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first 10 chaps is okay, anyone could put a reasoning with MC, but beyond that, was absolutely hot shit, pure disappointment, all his actions are brainless, he is now putting his, and Peter family in constant watch of SHIELD and HYDRA....
OK writing quality isn't bad, world background gets 1 star because it is a marvel amalgam world amalgam worlds always lose the plot trying to keep up with all the crap going on. Story development gets one star because the system is both sapient and sassy which is gay on a level that would have Sulu from star trek yelling OH MY! character design is also the same reason. I just personally find it unreadable mostly due to the system.
I've read quite a few chapters, but these chapters showed me that the main character is dumb, and why he's dumb, because he had a chance to summon any character of a hero or a villain, but he summoned a weak, mentally ill character. But this is only the beginning , and degradation is already taking place .
揭示劇透Great idea/picture you are trying to build. I love the characters and the powers they are getting, and thinking of what characters would do with their abilities is exciting. But this story loses when it comes to development, everything seems rushed. And loses a lot of the tension in characters developing an ability slowly and starting of mid and getting better as the story develops. I have a lot of hope for this fanfic and that it would be great if author decides to further expand it. So far enjoying the creativity, thanks👌
this is my cue to leave byeee..... 1.-you know first of all there is no need for universal hopping,or what you call world hopping because the marvel universe is fucking huge and if you explore you can write 1000 chapters easily no author has done that till now you know, one author got really close by completing 600 chapters in marvel universe and I fucking salute that 🫡🫡 2.- there are so many ways to get powers aside from the intelegent gene 🧬 shit and magical shit you could have gone to where you learn how to use chi bro everyone in that universe has chi and this is just one example even the original marvel writers haven't tapped in the whole uses of chi but that's nothing to complain. 3.- and what's the point in making every single AI a female I don't get this point of every author . I mean yea it's a harem story I know that but in every mans's life there should be one bro even if he is brother from another mother or your system for example . 4.- and one last point if you are making a harem story please do one that is to make every cool guy in the story to have atleast 2 wife's because I don't believe that every girl will just like our MC you know there are fucking God of thunder Iron Man, Captain america if these three MFs don't have a harem then it will be very unrealistic and boring ... so sorry author I know it's a good story but I won't be in your rest of the jerney .. good luck .. and please don't thake any offence about the review it's just my thoughts for all the writers not just you so please 🙏🥺 sorry 😔
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first 10 chaps is okay, anyone could put a reasoning with MC, but beyond that, was absolutely hot shit, pure disappointment, all his actions are brainless, he is now putting his, and Peter family in constant watch of SHIELD and HYDRA....
OK writing quality isn't bad, world background gets 1 star because it is a marvel amalgam world amalgam worlds always lose the plot trying to keep up with all the crap going on. Story development gets one star because the system is both sapient and sassy which is gay on a level that would have Sulu from star trek yelling OH MY! character design is also the same reason. I just personally find it unreadable mostly due to the system.
I've read quite a few chapters, but these chapters showed me that the main character is dumb, and why he's dumb, because he had a chance to summon any character of a hero or a villain, but he summoned a weak, mentally ill character. But this is only the beginning , and degradation is already taking place .
揭示劇透Great idea/picture you are trying to build. I love the characters and the powers they are getting, and thinking of what characters would do with their abilities is exciting. But this story loses when it comes to development, everything seems rushed. And loses a lot of the tension in characters developing an ability slowly and starting of mid and getting better as the story develops. I have a lot of hope for this fanfic and that it would be great if author decides to further expand it. So far enjoying the creativity, thanks👌
this is my cue to leave byeee..... 1.-you know first of all there is no need for universal hopping,or what you call world hopping because the marvel universe is fucking huge and if you explore you can write 1000 chapters easily no author has done that till now you know, one author got really close by completing 600 chapters in marvel universe and I fucking salute that 🫡🫡 2.- there are so many ways to get powers aside from the intelegent gene 🧬 shit and magical shit you could have gone to where you learn how to use chi bro everyone in that universe has chi and this is just one example even the original marvel writers haven't tapped in the whole uses of chi but that's nothing to complain. 3.- and what's the point in making every single AI a female I don't get this point of every author . I mean yea it's a harem story I know that but in every mans's life there should be one bro even if he is brother from another mother or your system for example . 4.- and one last point if you are making a harem story please do one that is to make every cool guy in the story to have atleast 2 wife's because I don't believe that every girl will just like our MC you know there are fucking God of thunder Iron Man, Captain america if these three MFs don't have a harem then it will be very unrealistic and boring ... so sorry author I know it's a good story but I won't be in your rest of the jerney .. good luck .. and please don't thake any offence about the review it's just my thoughts for all the writers not just you so please 🙏🥺 sorry 😔