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as Noah lay down beside the road, in unbearable agony
He reflected in his final moments.
"Finally, it's over, no more suffering, no more pain."
"I just hope that if there is a next life, I could live freely."
Follow Noah on his journey through Marvel, My Hero Academia, Bleach, and other realities.
Please be patient as this is my first time writing and English is not my first language.
I own nothing; this is merely a fanfic.
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Some issues are present such as how he gets to places, describing scenery or actions, and stuff like that. There’s also grammar issues, such as punctuation, capitalization, and spelling. It’s an interesting idea but you can go a lot more in depth and it would be better. Also I don’t suggest you having him tell everyone he’s a human but then say my people the Saiyans, it’s a contradiction.
Mc to ancient one: "we are powerful race of saiyans and we like to fight. Others would attack you without consent. But Because I am an ancestor to them, I have tons of more urge to fight. But because I was once a human I can controll myself." the conversation basicly went like this but I made it shorter so that it fits here.
Don’t really recommend. É ruim e o protagonista aje como um humano, mesmo sendo um sayajin, e aliás ele também tem um nome humano, Noah, nome lixo pra um sayajin.
Bro,The grammar is so bad it feels like I'm reading a mtl that a machine translated with it's single core,limited vocabulary and limited symbols. You could really use an editor or grammarly.
If you want my honest opinion it's not that bad me personally I like it. [img=recommend][img=update]
Why is the update so slow I need More, more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more.
Is technically readable about don't expect it to make sense. MC seems to be able to guess at anything and everything including the mechanics behind reality. Spends an eternity alone in a void and doesn't change. Is Super Saiyan 4 before he even talks to anyone. Epically strange as he isn't stomping people so why make him OP then nerf him?
this is a cool story but chapter 3 is a very trash chapter maybe even those of you who read it can just skip it because it really doesn't make sense but overall this novel is really very good u must read it but remember skip chapter 3 oh and 1 more mc is narcisstic that not even hesitate to flaunt his weaknesses
Not sure why this story gets a lot of bad reviews sure grammar isn’t great but if that mattered to you being on webnovel reading an ff wouldn’t make much sense the story is good and funny at times
not bad could use more work describing stuff but it's entertaining made me cuckle a few times so all good
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Tldr: author needs to work on his writing moments of great writing are there. the plot points are good and I enjoyed the chapters that were published, it’s unfinished (currently 40 chp) author has very good potential. I mean the writing definitely isn’t perfect dispite that, I really enjoyed this one. However it is unfinished, it hasn’t been updated in a while the early chapters aren’t great, but I liked the backstory. I also have to say that sometimes people have OP characters with no personality this one is actually a decent one. His writing isn’t great but his plot points and the idea behind his writing is great, writing takes time to learn and get good at this author has interesting ideas plot points. I like the potential of this author and this book. So dispite giving it a 3.4 overall I have to say I wouldn’t be surprised if in the future I write a 4.6 overall on something of his. Or maybe higher.
great story man everything is good but at some points story feels a little bit confusing but it's not problem for me but well you have already received reviews about bad story so just ignore them and continue writing story and also please update at least 2 chapters a week If you can
Is just the author transcribing his fantasy with no thought process behind the story, not to mention the trashing of any individuality of different characters
Oh say can you see by the dawns early light something somthing I can’t remember the rest
Don’t really recommend, bad writing, which seems to be so common
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