/ Anime & Comics / arifureta: The shield demons and the demon of the abyss
摘要
from the creator of arifureta: from shield hero to demon king he creates another book called arifureta: the shield demon and the abyss. This isnt a continueation of the last fanfic but a new one. You the reader get killed by tank kun you got shot with an armor piercing round in a military parade because a drunk tank crew drove in a tank parade and drunkenly shot at you and chrushed your body you got reincarnated by god with 3 wishes. This is just a fanfic with a little konosuba like comedy and a romantic comedy
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寫檢討
Story idea- good Execution- it is incoherent at best with major skips in plot without giving the reader any idea to whats going on Also having unnecessary things happen IE. MC “evolves” when he was said to already hold his ultimate skills
Even the main idea was poor, the MC nerfed himself, the world background is 0 and the story feels so random it's just weird to read this ( and I only got to read almost the 1rst chapter and I feel super weird ) . . Sorry author but too many mistakes added , not many people like a comedy where there is no goal and everything is random.