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over half the flipping story is nothing but a side arc and is useless I suggest people to read other books/fanfic instead if this one as thier is basically no story worth reading here it was good and decently ok side arc at the beginning but at this point this story is just bad and im not really one to give bad reviews or even suggest different books because I believe that while my opinion matters is should either only give a good review because even if I dont like the story I can just not make a reveiw and move on but this thing as just horendous to read and most of the world background was already their considered this book is a fan fic thier is way better stories out their and if suggest you look else where
Honestly i loved this story but now it's just awful with the arc "the touch" who is just a litteral flashback that tell us nothing related to the story
don't even bother .......the main story is shorter than the side story like by 2 times I have a feeling that the side story is infact another novel
liked the concept and all that, its just why does the main character not make anything of the memories he was given by the allspark? i mean i get it, if he made anything revolutionary and it got to the wrong hands, its gonna be a bad thing! but cant he like make a base for himself? i mean he can take a forest and make it cybertronian metal in a second(though it was accindental), like he can find a cave and do that and he has a secret base to make do of the memories he got and make life and shit. but no all he does is run around making super cars! thats awesome and all but why does he have to search for scrapped car parts? again he can make metal out of anything and its gonna be tougher than any earth metal he can find! if your're gonna doubt what i said and say he has to find the parts he cant make, well it was mentioned in the story that the main character has the memories of all the dead tramsformers, im assuming the primes are parts of those memories AND if im not wrong solus prime is in there to who by the way is a blacksmith and imventor. im pretty sure he make all the parts he needs. and then theres the later parts of the story! i mean i get that you want us to know how prime got matrix of leadership and how megatron became megatron, but come on! the story was just getting interseting for the main character! he was getting chased by megatron, theres the mysterious queen of the forest transformer, and then she and optimus meets for the first time and then the revelation that the original vessel for the allspark is in the hands of the military, and you gave us a big cliff hanger in the form of a very very long arc wow!!! youre amazing( its long beacuse the update speed is abbysmal)
Love the story. Like the main character became very smart. Love to read more. Don't stop writing. You have my support.
i love the original part of the story but afterwards it becomes the touch and i hate that it doesnt have any use reading that crap. if you want to write a story about the backstory of Transformers go ahead but then dont give us false hope with the first arc
bro just stop with the flashback you made it long 47 chapter with only flashback at this rate you will have to delete the 1 to 40 chapter and make the original transformers animation.
Author, i would like to ask just how many more chapters are there in the backstory, since although its long as hell I'm still kinda liking the story overall, but peoples patience are limited so I'll probably stack up on chapters for a while, before reading it again. Last chapter read:60
First of FINALLY A TRANSFORMER NOVEL HAS RISEN ONCE AGAIN, and it’s one with great potential. Thought it maybe slow paced but I believe the author is cooking in order make a better reading experience and it working. The author is prepping NEWER people who haven’t seen/investigated the transformers universe in depth though there are multiple, so yeah can be confusing. But for those looking to see an interesting take on transformer give this a try and stick with it. CAUSE IT SLOW COOKIN. So far the Grammar is quality is fine except for some spelling mistake here and there. Story is also good for those that can ignore minute plot holes,but damm does the author get the transformers lookin clean in there description.[img=update] Author your doin great keep goin!
bruhhhhhhh one arc has more chapters than all the previous ones combined, AND ITS STILL ONGOING, at this point i forgot about the F*CKING MC because of how long it's been just for a back story arc
Story was completely derailed by the prequel stuff. At this point half the story is just fluff
When the history was getting good the author decided to flood chapters with Cybertron flashbacks which weren't important to the fanfic plot, it's more than half of the chapters now and to worse the situation the author doesn't replies to our comments, it's disappointing.
trash absolute trash better off dropped or just fuckn change the name to something like Cybertron origins and delete the first few chapters cause this is shit
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So love the concept of the story, a human with the powers of the allsparks and that isn't going crazy really cool honestly. But where I have a problem is that after chap 40 there is a flashback don't get me wrong I understand that flashback a important for a story development, but his one is 40 chap f.. ING long witch is crazy. I mean I can hardly remember the mc and the story. The flash back even started on a cliffhanger wich is the only reason the book is still in my library. I don't really care about what happened on cybertron what I care about is the mc and his story. Sorry for venting but I thought I should post this here so future reader know what they are getting themselves into. Ps: I understand if you love the long flashback. And please don't take into account the score because I'm my option if you put so much effort in detailing the past (as annoying as it is) you world background is detailed. If I had to put a score it would be 1.5 max because of the F.. ING long flashback. That's the thing is only one not several but one. Again sorry for venting
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author spends 40+ chapter going over optimus and megaton history but I'd quite literally would recommend that if/when the author moves past it that you should read up to the first 'the touch' chapter and just watch the transformers origin movie then skip the chapter until you get past 'the touch'
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This story is nice, it's the first time I encountered a quality transformer well. The only problem is that you wrote well even though you don't know English. I am not a professional reader and I use Google Translate when reading such stories. I also liked the character. The only bad thing is that it ends after the back part, the story will progress well.
