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I like the book very much because it really feels like I am reading a light novel brook from overlord. The only thing I would want is more frequent updates and uploads instead of every month 3-4 chapter or something But anything else is 👍
Has a pretty good concept, has a lot of potential too. Mc is a LotM nerd, which i love, and has a thing for lore, which directly affects a lot of stuff post-isekai. My main gripe, or only gripe, with this is that the writing is overly complex and long winded at times, making me get tired and skim a lot of parts while feeling that i’m not missing much, but if this gets fixed the fic will be one of the best ongoing fics rn
Changing mc's destination is not only fooling him, but also readers. Bruce is just jumping through places with no reason to do anything - plotline is just dead after siege on his guild.
Writing quality: great work by the author he doesnt just do the same spells as shown in overlord, the guy has literally created spells and added lore to them and also shown which boss rewards it is he has done some plot twists that are good still his first time he will grow into it but as for a first time writer good work. Updating stability: my last comment of this fanfic was for him to store up chapters soooooo I can’t say anything I’m just here waiting for a mass release. Story development: great use of Yggdrasil and great character creation in the game from getting his own guild to ensuring he has the number one spot to even the number of floors in his guild is just crazy work author has put in the effort the different floors, the different characters used really something. Character design: what can I say one more the descriptions are good and the designs of the worlds sound great. World background: wonderful he really expounded on new elements of the game Yggdrasil. I really enjoyed the Yggdrasil arc especially the gameplay and how he handled things, really great world background even in the new arcs that the story has progressed through he did his research. Overall good story new writer but he is trying his best and is doing well.
porque le das al mc algo que despues se lo vas a quitar? es tan cliche que da asco, literalmente los ultimos capitulos del segundo arco eran muy aburridos y despues me sales con la mamada de que le vas a quitar su gremio, ya se que es tu primera novela pero si vas a quitarle algo o nerfear al mc no lo hubieras dado tantas fuerzas al principio ptt: el tercer arco es aburrido, pones mas a otros personajes que al mc que es el protagonista
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I don't have the energy to write a proper review right now but I know that this is a banger and I highly recommend this FF I've only seen one one spelling error no grammatical error and I can tell the author puts in work in this just by how much words there is in one chapter. I hope you can continue this story to the end author I'll write a better review in the future have a good time writing.
I think this is fate Spotify started playing over lord ending 3 silent solitude the moment I press on this book
Please don't drop this it's hard finding fanfics like these out here and if you find them they're dropped So please don't drop it please please please please please 🥺
good fanfic, hope you don't drop it and continue it as always, and please release more chapter often
i like the concept, i hope this fanfic don't drop [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update]
For Lotm is guarranted 5 but please dont drop it author!!!!!!!!!!! Keep it up !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
for one I think you should have added comedy to the tags interesting main character but I'm pretty sure he's insane you might want to add a crack warning or maybe that's just the beginning of the story I don't know what you going to do with it later oh well I found that it's a pretty interesting read
Upload more chapters ... This novel has good a good story .................... .................... .................... .................... ....................
I have high expectations for this fanfic. Rarely have I seen LotM fanfics as most only contain a few chapters. So for my impressions. I can't really state any definitive comment as I have only read 10 chapters but so far it has been interesting. The MC is okay and is kinda likable, plot is straightforward, as for side characters I can't really say much as I'm still 10 chapters in and his interactions with others are rare. No glaring grammar and spelling flaws. The word count is also long which makes every chapter a worthwhile read. Overall, a satisfying and interesting read so far, really hoping that this continues and shape into a more interesting story as I can see so much potential. Kudos to the author, you are doing well and I really hope that this story will last for a long time. 9.6/10 for me as of chapter 10 tldr: Pros: >MC is not an idiot at least >Has LotM elements >Word count per chapter is long >No Glaring Grammar and Spelling mistakes >Straightforward Plot Cons: >Due to the Straightforward Plot established in the premise it can get predictable but predictable plot doesn't always mean bad execution. As long as the author executes the plot well and introduces characters and worlds with depth it should be fine.
Very recommended for those who likes characters development. And of course interesting concepts too. Good job 👍
Really enjoyed it I hope for more in the future, though don't overwork yourself if you are already.
A great Fanfic, don't drop it. It is recommended to anyone who likes Overlord, Fate and Lord of the Mysteries. At least that's what the author implies but so far the story progression is good and the pacing is fine. Upto chapter 3, the MC has arrived at the Overlord universe to the Earth of the 22nd century. He still has a year before the game's release, I hope you write a few chapters or an arc just about the game, while not going into too much detail but just the overview. Upload an auxiliary chapter, about his character sheet and other powers of Mc. Also, upload any special weapon he is going to create or use in it, and if possible with the layout of the guild he is going to build or join.
I like the start and I like the concept of two high fantasy worlds with different eldritch beings interracting. Like while Momonga was a human, the longer he stayed in the Overlord body, the lower his morals started to drop and with LotM Sequence systems, the higher you go, the more you have to anchor yourself to not lose your humanity. I see great potential in this, hope you keep this fanfic going and deliver us something great.
Following the tradition here at Webnovel, I'm giving my fic a perfect 5 stars. Just drop a review, and comment about your opinion on the chapters. Give constructive feedback. English isn't my first language, so if you spot any mistakes, do forgive me and leave a comment. If you have anything that you think can add value to the fic then leave a comment or a review about it. I hope you enjoy reading this Fanfiction.
