/ Anime & Comics / A Viltrumite in MHA (My Hero/Boku no My hero Academia ff) (OC)
摘要
A young college student dies and is transported to the My Hero Academia world with the powers of a hero. Watch as Julian aspires to become a hero in a world where what it means to be one is clouded behind fame, money, and politics.
This world is much darker than MHA is in cannon and will deal with a variety of heavy/graphic topics. There are a some things I will avoid for obvious reasons but in general expect a darker tone than what the anime portrays (at least the first few seasons).
Image doesn't belong to me, dm if u want me to take it down
might become a world-hopping fic later depends on how it is received/how I feel.
update schedule is whatever chapters I wrote that week released on the weekend. Though there might be none depending on external factors and time.
Please point anything that doesn't make sense/isn't explained, also if any of yall can link a youtube video or article on things like improving dialogue or writing. Any recommendations/critcism is strongly encouraged because I want to get better at writing. Peace
tw: graphic violence/sensitive topics
標籤
-- 推薦票
榜單 
-- 推薦票 你也許也喜歡
3評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
與他人分享您的想法
寫檢討
Writing quality: 4/5; good grammar, but many of the paragraphs are fused together. Update stability: 4/5; we only have 4 chapters, so there's not much to say. Story development: 3/5; the MC's backstory is confusing, basically he's a college student who died in some way that isn't explained properly, he simply got shot 4 times without any kind of antecedent that motivated the occurrence and died because he lost too much blood. Character design: 1/5; the MC is someone who was born and raised in a place with apparently high crime rates and precarious financial conditions, he was a college student who was seeking a degree in a medical field with only 2 years left to complete his training taking into account that it is a medical field and that the initial age range of a college student is approximately 19 to 20 years old and there were 2 years left to complete the training he should be around 25 and 26 years old together with the 12 years of memory of his second life where he experienced a model of an abusive family he should at least have the mentality of someone who is 37 years old which clearly does not match the MC's naive way of thinking, even if he is naturally a good person and is forced to act as a hero due to the "hero's curse" he should not think in such a naive way he would be more focused on a neutral-good character than this character of an elementary school child with a suicidal hero complex, I do not mean to say that helping people is a bad thing, but he should not stop doing it what he is doing to save all the people in his field of vision or act as if he owes an incalculable debt to all the people he knows, of course he has to be cautious and polite to maintain an accessible image for the public and his colleagues, but he doesn't need to act as if he depends on these people to stay alive. World context: 4/5; it's good to have a more realistic and direct background than the constant antics and stupid actions shown by the characters in the original work.
5/5 Fanfic you should read! (definitely not biased) I bet the author has 2 tortillas and at least 48 cents. On a real note though I genuinely think its pretty good and I hope people enjoy it. :)
This is really good. It written really well and very cohesive. That introduction and back story were dark but really cool how you showcased the world.