3評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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寫檢討
It is my first work, I put a lot of affection and effort into each chapter and although I procrastinate a little, I hope that the others also like it. Thank you for your support
Nice Story. Keep it on Library. I think MC has a potential to be Good Neutral Character. I just hope MC not so Over Power and MC can death if he make mistake in battle. Background story for MC with another Character is good, they (MC and His Friend) still think and act like toddler, its a good Point for me. Really i just hope MC is not so OP because it will ruin MC friendship and MC background. at least i hope MC friend can keep up with MC in term Battle Power.
Well the guy is weirdly immature considering his mental age, his ope ope power immediately takes away all his chakra and caused him to faint with just a shamble with a nearby log, this is not a good sign for the future. Also the old lady suddenly got a last stage cancer out of nowhere? It would be a good heads up if there were signs of it instead of “studying in school then suddenly your grandma is now in hospital cause of cancer”, which made the guy do a showcase of his abilities.
揭示劇透 It is my first work, I put a lot of affection and effort into each chapter and although I procrastinate a little, I hope that the others also like it. Thank you for your support
Nice Story. Keep it on Library. I think MC has a potential to be Good Neutral Character. I just hope MC not so Over Power and MC can death if he make mistake in battle. Background story for MC with another Character is good, they (MC and His Friend) still think and act like toddler, its a good Point for me. Really i just hope MC is not so OP because it will ruin MC friendship and MC background. at least i hope MC friend can keep up with MC in term Battle Power.
Well the guy is weirdly immature considering his mental age, his ope ope power immediately takes away all his chakra and caused him to faint with just a shamble with a nearby log, this is not a good sign for the future. Also the old lady suddenly got a last stage cancer out of nowhere? It would be a good heads up if there were signs of it instead of “studying in school then suddenly your grandma is now in hospital cause of cancer”, which made the guy do a showcase of his abilities.
揭示劇透