The overall premise of the story is great. Hope you continue this novel. Starting two characters look great.
well... i already read this twice. if you fan of lotm this surely your stuff. but hey.. the update is slower than I thought so i kept chapters. or re-read it once more. thanks, Mr.author you make a masterpiece. [proud dragon noises]
I like the book very much because it really feels like I am reading a light novel brook from overlord. The only thing I would want is more frequent updates and uploads instead of every month 3-4 chapter or something But anything else is 👍
Has a pretty good concept, has a lot of potential too. Mc is a LotM nerd, which i love, and has a thing for lore, which directly affects a lot of stuff post-isekai. My main gripe, or only gripe, with this is that the writing is overly complex and long winded at times, making me get tired and skim a lot of parts while feeling that i’m not missing much, but if this gets fixed the fic will be one of the best ongoing fics rn
Changing mc's destination is not only fooling him, but also readers. Bruce is just jumping through places with no reason to do anything - plotline is just dead after siege on his guild.
Writing quality: great work by the author he doesnt just do the same spells as shown in overlord, the guy has literally created spells and added lore to them and also shown which boss rewards it is he has done some plot twists that are good still his first time he will grow into it but as for a first time writer good work. Updating stability: my last comment of this fanfic was for him to store up chapters soooooo I can’t say anything I’m just here waiting for a mass release. Story development: great use of Yggdrasil and great character creation in the game from getting his own guild to ensuring he has the number one spot to even the number of floors in his guild is just crazy work author has put in the effort the different floors, the different characters used really something. Character design: what can I say one more the descriptions are good and the designs of the worlds sound great. World background: wonderful he really expounded on new elements of the game Yggdrasil. I really enjoyed the Yggdrasil arc especially the gameplay and how he handled things, really great world background even in the new arcs that the story has progressed through he did his research. Overall good story new writer but he is trying his best and is doing well.
porque le das al mc algo que despues se lo vas a quitar? es tan cliche que da asco, literalmente los ultimos capitulos del segundo arco eran muy aburridos y despues me sales con la mamada de que le vas a quitar su gremio, ya se que es tu primera novela pero si vas a quitarle algo o nerfear al mc no lo hubieras dado tantas fuerzas al principio ptt: el tercer arco es aburrido, pones mas a otros personajes que al mc que es el protagonista
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I don't have the energy to write a proper review right now but I know that this is a banger and I highly recommend this FF I've only seen one one spelling error no grammatical error and I can tell the author puts in work in this just by how much words there is in one chapter. I hope you can continue this story to the end author I'll write a better review in the future have a good time writing.
I think this is fate Spotify started playing over lord ending 3 silent solitude the moment I press on this book
Please don't drop this it's hard finding fanfics like these out here and if you find them they're dropped So please don't drop it please please please please please 🥺
good fanfic, hope you don't drop it and continue it as always, and please release more chapter often
i like the concept, i hope this fanfic don't drop [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update]
For Lotm is guarranted 5 but please dont drop it author!!!!!!!!!!! Keep it up !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
for one I think you should have added comedy to the tags interesting main character but I'm pretty sure he's insane you might want to add a crack warning or maybe that's just the beginning of the story I don't know what you going to do with it later oh well I found that it's a pretty interesting read
Upload more chapters ... This novel has good a good story .................... .................... .................... .................... ....................
I have high expectations for this fanfic. Rarely have I seen LotM fanfics as most only contain a few chapters. So for my impressions. I can't really state any definitive comment as I have only read 10 chapters but so far it has been interesting. The MC is okay and is kinda likable, plot is straightforward, as for side characters I can't really say much as I'm still 10 chapters in and his interactions with others are rare. No glaring grammar and spelling flaws. The word count is also long which makes every chapter a worthwhile read. Overall, a satisfying and interesting read so far, really hoping that this continues and shape into a more interesting story as I can see so much potential. Kudos to the author, you are doing well and I really hope that this story will last for a long time. 9.6/10 for me as of chapter 10 tldr: Pros: >MC is not an idiot at least >Has LotM elements >Word count per chapter is long >No Glaring Grammar and Spelling mistakes >Straightforward Plot Cons: >Due to the Straightforward Plot established in the premise it can get predictable but predictable plot doesn't always mean bad execution. As long as the author executes the plot well and introduces characters and worlds with depth it should be fine.
Very recommended for those who likes characters development. And of course interesting concepts too. Good job 👍
Really enjoyed it I hope for more in the future, though don't overwork yourself if you are already.
A great Fanfic, don't drop it. It is recommended to anyone who likes Overlord, Fate and Lord of the Mysteries. At least that's what the author implies but so far the story progression is good and the pacing is fine. Upto chapter 3, the MC has arrived at the Overlord universe to the Earth of the 22nd century. He still has a year before the game's release, I hope you write a few chapters or an arc just about the game, while not going into too much detail but just the overview. Upload an auxiliary chapter, about his character sheet and other powers of Mc. Also, upload any special weapon he is going to create or use in it, and if possible with the layout of the guild he is going to build or join.
I like the start and I like the concept of two high fantasy worlds with different eldritch beings interracting. Like while Momonga was a human, the longer he stayed in the Overlord body, the lower his morals started to drop and with LotM Sequence systems, the higher you go, the more you have to anchor yourself to not lose your humanity. I see great potential in this, hope you keep this fanfic going and deliver us something great.
Following the tradition here at Webnovel, I'm giving my fic a perfect 5 stars. Just drop a review, and comment about your opinion on the chapters. Give constructive feedback. English isn't my first language, so if you spot any mistakes, do forgive me and leave a comment. If you have anything that you think can add value to the fic then leave a comment or a review about it. I hope you enjoy reading this Fanfiction.
The overall premise of the story is great. Hope you continue this novel. Starting two characters look great.
well... i already read this twice. if you fan of lotm this surely your stuff. but hey.. the update is slower than I thought so i kept chapters. or re-read it once more. thanks, Mr.author you make a masterpiece. [proud dragon noises]