摘要
This book is about Zyair Rhett, a 20 year old man who uncovers the Star of the moon,which had been an artefact many factions fought to acquire. The love interest Xander Ivor is the Chief of the Southern Region of Synedia, while Zyair is under the Chief of the Eastern region Emmanuel Andres. The son of his chief, Silas knocks on his door one day and asks for assistance in his post 18 mission, Silas and Zyair later become sworn friends. However the mission is located in territory owned by Xander hence Zyair comes face to face with his nemesis once again. This is the beginning of a story of yearning and understanding.
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Only 3 chaps out there so I can't comprehend a solid review. Still, I'll try my best. Stability, I don't need to comment on that, same problems as I have :D Writing Quality is lacking in some spots, but with editing it can be fixed in no time. Development of the Character, Story, and the World is quite interesting for me, not gonna lie. Overall, a good story if you decide to give it a second chance...
[From: The Best Review Swap - Proofreading and Feedback] Since it has only two chapter, I couldn't deep more in the story, however there are some point that could be improved: - The POV is really confusing sometimes. Often I'm confuse if its a narrator or the MC, its seem you mixed Third Person Point of View with First Person Point of View. I recommend to review it, because otherwise it would be a blocker for some readers. All in all, keep up the good work :)