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RWBY: Oscar the gamer

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Oscar pine was chosen for many thing, the last thing he expected was to have what is it called oh or right, a system yeah he didn't expect that he just hopes this is the craziest thing to happen to him

MC: Oscar

ship: Oscar x Harem

so yeah this will my own type of system with it's one rules and everything, also yeah hope people like this

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angel_2771

Hello, I read the story and I must say it's good, but there are some things I don't like.An example would be writing,Sometimes it is difficult to read, for example, the third person, sometimes during the narration Oscar suddenly says something in the middle of the narration, and that is a bit confusing,What I want to suggest is at least if you want the character to speak with his name and then a colon so as not to confuse , example: Oscar: oh no, Beacon is going to fall, I have to avoid it. It is also better that you end the narration so that the character can speak, not that in the middle of the narration the character says something and continues the narration as if no one had spoken. Well, this is all the problem I had. Thank you for reading. I'm sorry if my English is bad.

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The_Ninja_king9138

This is not a review but something i am doing for this Fanfic, it is for more interaction with the community so yeah Per week 50 power stones = 1 Bonus Ch 100 power Stones = 2 to 3 Bonus Ch 20 CommentsNew Ch = Bonus Ch for the next Ch (This has to be done in one day, and had too be 20 different people) 40 Comments for new Ch = Double upload the whole next Week (This has to be done in one day, and had too be 40 different people) Keeping this fanfic in the Top 5 = Bonus Ch on Monday

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Daoist369280

One question, if this is a rewrite of the previous version, does it mean that you will make several changes to it because if so, I'm looking forward to it in another note since you made a story giving Oscar the lead role instead of the usual thing, which would be to use Jaune or ruby otaught that in the future you could do a husttia using whitley to see how you get on developing the skills of the youngest of the schnne otthought you could make it more strategic or combine the glyphs with a fighting style that allows him to use a gun and sword like Nero from DMC(Devil May Cry) What do you think of the idea?

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mc_broz

So what do I think of the story? it not bad but it dose need work. The story in it self is good, good pacing maybe a bit slow but that’s not a bad thing. Over all it is a good read

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MKKcalb

I love RWBY, it's good to see a story with Oscar as the protagonist, the most underrated character in the anime. It's fun to see the character being explored and trained without needing a manipulative idiot full of secrets like Ozpin. I hope your story goes far, friend, don't abandon it out of nowhere.

1mth
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VictorElderblood

it's looking good so far so keep up the amazing work

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Tasma_Yeasmin

This is a fun read and a fun story, so far i have enjoyed it very much, would have been 5 star if not for the First 4 Ch, Other wishes this is a good and enjoyable story, So people don't Judge it by the first 4 Ch

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Siya_Pack

I like the story so far please keep up the good work And can you please speed the ships up a bit and I suggest you give rwby Ragna the blood egs weapon from blaze blue

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