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This is a really different take on the potter world, where people aren't dumb. I'm not talking just about the Mc, but I'm talking about all major players in the story, even the faculty of hogwarts. The first year was amazing. The summer vacation story was slow, but the payoff was absolutely worth it. And it looks like it's gonna keep getting better.
If you are looking for a dark, ambitious, mature MC then you should just leave instead of falling for the CLICKBAIT title. I really liked the start of the story, it was good and really helped in the MC's emotion development. But man, I was disappointed. The MC was quite mature and smart until the Hogwarts Arc started and everything went downhill. The MC suddenly becomes stupid and hot headed emotional wimp falling for small provocations and things especially after all those years of practicing meditation which should have made in more proficient in controlling his emotions. When he got his custom wand, he transfigured the table into a tree and transfigured it back into the table, but he couldn't transfigure a match into a proper needle and he even said that he focuses more on the intentional magic instead of incantational magic which is a requirement for a good transfiguration. At this point it was a waste for him to choose Slytherin, when he acts like a stupid Gryffindor. I really had high hopes for this story but Alas! all in vain.
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it seems author don't really have much knowledge of harry Potter verse. even if this is a AU. author butchered all the fact and fundamentals . reading this story is making my head Hurts. he is mixing transfiguration and charms fundamentals with one another. interaction between characters is bland. mc is a idiot Goody too shoe's with contradicting behaviour. before he could turn a table into trees, boost about his transfiguration talent. then he can't even change match in to silver needle. not even a wood needle. let's just forget about silver. and talking about stupidity (his reparo charm even managed to revert back to broken after 10 min). author talk's about MC's maturity. mc doesn't mind what children think but amnages to loose his control from dracos slight provocation and lash out and attack with Maggic in front of hole class. insted of finding any comeback with logic and word. I am not gonna waste my time with this and kill my brain cells. only good thing about this story is update schedule and good English.
Well if you like having 5 chapter of the same event but with different pov, or even wait for 15 chapter for a simple event to end just to ahead I’m sure you’ll love it
Trash with good grammar, trying to attract readers with the "dark" title. Patetic. .
Overall a fantastic take on a Harry Potter fan fiction and the only downside in the newest arc is that the build up to the final battle was painfully slow and honestly 5 to 10 chapters felt unnecessary and boring to read but with time I know the author will continue to improve and impress with his creativity and this is one of the few fan fics that I can’t wait to see more chapters come out. I have a lot of hope in the potentially of this story, thank you for your hard work mr. author
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I like the way you write the story and I also love the idea of the MC being Grindelwalds grandson.
Be warned, the title is bait. The mc isn't really a dark lord or a true Slytherin type character or a character who dabbles in the gray zone. The MC is basically basically a Gryffindor minus the hot-headed part. MC sides more with the golden trio and Gryffindor than his own house. Readers read dark lord or Slytherin titles hoping the mc ain't a goody two shoe, that evenytually becomes buddy buddy with Gryffindors just because 🤦♂️
One of a better HP Fanfic I read. MC s strong buy made in a good way, plot is unique but still recognisable. keep it going ^.^
Eu curto por que o protagonista é acima da média e tem a capacidade de se defender, mais não e a um ponto que Hogwarts esteja livre de perigos para ele, um bom equilíbrio.
MC starts off 'loving' magic and being mature. Then the moment he gets to Hogwarts his memories/metaknowledge of the HP world is 'fuzzy', he becomes childish, can't be bothered with half the magic classes, and doesn't want to read books to learn. Then of course we have to obligatory special/unique familiar. A lot of things are contradictory or just plain wrong as well. The only real positive is the grammar.
good for now ..............................................................................................................................................................
You’d think with a title like that he’d be on the dark side but no, so far all his actions have painted him as a good guy. It also doesn’t help that he’s a major doormat. People spit on him and what does he do? He forgives them. Confused why the silly author bothered to make him a Grindelwald if he was gonna do this.
Here is my review up to chapter 45. The title is clickbait depending on your interpretation of it. I think when reading the title, most people would expect a dark story. This is not a dark story. The MC gets a random mythical creature that is NOT in the canon lore which I thought was dumb because you literally have a plethora of canon creatures to choose from. The MC is shaping up to be some sort of generic light lord/light proponent. Pretty much in every part of the story the MC is viewed as suspicious/feared/ostracized (except for a few close friends) and gets falsely accused of things by multiple people, multiple times. He saves the day, fixes the problem, and forgives everybody (lol). Moving on to the good, the updating stability is phenomenal and you can expect a chapter every day. The writing quality is also quite good compared to most of the works you will find on WN. Ultimately, I won’t be reading anymore because frankly the direction this story took is quite boring and generic in my opinion.
