Naruto: My Unique System

LV 4

SaishoMysteriarch

I happen to need more reviews under my belt to get an achievement and this has potential so might as well. No need to dance around it long story short, writing style. This story reads more like an academic paper than a fanfic and that is no complement. The words used are just way too sophisticated (accolades, tumultuous, etc). I'm not a native English speaker but I think that I have some pretty good vocabulary, so it's not often and even rare that I have to stop and Google what words mean. And this isn't just the way things are described in third person this also affects the way characters talk, kids shouldn't be talking the same way mediaeval scholars Flirt, no matter how mature they are or even if one of them is reincarnated (except if he came from mediaeval nobility in his past life), in general no one speaks like that, not in this world. This a naruto fic not the retelling of captain Holt's childhood. Okay past all of that let's leave this on a good note no need to leave a bad aftertaste. The Characters are pretty good so far (chapter 7) and the situations are genuinely funny. The system hasn't been shown too much yet but it's the first time I have seen one like it so that's always a plus. Overall a good story held back by the way it's written, I won't assume how you end up with this final product, but a last minute edit by hand to make it more natural will make some massive improvements. Just in general if it's not in a 13 year old's vocabulary it shouldn't be in the fic, at the very least not as often as it is now.

LV 4

meHzyk

a very interesting story, especially on the premise that he will be a kind of best friend to Minato (at least that's what I deduced) if he isn't, that's okay too. the protagonist also the design of my brother gintoki, one of the best protagonists.

LV 14

Jantipopo

ai is strong on this one 🙂🙂

LV 13

ProfaneImmortal

As of ch. 80: decent enough writing, and a fresh plot. The characters have similar personalities to the original work. No romance yet. I recommend it.

LV 14

Nobume_Imai_5090

I rarely leave review but man this Novel is one hell of a journey. - The MC is genuinely good and wholesome guy unlike 99 percent of Naruto fanfic out there who is “psychopath 8 year old with OP skills” - The cast are also great and feels alive, the friendship between MC and Minato is a breath of fresh air. - The plot is good and the system is not so overbearing. Thank you Author!

LV 14

Derami

obvious AI grammar. Due to it feels like all characters are medieval nobles using flowery speech to the extreme + alot of internal dialogue. Example, Instead of: "He goes to open the door." The grammar is: "With tumultous effort and strength he, with great dedication and perseverance opens the door wondering how he got to this moment as if all the woes he previously went through were not enough to keep the door open for easier access." then extra change some words to ancient grammar and you get it. Not recommending. I really dont't understant those who use this kind of AI grammar, it is just so unnatural and forced...

LV 1

sakuraii

Great read so far

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wisdomseeker

It was great so far, keep going i like the concept too

LV 3

vinvenmazel

what's the Chinese Mtl name . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .?

LV 2

Sceat

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LV 2

Hallowed666

Can't wait for more!

LV 3

mantaege

its not bad i actually like it i like that he is minato best friend i think bc his interaction is in all 30chapters i like that mc dont change cannon like that hes not gonna stole kushina from minato well writing okay but maybe little chatgpt vibes

LV 2

ShriNG

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LV 4

demigod0414

Why this MC looked like Minato puppy? Where is Minato, there is he. MC get any jutsu. He gift this technique to Minato without any hesitation. I expect in the future he use Shiki fuujin on Kyuubi instead of Minato.

LV 4

Ashir_Ahmad

the story is okay. I like that the system is very balanced but the mc is just a little too light hearted. He is unable to overcome his views from earth so he is unable to kill till like chapter 80 and 100 both being very extreme cases. the story is quite light hearted if you wanna see MC having many friendly competitions and being friends with minato go for it but if you wanna read about the grim part of the world i dont think this is the novel for you. i have seen some spelling mistakes, I don't care much about grammar as long as it's readable. overall i think 3.6 is quite a good rating for this FF. if you liked the making bonds portion of Naruto then give it a try

LV 13

yrhusgjy

overall a decent read, though some of the wording throughout the earlier chapters feels awkward it has grown noticeably better as the story continues

LV 12

escobe

Good.................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

LV 1

Ignox_Xongi

A good fan fic!!

LV 4

Sodeno_MZE

Interesting story. Will continue reading.