The story and world are really amazing and I absolutely love the character interactions. It feels like real dialogue and doesn't feel repetitive. I tried to do this with as little spoils so sorry about that
God i love this book,it makes me laugh while also keeping me entertained and looking foward to the next chapther,please keep writhing this fanfic that not only is a unique and new idea,but also well balanced on humor and plot on my opinion and i like very much,keep up the great job. 👍🤩 (Sorry for the bad English,it's not my first language)
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Change the name of the story to: The Touch. Seriously, I have nothing against one flashback or another, but there are already 34 chapters, and it's still a flashback. Not all Naruto animes have so many flashbacks, not to mention the “Protagonist”, who is another extra, extremely nerfed. Other than that, good job!!
welcome to a novel whose name is actually "The Touch", where we just do a rehash of that one animated transformers movie about the origin of Optimus prime that nobody cares to watch because the author can't think of an original story to write so they are stalling for time, burning more of it than the actual movie that they are putting into text is long.
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can you please go back to the mc he is the recently I start reading the story. the cybertronian it's good, but not as great as the first half of the series
The first chapters are alright. It gets better until there is 30+ chapters where it’s all about cybertrons past and nothing about the mc is talked about.
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This book is not very good. Main character has like no brains for how old he is. But definitely readable and make sense however when you get to the touch say goodbye to the main character
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He drags a single section/arc/flashback into 31 and probably more chapters even the begining which is sort of ok becomes trash because he does not practice or use the power of the all spark leading him to be inept and weak when he had 300,000 years to do so and it is just pathetic.
too bad 😞 I can't give 0 stars, this sucks worst transformers history book ever
over half the flipping story is nothing but a side arc and is useless I suggest people to read other books/fanfic instead if this one as thier is basically no story worth reading here it was good and decently ok side arc at the beginning but at this point this story is just bad and im not really one to give bad reviews or even suggest different books because I believe that while my opinion matters is should either only give a good review because even if I dont like the story I can just not make a reveiw and move on but this thing as just horendous to read and most of the world background was already their considered this book is a fan fic thier is way better stories out their and if suggest you look else where
Honestly i loved this story but now it's just awful with the arc "the touch" who is just a litteral flashback that tell us nothing related to the story
don't even bother .......the main story is shorter than the side story like by 2 times I have a feeling that the side story is infact another novel
liked the concept and all that, its just why does the main character not make anything of the memories he was given by the allspark? i mean i get it, if he made anything revolutionary and it got to the wrong hands, its gonna be a bad thing! but cant he like make a base for himself? i mean he can take a forest and make it cybertronian metal in a second(though it was accindental), like he can find a cave and do that and he has a secret base to make do of the memories he got and make life and shit. but no all he does is run around making super cars! thats awesome and all but why does he have to search for scrapped car parts? again he can make metal out of anything and its gonna be tougher than any earth metal he can find! if your're gonna doubt what i said and say he has to find the parts he cant make, well it was mentioned in the story that the main character has the memories of all the dead tramsformers, im assuming the primes are parts of those memories AND if im not wrong solus prime is in there to who by the way is a blacksmith and imventor. im pretty sure he make all the parts he needs. and then theres the later parts of the story! i mean i get that you want us to know how prime got matrix of leadership and how megatron became megatron, but come on! the story was just getting interseting for the main character! he was getting chased by megatron, theres the mysterious queen of the forest transformer, and then she and optimus meets for the first time and then the revelation that the original vessel for the allspark is in the hands of the military, and you gave us a big cliff hanger in the form of a very very long arc wow!!! youre amazing( its long beacuse the update speed is abbysmal)
Love the story. Like the main character became very smart. Love to read more. Don't stop writing. You have my support.
i love the original part of the story but afterwards it becomes the touch and i hate that it doesnt have any use reading that crap. if you want to write a story about the backstory of Transformers go ahead but then dont give us false hope with the first arc
bro just stop with the flashback you made it long 47 chapter with only flashback at this rate you will have to delete the 1 to 40 chapter and make the original transformers animation.