The story is good and all but why are you trying to undermine his achievements and making him out to be that bad guy, he should be cleared of all charges yet you make people still accuse him doesn’t make sense
Interesting story, though plot feels forced, and somehow the writer is able to change the plot and make it the same simultaneously, not to mention the MC becomes more childlike in his thoughts and actions the more the story progresses, the last few chapters is like watching a train
story is good tbh my only problem is some conversations get a tad bit long winded and over explained or oddly phrased so the convos seem a tad bit off but besides some minor descriptions that could be better I love it 💜💜
It's good so far ................................................................................................................................
I’ll be honest I wasn’t expecting much since most HP fics are pretty similar but I enjoyed binge reading all the chapters would total recommend
This is truly one of the best HP fanfics I’ve ever read. And to all the people who called the MC pathetic and weak for having empathy, go F yourselves. This is what we call character development.
I like this fic cause the mc is not superhuman, super genius or other unrealistic person. I feel that him’s alive and I can imagine me on his place.
Can't give it a 5 yet, so I will stay at 3 and wait to see where the story goes so far. It's interesting, and it's fun to read. Mc is normal, and that's good he is not to OP yet and just a normal person with magic that wants to learn magic
Highly talented author, excellent story so far. Mc has a really powerful kitsune pet (mind reading, supernatural strength, illusion, mind control, flame manipulation, assassination, etc.), hopefully it is used as more of a social character than as a deus ex machina plot armor device but I’m probably wrong. I think having a reasonably strong main character is ultimately more satisfying than someone overpowered that can win without trying, fingers crossed
ok I give it a 1 because most people don't read the 5s so this book is pretty good it but the fanfic is well thought out till chapter 12 because there is no more chapters as I'm writing this but it reminds me of "HP: a magic journey "if you have not read it I recommend its really good read
MC is self-contradicting, annoying and boring (at the same time lol), characters are bland, magic system is terrible, title is click bait, story is so-so, and author dropped this book. Nevertheless it's readable.
This is a really different take on the potter world, where people aren't dumb. I'm not talking just about the Mc, but I'm talking about all major players in the story, even the faculty of hogwarts. The first year was amazing. The summer vacation story was slow, but the payoff was absolutely worth it. And it looks like it's gonna keep getting better.
If you are looking for a dark, ambitious, mature MC then you should just leave instead of falling for the CLICKBAIT title. I really liked the start of the story, it was good and really helped in the MC's emotion development. But man, I was disappointed. The MC was quite mature and smart until the Hogwarts Arc started and everything went downhill. The MC suddenly becomes stupid and hot headed emotional wimp falling for small provocations and things especially after all those years of practicing meditation which should have made in more proficient in controlling his emotions. When he got his custom wand, he transfigured the table into a tree and transfigured it back into the table, but he couldn't transfigure a match into a proper needle and he even said that he focuses more on the intentional magic instead of incantational magic which is a requirement for a good transfiguration. At this point it was a waste for him to choose Slytherin, when he acts like a stupid Gryffindor. I really had high hopes for this story but Alas! all in vain.
揭示劇透 it seems author don't really have much knowledge of harry Potter verse. even if this is a AU. author butchered all the fact and fundamentals . reading this story is making my head Hurts. he is mixing transfiguration and charms fundamentals with one another. interaction between characters is bland. mc is a idiot Goody too shoe's with contradicting behaviour. before he could turn a table into trees, boost about his transfiguration talent. then he can't even change match in to silver needle. not even a wood needle. let's just forget about silver. and talking about stupidity (his reparo charm even managed to revert back to broken after 10 min). author talk's about MC's maturity. mc doesn't mind what children think but amnages to loose his control from dracos slight provocation and lash out and attack with Maggic in front of hole class. insted of finding any comeback with logic and word. I am not gonna waste my time with this and kill my brain cells. only good thing about this story is update schedule and good English.
Well if you like having 5 chapter of the same event but with different pov, or even wait for 15 chapter for a simple event to end just to ahead I’m sure you’ll love it
Trash with good grammar, trying to attract readers with the "dark" title. Patetic. .
