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A wish fulfillment fantasy. The Harry Potter world is used but mostly ignored. Half of the text seems to be status updates or walls of text. I couldn't even make it two dozen chapters. It progresses so fast there isn't actually any story.
No está mal la historia, pero sería mejor que mejorará la escritura así como el volcado de información, de ese modo la mitad del capítulo no sea de información irrelevante... Gracias por el trabajo
I see the vision, but the translation is pretty bad, not the worst on this platform, but still bad. Because of that it constantly switches perspective: "Roy chooses >skill< and because of that I do more damage" even though it's about the same person. so overall: nice premise but translation (?) ruins it, only read if you can stand bad translations
it start good but now randomly going anywhere you guys give it a try................................................................................
the concept was a good idea, but this is very clearly a wish fulfillment fantasy that ignores almost everything in harry potter. also the book is half filled with constant walls of text of system stats. the book is also extremely fast paced to the point where it's missing a lot of details.
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Chapter 18 officially killed the story have fun with your worm of a mc author
I really enjoy it but it needs to be updated more often to be up there with my favourites
I didn't wanna try this one. Thought the mesh wouldn't make a good story. Wow amazing story great author pulling this out of the hat. Keep it up.
I loved your work Nice character design. I think you should increase the word count of each chapter. update more, good read so far. More chapters needed
So far I like it, the MC isn’t naive and stupid and if it stays like this the story’s gon be a W
Well since the only chapter is a info dump and the concept is quite liking to my taste , i am looking forward to this and waiting for author to put some chapters
A wish fulfillment fantasy. The Harry Potter world is used but mostly ignored. Half of the text seems to be status updates or walls of text. I couldn't even make it two dozen chapters. It progresses so fast there isn't actually any story.
No está mal la historia, pero sería mejor que mejorará la escritura así como el volcado de información, de ese modo la mitad del capítulo no sea de información irrelevante... Gracias por el trabajo
I see the vision, but the translation is pretty bad, not the worst on this platform, but still bad. Because of that it constantly switches perspective: "Roy chooses >skill< and because of that I do more damage" even though it's about the same person. so overall: nice premise but translation (?) ruins it, only read if you can stand bad translations
it start good but now randomly going anywhere you guys give it a try................................................................................
the concept was a good idea, but this is very clearly a wish fulfillment fantasy that ignores almost everything in harry potter. also the book is half filled with constant walls of text of system stats. the book is also extremely fast paced to the point where it's missing a lot of details.
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Chapter 18 officially killed the story have fun with your worm of a mc author
I really enjoy it but it needs to be updated more often to be up there with my favourites
I didn't wanna try this one. Thought the mesh wouldn't make a good story. Wow amazing story great author pulling this out of the hat. Keep it up.
I loved your work Nice character design. I think you should increase the word count of each chapter. update more, good read so far. More chapters needed
So far I like it, the MC isn’t naive and stupid and if it stays like this the story’s gon be a W
Well since the only chapter is a info dump and the concept is quite liking to my taste , i am looking forward to this and waiting for author to put some chapters
never seen an author throw his own story quite like this