Author, i would like to ask just how many more chapters are there in the backstory, since although its long as hell I'm still kinda liking the story overall, but peoples patience are limited so I'll probably stack up on chapters for a while, before reading it again. Last chapter read:60
First of FINALLY A TRANSFORMER NOVEL HAS RISEN ONCE AGAIN, and it’s one with great potential. Thought it maybe slow paced but I believe the author is cooking in order make a better reading experience and it working. The author is prepping NEWER people who haven’t seen/investigated the transformers universe in depth though there are multiple, so yeah can be confusing. But for those looking to see an interesting take on transformer give this a try and stick with it. CAUSE IT SLOW COOKIN. So far the Grammar is quality is fine except for some spelling mistake here and there. Story is also good for those that can ignore minute plot holes,but damm does the author get the transformers lookin clean in there description.[img=update] Author your doin great keep goin!
bruhhhhhhh one arc has more chapters than all the previous ones combined, AND ITS STILL ONGOING, at this point i forgot about the F*CKING MC because of how long it's been just for a back story arc
Story was completely derailed by the prequel stuff. At this point half the story is just fluff
When the history was getting good the author decided to flood chapters with Cybertron flashbacks which weren't important to the fanfic plot, it's more than half of the chapters now and to worse the situation the author doesn't replies to our comments, it's disappointing.
trash absolute trash better off dropped or just fuckn change the name to something like Cybertron origins and delete the first few chapters cause this is shit
揭示劇透 So love the concept of the story, a human with the powers of the allsparks and that isn't going crazy really cool honestly. But where I have a problem is that after chap 40 there is a flashback don't get me wrong I understand that flashback a important for a story development, but his one is 40 chap f.. ING long witch is crazy. I mean I can hardly remember the mc and the story. The flash back even started on a cliffhanger wich is the only reason the book is still in my library. I don't really care about what happened on cybertron what I care about is the mc and his story. Sorry for venting but I thought I should post this here so future reader know what they are getting themselves into. Ps: I understand if you love the long flashback. And please don't take into account the score because I'm my option if you put so much effort in detailing the past (as annoying as it is) you world background is detailed. If I had to put a score it would be 1.5 max because of the F.. ING long flashback. That's the thing is only one not several but one. Again sorry for venting
揭示劇透 author spends 40+ chapter going over optimus and megaton history but I'd quite literally would recommend that if/when the author moves past it that you should read up to the first 'the touch' chapter and just watch the transformers origin movie then skip the chapter until you get past 'the touch'
揭示劇透 This story is nice, it's the first time I encountered a quality transformer well. The only problem is that you wrote well even though you don't know English. I am not a professional reader and I use Google Translate when reading such stories. I also liked the character. The only bad thing is that it ends after the back part, the story will progress well.
The story and world are really amazing and I absolutely love the character interactions. It feels like real dialogue and doesn't feel repetitive. I tried to do this with as little spoils so sorry about that
God i love this book,it makes me laugh while also keeping me entertained and looking foward to the next chapther,please keep writhing this fanfic that not only is a unique and new idea,but also well balanced on humor and plot on my opinion and i like very much,keep up the great job. 👍🤩 (Sorry for the bad English,it's not my first language)
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Change the name of the story to: The Touch. Seriously, I have nothing against one flashback or another, but there are already 34 chapters, and it's still a flashback. Not all Naruto animes have so many flashbacks, not to mention the “Protagonist”, who is another extra, extremely nerfed. Other than that, good job!!
welcome to a novel whose name is actually "The Touch", where we just do a rehash of that one animated transformers movie about the origin of Optimus prime that nobody cares to watch because the author can't think of an original story to write so they are stalling for time, burning more of it than the actual movie that they are putting into text is long.
揭示劇透 can you please go back to the mc he is the recently I start reading the story. the cybertronian it's good, but not as great as the first half of the series
The first chapters are alright. It gets better until there is 30+ chapters where it’s all about cybertrons past and nothing about the mc is talked about.
揭示劇透 This book is not very good. Main character has like no brains for how old he is. But definitely readable and make sense however when you get to the touch say goodbye to the main character
揭示劇透 He drags a single section/arc/flashback into 31 and probably more chapters even the begining which is sort of ok becomes trash because he does not practice or use the power of the all spark leading him to be inept and weak when he had 300,000 years to do so and it is just pathetic.
too bad 😞 I can't give 0 stars, this sucks worst transformers history book ever