Overall a fantastic take on a Harry Potter fan fiction and the only downside in the newest arc is that the build up to the final battle was painfully slow and honestly 5 to 10 chapters felt unnecessary and boring to read but with time I know the author will continue to improve and impress with his creativity and this is one of the few fan fics that I can’t wait to see more chapters come out. I have a lot of hope in the potentially of this story, thank you for your hard work mr. author
揭示劇透 I like the way you write the story and I also love the idea of the MC being Grindelwalds grandson.
Be warned, the title is bait. The mc isn't really a dark lord or a true Slytherin type character or a character who dabbles in the gray zone. The MC is basically basically a Gryffindor minus the hot-headed part. MC sides more with the golden trio and Gryffindor than his own house. Readers read dark lord or Slytherin titles hoping the mc ain't a goody two shoe, that evenytually becomes buddy buddy with Gryffindors just because 🤦♂️
One of a better HP Fanfic I read. MC s strong buy made in a good way, plot is unique but still recognisable. keep it going ^.^
Eu curto por que o protagonista é acima da média e tem a capacidade de se defender, mais não e a um ponto que Hogwarts esteja livre de perigos para ele, um bom equilíbrio.
MC starts off 'loving' magic and being mature. Then the moment he gets to Hogwarts his memories/metaknowledge of the HP world is 'fuzzy', he becomes childish, can't be bothered with half the magic classes, and doesn't want to read books to learn. Then of course we have to obligatory special/unique familiar. A lot of things are contradictory or just plain wrong as well. The only real positive is the grammar.
good for now ..............................................................................................................................................................
You’d think with a title like that he’d be on the dark side but no, so far all his actions have painted him as a good guy. It also doesn’t help that he’s a major doormat. People spit on him and what does he do? He forgives them. Confused why the silly author bothered to make him a Grindelwald if he was gonna do this.
Here is my review up to chapter 45. The title is clickbait depending on your interpretation of it. I think when reading the title, most people would expect a dark story. This is not a dark story. The MC gets a random mythical creature that is NOT in the canon lore which I thought was dumb because you literally have a plethora of canon creatures to choose from. The MC is shaping up to be some sort of generic light lord/light proponent. Pretty much in every part of the story the MC is viewed as suspicious/feared/ostracized (except for a few close friends) and gets falsely accused of things by multiple people, multiple times. He saves the day, fixes the problem, and forgives everybody (lol). Moving on to the good, the updating stability is phenomenal and you can expect a chapter every day. The writing quality is also quite good compared to most of the works you will find on WN. Ultimately, I won’t be reading anymore because frankly the direction this story took is quite boring and generic in my opinion.
The story is good and all but why are you trying to undermine his achievements and making him out to be that bad guy, he should be cleared of all charges yet you make people still accuse him doesn’t make sense
Interesting story, though plot feels forced, and somehow the writer is able to change the plot and make it the same simultaneously, not to mention the MC becomes more childlike in his thoughts and actions the more the story progresses, the last few chapters is like watching a train
story is good tbh my only problem is some conversations get a tad bit long winded and over explained or oddly phrased so the convos seem a tad bit off but besides some minor descriptions that could be better I love it 💜💜
It's good so far ................................................................................................................................
I’ll be honest I wasn’t expecting much since most HP fics are pretty similar but I enjoyed binge reading all the chapters would total recommend
This is truly one of the best HP fanfics I’ve ever read. And to all the people who called the MC pathetic and weak for having empathy, go F yourselves. This is what we call character development.
I like this fic cause the mc is not superhuman, super genius or other unrealistic person. I feel that him’s alive and I can imagine me on his place.
Can't give it a 5 yet, so I will stay at 3 and wait to see where the story goes so far. It's interesting, and it's fun to read. Mc is normal, and that's good he is not to OP yet and just a normal person with magic that wants to learn magic
Highly talented author, excellent story so far. Mc has a really powerful kitsune pet (mind reading, supernatural strength, illusion, mind control, flame manipulation, assassination, etc.), hopefully it is used as more of a social character than as a deus ex machina plot armor device but I’m probably wrong. I think having a reasonably strong main character is ultimately more satisfying than someone overpowered that can win without trying, fingers crossed
ok I give it a 1 because most people don't read the 5s so this book is pretty good it but the fanfic is well thought out till chapter 12 because there is no more chapters as I'm writing this but it reminds me of "HP: a magic journey "if you have not read it I recommend its really good read
MC is self-contradicting, annoying and boring (at the same time lol), characters are bland, magic system is terrible, title is click bait, story is so-so, and author dropped this book. Nevertheless it's readable.