Daoist_Lake

Thanks but not Yandere in Harem. just call them Menhera. Yandere is good in Single Relationship than Multiple. Her Character will mess if she can tolerance with other women because MC want Harem.

Hello bro, thank to reply. Hah.... really bro this story really good, i always know this story. i already forgot some part in this story, after you rewrite/delete old chapter. i read it until 100 Chapter until Mike almost Choke up his wife because her Betrayal to having s*x with other man or at her child abortion trauma and training to have redemption for her betrayal from her husband that already broken heart too. Man, its really dark story, i don't know new version still have dark part of old story. But after that Betrayal Arc or Redemption Arc, you at Hiatus or Rewrite time for a long time on old story barely publish chapter once a month. i don't why. Then i just put your book at my library, even though i can't read again because its too DARK bro. i really appreciate DARK Novel, but you give me hope but also give me despair. And you put me at despair for a longggg time (Mike already overthrow old dictator, married Kaydin or KD-555*forgot his wife name* and has unborn child. But Mike must through his Wife Betrayal, Child Abortion and Almost have child with another man.) F*CK, but the most DARK in this story is you put Cliffhanger and Go Hiatus at the DARK time. When Mike already want kill his wife and then kill himself to end his misery, New Personality of KD-555 (Mike Wife) want save her Old Personality Husband, they attack each other.... after that you gone author. i forgot some chapter after that. But no matter my dissappoint for rewrite or Hiatus at Dark Time in this story. This story really awesome. At First time i read,i really excited too, but i really can't re-read again for Fourth Time at new version (i already re-read 3 time at old version long time ago). i really just want end MC (Mike) Misery Life. Or give him a new peace to forgot his misery life.

Writing Quality : I'am bad at grammar so i just read what i can read. Story Development : Good. i just love story with First Person View. I can know how what MC thinking and feel about his situation. Story is good, still slow-pace because MC already at War. atleast i don't have many time skip. Maybe what i can say cons in early chapter is : Too many monolog (but i just predict, MC still at dark side and don't open his heart), MC lack attachment with Character like Sandaime, Tsunade, Duy, Sakumo. Their dialog is too formal, don't feel like their are friend. But i know because MC is Anbu, and Nara Clan famous about efficient and don't involved unnecessary interaction. Atleast pros in this fanfic : MC cannot be Sudden Appear Hero/Hero Landing and Conflict don't solve because MC appear. Too many factor to accomplised his mission. But still briefly and Author need Buff his writing experience on this kind Conflict. Character Design : Still mystery to me. But atleast we know story MC start on Middle of His Life. so prepare to have many flashback. Maybe in future many problem MC Will appear from flashback. And i still don't know who Will solve this problem. Updating Stability : Dunno. World Background : this is what i can say excellent. What we know in Naruto About Second Shinobi War is brief and vague. Change PoV to another Character is good move. So we can know World Background from Change PoV Character and know situation from their perspective about Second Shinobi War, Relationship between Hidden Village/Clan, Politics Conflict between Upper Echelon Village and Head Clan. Overall. Good, and Satifiying Story for me. I already bored with Third Perspective Person (because we always know the situation all in control) and First Perspective Person always make me want read it, because i don't want MC become Omniscient dan Omnipresent to always know his situation (if he always know his situation, what Point to make the story? pick up girl? please give him suprise and don't all situation according to MC plan). I don't against Third Person PoV, every PoV has their advantage. First Perspective View : To know how character feeling and how character see the world through their perspective, it can be kind world or cruel world. Second Perspective View : its just for RPG/Otome Game. So reader can feels the Character talk to reader (i just know one fanfic who use this PoV, i just can say... its unsuccesfull. Because its really weird in Webnovel. and the author just drop the fanfic). Third Perspective View : Good for bigger Enviroment. its really good if you are strategist, you can see and cover all situation in large Scale. but minus in this view is we don't know Character Feels, because too vague. (Just see Chinese or Korean Novel, many MC from their story is Omnipresent if use this view). Thats all. Thanks to read my rant.