excel or google sheets to keep track of things K... try to improve the world background a little and give some more physycal description of your characters. Pls be consistent with the information given
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Thank god for this story it made me regain some faith in the 'VRMMO' type its not the bull**** die because of betrayal in a game go back and do all of the secret quests. Its good because even though there is some bull in it there in no excess and it gives reasons for the stupid little things like the fact that he doesn't instantly adapt to his new weaker body or how he has to adapt to the game. Also thank god for no BS harem made out of tsundere famous rich girls just some slow romance. I love the romance aspect of this novel, just the little things that the woman remebers. The MC is alot more fresh than I expected, Being an assasin he doesn't shy away from murder outside of the game but still has enough character development to not just be the typical cold killer type. This novel is a lot of small details put together in weird ways to make strange thing that work very well. The MC isn't some diehard gamer that magicly gets an OP class then sudenly becomes rich and handsome he is a person who uses his skill to help him in the game but isn't constantly in the game, unlike most novels of this type the character spends a decent ammount of time out of the game.
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Needs a tonne of work, props to the author and I wish him/her the best of luck. I must say, the first chapter was imho, freaking terrible. It was all over the place, nonsensical mish mash of all the best stuff someone could think of for a modern day mc slapped together into an abomination called Michael. I seriously could not bring myself to read another chapter, I dont say this to discourage the author, it's hard to write! I understand that it isn't easy. This book needs some serious editing and the author needs to just sit and relax a bit, your mc never has to be the everything guy! The best things about characters in novels arent their perfections but their imperfections! All their flaws make them come alive and make your readers empathise with them through their journey! The best thing you can do for your audience is to make them always think about the qualities of our creations that resonate with them! Connecting with them makes your story stand out from the rest of the monotonous garbage that litters this app. You should (If you haven't already but suggesting by the hazardous writing that feels like its come straight from your head to being published) brain storm ideas, the direction you want to go, important antagonists and/or ideas for ones to come! Major turning points in your story that will affect your mc in major ways! These sort of plot points are needed so you can have some sort of direction to love in otherwise it becomes a mess, something that becomes harder to fix the longer you go. Never start the fillings before you've conquered your outline and outlook of where you want your story to go! You may not read this but I seriously hope this helps if you do kind regards
Asking for stones for this is an insult to all authors.You should try to write the plot on a piece of paper then see if what you write next actually fits with what is already there
It feels very fake and the quality is below average. Sorry, no offence. I read the first few chapters and it was very basic and the articulation was not smooth at all. Even the smallest of details and cause dislike and irritation to the reader. The plot was also not too in depth, it went into the story line so quick that it just doesn't feel right.
So I know the author is extremely sensitive in hearing negative reviews, but I have to be honest. As much as the premise does to serve the fans with things they (including myself) would like (such as VRMMO concepts, Romance, Strong powers etc.) It has a very important issue of execution. From the first chapter, I can quote what others have been saying which boils down to it "being all over the place". It tells us what is going on rather than showing, but in a very loose method. It does not keep a focus and ultimately, becomes uncomfortable to read. Each chapter should have a purpose. The *flow* and *transitioning* of each sentence and paragraph should be strong and easy to follow through. What I would advise is for the author to look at *how* other authors write their books. Yes, I say "how" becasue I feel that the writing style needs to change. It can get exhausting, especially if a lot of chapters have been completed. Let's say you learned a lot from other books and finally came up with a better style – it'd take a long time to fix all of it. I understand. However, if that's the case I would get an editor to help you out. There's plenty of authors who would do that in the discord for Webnovel/RoyalRoad. For other works, I'd analyze how Sword Art Online, Rising of the Shield Hero or Library of Heaven's Path wrote their chapters and their style of conveying their messages to their audience. Plot wise, make sure when writing a scene to imagine how the readers will feel about that scene when comparing it to the *previous chapters*. For example, if the main cast fought and won against a guild of people but then suffers against several weaker hunters later on, there should be a reason *why* they are struggling in the very least, or else it will leave them confused. Overall, great job with nearly 3 million views and good luck with the rest! 👍🏻
TL:DR Terrible grammar, inconsistent writing, and generally super cringy novel. Honestly, Extra Chapter 0 from Supreme Magus is a chapter pointing out cliches in novels, and this entire novel is basically the same as this one chapter. Mc kills " a powerful person"s son, goes on the run with a girl, she dies, he becomes "an assassin" that can supposedly dodge bullets, then goes on to get revenge and murder the entire family of the dead kid, including the employees working for them.Mc dies, travels back in time and starts playing a "VRMMO" in which he gets OP stats. Two(?) days after release there are already " experts" in the game or w/e. The game has time dilation so two days in are one day IRL. Then we get told that there is a limit of 10 hours playing in the game as well, to stop no-lifers. Mc wants to be with his waifu and he "meets" her again in a gym, where he proceeds to save her by punching a guy and knocking out his mate, which makes him fly 3 meters back and falls unconscious. His grill immediately leaves the gym so he "gives them another quick beating" before running outside after her. In the span of a couple of minutes(?) he beats these guys twice, they call their "powerful uncle (or w/e)" and he beats them again.
