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I don't know how to describe it, but Teenage Mutation Ninja Turtle are in. One thing I would like to point out is that you notice how the author uses chatgpt, which he did mention. I also find that a lot of information is repeated. Other than that, a decent story.
I am currently on 'Chapter 88: Machine Man 86' and will stay there indefinitely because the flow has become robotic and monotonous. I liked the book at the start but it has been a while since I last read it because of the AI tone of the chapters. Hopefully, it gets better, unfortunately, I won't be returning anytime soon...
At least the first to chps where creative now it's chatgpt for the win, it makes the story so inhumane it's barely readable.
Another MC who just uses mind raping slavery to solve problems, and he doesn't just do it to villains or enemies. It's mostly normal people he is doing it to. An AI which hides things from him and just gives his tech to others and he is fine with it. 🙄 Oh, and the chapters are written by Chat-GPT. So the writing is very awkward.
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5 stars because I can. :-P A very good story, it has its problems but there is always something to improve, it's always worth listening to the opinions and ideas of others, but don't let them destroy what you want to create.
This has all the elements of Chinese in it. Weakening of Mc for plot, the experiences of past life are left in the past itself, stupid MC but somehow regarded as genius in the novel, mysterious MC, Chinese cultivation bs. This is just till the chapters that I have read.
I give up, 100% written by an AI, I'm not saying don't use the available resources... but so much filler and redudence above all... it's too much... I think that if I had to take out everything written by AI I would only have 20% left or less of original authorship...
well unlike what you think there are actually very good novels without any romance, also i came to this novel Because it doesnt focus on that "bro cant i just read for the story and not the smut".
this is boring and dry ,Chatgpt made it boring and dry,author edit your Chatgpt story to make it seem natural at least
It's a enjoyable read, love stories that have the technology angle, little rushed in some parts. Looking forward to more chapters ..........................................
Hey. I am really fascinated that you are using chatgpt. Could you explain the process? I’m also dabbling, but chatgpt hardly helps to improve the manuscript. I’d greatly appreciate it. Thanks.
I like the direction the author is gonna take with the story I hope he keeps going
The novel is quite good in terms of subject matter. Poor writing quality. It feels too robotic, emotion is lacking, human relationships feel incomplete. If it is edited, it can be a good novel. It could be a great fan fic if it included more dialogue, character development, and human emotions. Since I read and spent time in my spare time, I will also give 4 stars for the author's efforts.
Sue redirected the focus to the potential danger we narrowly avoided. "Johnny, you were at 4,000 kelvin, a little more higher and you could have gone supernova!" she informed him. Johnny in his childish antics responded with a simple "sweet!" Alex chimed in, saying, "In layman terms, what she meant was, any hotter and you could have cooked everything, including this planet." Johnny, hearing the consequence that could have happened. Responded with a nonchalant "Got it, supernova, bad." ]:->
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Well, this fic certainly has good bones. As for its shortcomings, at least the author was straight up about their limitations. There is a lot of repetition, perhaps from the AI writing aide or from accidental oversight. In terms of progression, there are a quite a few instances of the story grinding to a near halt to overly focus on incidental things. For example, some of the social media reactions were a bit long winded and could easily have been replaced with a couple of sentences . In regards to the MC’s ability, it was cool having him create fictional tech from real world franchises. The issue is, since these franchises exist in the story, why is the recognition missing from some characters while others like Peter know them well? It strains suspension of disbelief to think that SHIELD would not get an image search match or an agents recognition of things like the HK if the franchise is known. They would at least pick up the pattern of fictional items and make inferences based on that. Then there is the difficult job of balancing the capabilities of SKY. Certain situations pop up that, given SKY’s established capabilities, she should have known about almost as soon as they hit coms, certain servers or where she should have noticed certain movements if she had her vigilance up. All in all, I found the ideas here quite interesting. Those ‘good bones’ still have potential.
need few editing and some rewriting else the story is all good. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
Love the idea of the story but it feel more like a bunch of recaps on what the mic did than an actual story
To be honest the plot is simply a general version of most other stories. The Golden Finger doesnt really make sense and for being powerful super cliche. Also from reading to the latest chapters, the story seems to be partly written with some type of AI software and seemingly partly edited.
When I see the name of the novel. From the moment I understood the weakness of my flesh, it disgusted me. I craved to the strength and certainty of steel. I aspired to the purity of the blessed machine. Your kind cling to your flesh as if it will not decay and fail you. One day the crude biomass that you called a temple will wither and you'll beg my kind to save you. But I am already saved. For the machine is immortal. Even in death i serve the Omnissiah.
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I found this by accident, got interested and was surprised by the 3rd chapter and got hooked on it and it's hard for me to finish a book anymore and i want more. Keep up the good work.
I like the novel and idea but I’m really getting beyond sick of people using chat gpt. It’s so robotic and dry and makes the novel feel so fake it’s hard to describe but it makes the story feel so dry.
