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well... ita not bad. author just dosnt really knows how to write well and there are some holes in his story and mistakes and contradictions. Such as soul cultivation, mc says nobody in the village knows much about it and that level 2 allows for spiritual sense (radar) of 10 meters. but his father was outside of the house in the main plaza but could sense mc despite being far away from his home. Thus making his father spiritual sense at least 500 meters. thus the contradiction. also author skips stuff without noticing, at one moment the father was in the plaza, at the next was in the protagonist room. It was not mentioned he moved
I don't have problem with bad grammer and spelling mistakes, but what i have problem is with how system and his father are babysitting a 18 year old. He is 18 for god's sake man.
BRUH THE AUTHOR REALLY LIKES TO MESS WITH BLOODLINES. YOU CAN MAKE A Dragon Ball X Cultivation without a "System" and make the bloodline a saiyan only That way the author has no way to mess with bloodlines and having to Early Op MC. and the readers now can read a real "Weak To Strong" Genre.
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I like this story a whole bunch, I hope more authors wright stories like this. I hope this story continues. If I had the $ to pay for more I would.
Light Spoilers. Didn't hit the spoiler button because paragraph separations disappear when I do. The first 50 percent was good. But the author merced his own story with a stupid joke that turned out to not be a joke. You might find the mc's rival being named Giga Chad hilarious but I don't. And that's not to mention how poorly written into the story he actually was. It broke the vibes the story had been building the entire story. Anyway, be forewarned so maybe this doesn't bug you as much as it did me. I was honestly enjoying this story before Giga Chad became a central part. Total score 2.6 Writing Quality - 3. Neither good or bad. I didn't notice either way. Stability of Updates - 4. I never give 5 unless a story is completed. But 4 is well deserved for stable updates. Story Development - 1. Because F you. (Story is a 4 without Giga tho) Character Design - 1. Because F Giga. (Would have been a 3) World Background - 4. Honestly very interesting.