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The grammar is so atrocious but I like it so far but the grammar is definitely something that would make me want to drop this completely but other than that I'm enjoying it so far
Just reading the synopsis - 7 chapters a week (webnovel says 3). Guy die-revives decides to play a game. (OK. Why? Makes no sence.) Has a female lead tag, says a female character gonna appear later.. What? When? A single sentence would be enough. Or is is gonna reveal all the deepness? You gotta give more credit to the guy actually made your cover not just put his name in between a bunch of plain text, almost got it missed. Somewhat put a patreon link in there, with "addition to the story"? Not even going to comment on this. Worst of all - gonna delete undesired reviews because it is a "premium" novel. Whatever that means. If it is the webnovel's definition about "premium" it is nothing to be proud of.. Something else.. Then wow. I've seen people doing this "non constructive comments removal". It's just the worst possible function on here. Not all five star novels are good. Got this featured on log page. Might read/might not. If the novel's quality is the same as its description, better not. Best of constructive I could. 😘
this story had a lot of potential but it seems the author is writing it wrong. the author seems to not have planned out the story and just keeps adding whatever he wants even though it ruins the story he set at the start. *SPOILER* for example, he first describes the female MC as a helpless person but later says how she would have been able to defend herself. its really inconsistent and ruins the flow of the story. as for how to fix it, it seems the only way is to start the story again.
Read through the first 56 chapters, the story was nice & definitely had potential, but the lack of editing (especially in the early chaps) makes it somewhat difficult to get really absorbed into the novel itself. There were also some minor inconsistencies with in game data related things, but I'll put that down to grammar and editing too. Just somewhat sad I didn't really feel hooked enough on the story to want to continue reading after chapter 56 when the paywall hit. Thanks for a decent attempt author ❤ but honestly, please go back through the previous chapters and just run it through Microsoft Word or something just so it's a smoother read for us.
the thing that rlly bothers me about this novel is the inconsistency in the story and how everyone and their mothers are so gung-ho about pk-ing that its just a major turn off from the story. Like how you would skip the parts about the mc dungeoning and the spend 4-7 chapters about him getting pk-ed or mc pk-ing. the plot inconsistency is rlly bugging me out, like how you plotted out the story beforehand and then when u go to write it its nothing like the story you plotted out already, and more of just sitting down and improvising the whole thing. there was something i was rlly looking forward to later in the novel but all of a sudden getting that event pulled out from under my nose made me deduct major points from this novel. and idk about anyone else but when i read a novel about a game i like seeing the numbers, equip stats, player stats, dmg numbers and stuff like that. but having it all suddenly disappear for like 70 chapters only to have it reappear for like 2-3 chapters rlly grinds my gears(200 something chapters as of this review) most annying part is when u read the story it skips around and back like u forgot to mention something and just decided that all of a sudden it becomes canon. u cant be like "wow he just soloed a boss thats higher level than him" to all of a sudden "o hes not strong enough to take this boss on yet" inconsistency is the key if that was fixed id totally be onboard to continue reading but for now its a no for me. (** if this doesnt count as contructive criticism and gets deleted will be posting it multiple times till it doesnt)
dont drop it continue doing amazing job :) 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drop it continue doing amazing job :) llalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalat drop it continue doing amazing job :) llalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalat drop it continue doing amazing job :) llalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalallalalalalalalalat drop it continue doing amazing
I like this novel so far but there are wayyyyy to many grammar or spelling mistakes. The idea of this novel is good, being a game and real life story, instead lf others being only game and no outside game stories.
Has potential, but the many grammar errors and plot holes get under my skin, especially the grammar, which has mistakes so obvious one has to ask thenselves why it wasnt corrected after all this time. If that puts you off than i cant recommend this one for you, this novel still has its possitives, but i would give it more time so the author corrects the mistakes, untill then its not worth it.
I love the novel not because it was game/life kind of reality but the way the story is presented to the mind of we the readers . For me, I will say that the author did his work very well and now we're enjoying the it . Still waiting for more chapters 😃 . Shadow!!!
Honestly im much more interested in his real life.. he is like a ferocious tiger that looses his fangs and claws in the game.. he is the highest player but he always run even if his enemy is just low levels and a single party of 5 or 6.. btw im already chapter 130+ and im starting to loose interest in this novel.. i hope next chapters will see much improvement of the author.. good luck
Hey guys! ApocX here! If you didn't start reading this novel, I suggest you start right now. It is definitely something you will enjoy, especially for those VRMMO and Romance novel fans! ;) Don't mind the shameless 5 Star Rating. Update Schedule - Daily. I still have my main novel Stronghold In The Apocalypse to write so I can't write more. Enjoy reading! :) P.S If you leave a bad review for the story, then make sure it's something that would help in the improvement of the story, because I sure as hell would delete it.