I don't know how to describe it, but Teenage Mutation Ninja Turtle are in. One thing I would like to point out is that you notice how the author uses chatgpt, which he did mention. I also find that a lot of information is repeated. Other than that, a decent story.
I am currently on 'Chapter 88: Machine Man 86' and will stay there indefinitely because the flow has become robotic and monotonous. I liked the book at the start but it has been a while since I last read it because of the AI tone of the chapters. Hopefully, it gets better, unfortunately, I won't be returning anytime soon...
At least the first to chps where creative now it's chatgpt for the win, it makes the story so inhumane it's barely readable.
Another MC who just uses mind raping slavery to solve problems, and he doesn't just do it to villains or enemies. It's mostly normal people he is doing it to. An AI which hides things from him and just gives his tech to others and he is fine with it. 🙄 Oh, and the chapters are written by Chat-GPT. So the writing is very awkward.
揭示劇透 5 stars because I can. :-P A very good story, it has its problems but there is always something to improve, it's always worth listening to the opinions and ideas of others, but don't let them destroy what you want to create.
This has all the elements of Chinese in it. Weakening of Mc for plot, the experiences of past life are left in the past itself, stupid MC but somehow regarded as genius in the novel, mysterious MC, Chinese cultivation bs. This is just till the chapters that I have read.
I give up, 100% written by an AI, I'm not saying don't use the available resources... but so much filler and redudence above all... it's too much... I think that if I had to take out everything written by AI I would only have 20% left or less of original authorship...
well unlike what you think there are actually very good novels without any romance, also i came to this novel Because it doesnt focus on that "bro cant i just read for the story and not the smut".
this is boring and dry ,Chatgpt made it boring and dry,author edit your Chatgpt story to make it seem natural at least
It's a enjoyable read, love stories that have the technology angle, little rushed in some parts. Looking forward to more chapters ..........................................
Hey. I am really fascinated that you are using chatgpt. Could you explain the process? I’m also dabbling, but chatgpt hardly helps to improve the manuscript. I’d greatly appreciate it. Thanks.
I like the direction the author is gonna take with the story I hope he keeps going
The novel is quite good in terms of subject matter. Poor writing quality. It feels too robotic, emotion is lacking, human relationships feel incomplete. If it is edited, it can be a good novel. It could be a great fan fic if it included more dialogue, character development, and human emotions. Since I read and spent time in my spare time, I will also give 4 stars for the author's efforts.
Sue redirected the focus to the potential danger we narrowly avoided. "Johnny, you were at 4,000 kelvin, a little more higher and you could have gone supernova!" she informed him. Johnny in his childish antics responded with a simple "sweet!" Alex chimed in, saying, "In layman terms, what she meant was, any hotter and you could have cooked everything, including this planet." Johnny, hearing the consequence that could have happened. Responded with a nonchalant "Got it, supernova, bad." ]:->
揭示劇透 Well, this fic certainly has good bones. As for its shortcomings, at least the author was straight up about their limitations. There is a lot of repetition, perhaps from the AI writing aide or from accidental oversight. In terms of progression, there are a quite a few instances of the story grinding to a near halt to overly focus on incidental things. For example, some of the social media reactions were a bit long winded and could easily have been replaced with a couple of sentences . In regards to the MC’s ability, it was cool having him create fictional tech from real world franchises. The issue is, since these franchises exist in the story, why is the recognition missing from some characters while others like Peter know them well? It strains suspension of disbelief to think that SHIELD would not get an image search match or an agents recognition of things like the HK if the franchise is known. They would at least pick up the pattern of fictional items and make inferences based on that. Then there is the difficult job of balancing the capabilities of SKY. Certain situations pop up that, given SKY’s established capabilities, she should have known about almost as soon as they hit coms, certain servers or where she should have noticed certain movements if she had her vigilance up. All in all, I found the ideas here quite interesting. Those ‘good bones’ still have potential.
need few editing and some rewriting else the story is all good. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
Love the idea of the story but it feel more like a bunch of recaps on what the mic did than an actual story
To be honest the plot is simply a general version of most other stories. The Golden Finger doesnt really make sense and for being powerful super cliche. Also from reading to the latest chapters, the story seems to be partly written with some type of AI software and seemingly partly edited.
When I see the name of the novel. From the moment I understood the weakness of my flesh, it disgusted me. I craved to the strength and certainty of steel. I aspired to the purity of the blessed machine. Your kind cling to your flesh as if it will not decay and fail you. One day the crude biomass that you called a temple will wither and you'll beg my kind to save you. But I am already saved. For the machine is immortal. Even in death i serve the Omnissiah.
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I found this by accident, got interested and was surprised by the 3rd chapter and got hooked on it and it's hard for me to finish a book anymore and i want more. Keep up the good work.
I like the novel and idea but I’m really getting beyond sick of people using chat gpt. It’s so robotic and dry and makes the novel feel so fake it’s hard to describe but it makes the story feel so dry.
It is another ChatGPT assisted novel. It is rough to read.