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I was originally going to give this fic 3 stars, but I reduced it to 2 because no matter how much the protagonist cultivates or strengthens herself, the author always nerfs her in battles. In her last development, it was mentioned that she had the body of a physically cultivated person capable of destroying a small mountain, but when she entered combat against the white walkers, she fought more or less at Mance's level and needed his help to win against the white walker officers. I have mixed feelings about this fic. On one hand, the concept is interesting and full of potential, and the fic has some good kingdom-building scenarios. On the other hand, the protagonist, who is supposed to be a reincarnated cultivator, acts more like a child or teenager, and the fic constantly insists on endless moments of pity when the protagonist interacts with her family, which really makes her seem immature. Another negative point is that despite all the kingdom-building, the protagonist doesn't use her subordinates for much other than gathering resources and information, but at the same time, she doesn't commit to simply killing enemies, resulting in a strange plot where the protagonist runs around saving her family all the time but rarely deals with the problem. he cultivation is also kind of bad, and the protagonist is afraid of cultivating because it's dangerous, so she decided to stop advancing. In conclusion, it's an average to below average fic. I recommend reading it because it really seems like the fic will be concluded and it's still worth reading, but don't expect any masterpiece or even something very good.
I like somewhat where this is going, but there's some problems that needs adressing. First of all, the spelling. Spelling mistakes everywhere. Fix it or get an editor. Second, There's no scene changes anywhere, so it's pretty confusing when it jumps from different places and sometimes with the same POV which means that time has passed without notice. Third, impossible large amount of stuff like money. Like please... 14 million gold from a maester??? 21 thousand ships made in what? A year? 3 Years? It's hard to know because you skip that information. I don't believe that Olivia can make that many ships. Maybe take it back a notch, like at maximum 100 ships. And even then it's quite a lot.
It's kind of entertaining but I sometimes wonder if the mc has bipolar or something,her mood swings are crazy.
This is a Top-Tier Fanfic. The translations is good enough and the story behind it is entertaining to read. There is thankfully no romance as of yet (31).
Tbh I just tank the story development cuz the mc is always asking for pity like bruh I know for sure she can leave if she really don't wanna stay. She's rich, she has capable subordinate and all. But all of those are shite when Ned and her is in the same room and he ask him for something she does not like then she babbles abuse this and that, bruh. If you don't wanna do something about it then leave.
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Not a fan of cultivation types I usually don’t bother to read them (prob wouldn’t have read this if it had a cultivation tag or in summary) but this is a very good read I was debating on dropping it when I heard the cultivation talk in the first couple chapters but kept reading anyway honestly so happy I did I keep checking for new chapter every few hours bc webnovel isn’t sending me notifications when it updates oddly All I gotta say is keep cooking author👍🏽
Enjoyed it quite a bit for the first 30 chapters. Quite a few spelling errors but it was still mostly readable. Some things such as quantity of ships built or the strength/speed of enhanced people or the quantity of money seems exaggerated and too unrealistic even with the AU changes to the world and characters. Just comparing what others have compared to what the MC and her faction has the difference is too large and exaggerated. After reading the ending of chapter 1 I decided to stop reading. Danny is my fav character and to know that nothing has changed for her even up to the point of her brothers death just bothers me. Thanks for the read so far but this is where I part with this story. Good luck author and I hope to read other stories of yours in the future.
揭示劇透 I was originally going to give this fic 3 stars, but I reduced it to 2 because no matter how much the protagonist cultivates or strengthens herself, the author always nerfs her in battles. In her last development, it was mentioned that she had the body of a physically cultivated person capable of destroying a small mountain, but when she entered combat against the white walkers, she fought more or less at Mance's level and needed his help to win against the white walker officers. I have mixed feelings about this fic. On one hand, the concept is interesting and full of potential, and the fic has some good kingdom-building scenarios. On the other hand, the protagonist, who is supposed to be a reincarnated cultivator, acts more like a child or teenager, and the fic constantly insists on endless moments of pity when the protagonist interacts with her family, which really makes her seem immature. Another negative point is that despite all the kingdom-building, the protagonist doesn't use her subordinates for much other than gathering resources and information, but at the same time, she doesn't commit to simply killing enemies, resulting in a strange plot where the protagonist runs around saving her family all the time but rarely deals with the problem. he cultivation is also kind of bad, and the protagonist is afraid of cultivating because it's dangerous, so she decided to stop advancing. In conclusion, it's an average to below average fic. I recommend reading it because it really seems like the fic will be concluded and it's still worth reading, but don't expect any masterpiece or even something very good.
I like somewhat where this is going, but there's some problems that needs adressing. First of all, the spelling. Spelling mistakes everywhere. Fix it or get an editor. Second, There's no scene changes anywhere, so it's pretty confusing when it jumps from different places and sometimes with the same POV which means that time has passed without notice. Third, impossible large amount of stuff like money. Like please... 14 million gold from a maester??? 21 thousand ships made in what? A year? 3 Years? It's hard to know because you skip that information. I don't believe that Olivia can make that many ships. Maybe take it back a notch, like at maximum 100 ships. And even then it's quite a lot.
It's kind of entertaining but I sometimes wonder if the mc has bipolar or something,her mood swings are crazy.
This is a Top-Tier Fanfic. The translations is good enough and the story behind it is entertaining to read. There is thankfully no romance as of yet (31).
Tbh I just tank the story development cuz the mc is always asking for pity like bruh I know for sure she can leave if she really don't wanna stay. She's rich, she has capable subordinate and all. But all of those are shite when Ned and her is in the same room and he ask him for something she does not like then she babbles abuse this and that, bruh. If you don't wanna do something about it then leave.
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Not a fan of cultivation types I usually don’t bother to read them (prob wouldn’t have read this if it had a cultivation tag or in summary) but this is a very good read I was debating on dropping it when I heard the cultivation talk in the first couple chapters but kept reading anyway honestly so happy I did I keep checking for new chapter every few hours bc webnovel isn’t sending me notifications when it updates oddly All I gotta say is keep cooking author👍🏽
Enjoyed it quite a bit for the first 30 chapters. Quite a few spelling errors but it was still mostly readable. Some things such as quantity of ships built or the strength/speed of enhanced people or the quantity of money seems exaggerated and too unrealistic even with the AU changes to the world and characters. Just comparing what others have compared to what the MC and her faction has the difference is too large and exaggerated. After reading the ending of chapter 1 I decided to stop reading. Danny is my fav character and to know that nothing has changed for her even up to the point of her brothers death just bothers me. Thanks for the read so far but this is where I part with this story. Good luck author and I hope to read other stories of yours in the future.
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