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Honestly, it is an incredible story, I really like it and how everything develops, Itadori is very human, I think it is a good story, however the comments that say that you cling too much to the base story are real, detach yourself and create a new arc or Something really makes us realize that in history everything that happened is going to happen there only with a stronger itadori, I don't know, use the butterfly effect or things like that.
I need more of this story, I think it's one of the best jujutsu stories right now, so author, don't be discouraged, it's a great story, continue it :D
While i admit that the story was kinda bland at first 20 something chaps the story start to get intresting at the ark where sukuna riped out yuji heart out you can say real story starts from there , as for what i think of the rest of the chaps well...... my rating says enough i think
Muy bien, excelente historia uno que otro detalle pero lo entiendo, no te dejes abrumar autor solo sigue a tu ritmo y no desanimes, lo haces bastante bien, me preguntó Será Yuji x Maki y Mai?
The story at the start mostly follows canon,The shibuya arc is where the real changes begin and there will be a lot of yuji glazing,overall I really like this story,The only complaint is that the author does not update consistently and the chapters are rather short
Author please make a My Hero Academia story with Midorya as MC because his ending in the manga was so horrible that I won't even watch the anime 😓😓
The story is very good but the chapters are short and the author sometimes doesn't update regularly
I'll give it 5 star since this version of Yuji is way more capable than the OG 😏
The story is very good,one of the best jjk fanfic there is but the updates are not consistent thats the only problem I noticed
Incredibly bland. That is how I would summarise this story. Mind numbing start with a lifeless mc who, I admit, does get a bit more tolerable over the course of the story, yet simply feels like a more mature, not stupid yuji. There is no individuality to him at all. The power progression is good, if put in a vacuum. Give it context and the battles are TERRIBLE. Excessively drawn out so as to keep cannon the same. He doesn't learn from his mistakes, yaps constantly, no sense of urgency when he should know better, doesn't capitalise on opportunities, and then complains when shit doesn't go his way. No planning before the shibuya incident at all that could circumvent 90% of the problems he encountered. Would background is not expanded on at all, and the world feels incredibly small. The writing quality is average, nothing much to say there. I found myself skipping the next three chapters the moment kinjaku appeared (during yuji and mahito fight), it was so forced that I couldn't bear to read it. So overall, a bit below average in terms of plot (however little there is lol) with acceptable writing quality and a lacklustre mc who doesn't seem to impact the story at all even with his tremendous boost in power compared to Canon yuji. Very disappointing, but expected.
i read 25 chapters. this is a case of way to close to main story and pretending to deviate only to use some boring excuse to mask the unwillingness to try something new. how can you praise itadori learning techniques when it's not even slightly earned. the writing is good at least so i clearly understand what is going on. it's already aged poorly lore wise. ultimately why read this when you can just reread the manga or watch the anime. at least you get likeable, actually relatable characters whom you can see.
This is awesome. Can't wait for more. You are doing great. Thank you for all the hard work keep it up. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=Smug]
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I honestly think this is the best jjk fanfic I've read, the only reason it's not 5 stars is because there were quite a few spelling errors but towards the middle point, those started going away so I honestly don't have any big complaints. Great Book.
I love this story keep going and I hope Yuji gets open and cleave soon and maybe even the calamity claws eventually but is Sukuna going to leave Yuji's body somehow?
it's freaking amazing! I've never read a fanfiction this good~ every new chapter brings me ecstasy my one problem is obviously the fact that the story hasn't changed anything significant. it's honestly sad to see me reading close to 60 chapters with no improvement whatsoever on the story, the characters and their abilities has seen a pleasant change though.
Didn't had any hope but man, the fights are done great yes sometimes pacing is just fine but NOT BAD, yuji has very well developed character in here, realistic THERE IS ONLY 1 PROBLEM, give other chracter more depth i mean you already have with their fights but try to slow down a little giving the reader more about their personal views and day to day problems it will help them connect better, (STILL TOP LEVEL JJK FAN-FIC)
Honestly i'm giving this because its a jjk fan-fic but really study more on jjk and how yuji's powers work because a lot of the information is incorrect
l'histoire est bonne etr les interactions sont plutot bonnes on s'en bien quil reste une part de yugi en lui car certaines partie jai limpression de voir un meilleur version de yugi ou si yugi avait ete mieux prepare
Я уже ранее писал отзыв, но решил немного его отредактировать. Ваша работа действительно интересна - я искал не мало рассказов по JJK или с самоставкой, но ваша, на мой взгляд, одна из лучших. Не могу дать комментарий по поводу орфографии или пунктуации, так как сам читаю работу, переведенную на русский язык. Поэтому автор, тебе вдохновения, и чтобы все у тебя было хорошо. И большое спасибо за работу, которая даёт возможность отдохнуть
e, I thought itadori already had the reverse technique .................................................................................. .. ... ......
Honestly, it is an incredible story, I really like it and how everything develops, Itadori is very human, I think it is a good story, however the comments that say that you cling too much to the base story are real, detach yourself and create a new arc or Something really makes us realize that in history everything that happened is going to happen there only with a stronger itadori, I don't know, use the butterfly effect or things like that.
I need more of this story, I think it's one of the best jujutsu stories right now, so author, don't be discouraged, it's a great story, continue it :D
While i admit that the story was kinda bland at first 20 something chaps the story start to get intresting at the ark where sukuna riped out yuji heart out you can say real story starts from there , as for what i think of the rest of the chaps well...... my rating says enough i think
Muy bien, excelente historia uno que otro detalle pero lo entiendo, no te dejes abrumar autor solo sigue a tu ritmo y no desanimes, lo haces bastante bien, me preguntó Será Yuji x Maki y Mai?
The story at the start mostly follows canon,The shibuya arc is where the real changes begin and there will be a lot of yuji glazing,overall I really like this story,The only complaint is that the author does not update consistently and the chapters are rather short
Author please make a My Hero Academia story with Midorya as MC because his ending in the manga was so horrible that I won't even watch the anime 😓😓
The story is very good but the chapters are short and the author sometimes doesn't update regularly
I'll give it 5 star since this version of Yuji is way more capable than the OG 😏
The story is very good,one of the best jjk fanfic there is but the updates are not consistent thats the only problem I noticed
Incredibly bland. That is how I would summarise this story. Mind numbing start with a lifeless mc who, I admit, does get a bit more tolerable over the course of the story, yet simply feels like a more mature, not stupid yuji. There is no individuality to him at all. The power progression is good, if put in a vacuum. Give it context and the battles are TERRIBLE. Excessively drawn out so as to keep cannon the same. He doesn't learn from his mistakes, yaps constantly, no sense of urgency when he should know better, doesn't capitalise on opportunities, and then complains when shit doesn't go his way. No planning before the shibuya incident at all that could circumvent 90% of the problems he encountered. Would background is not expanded on at all, and the world feels incredibly small. The writing quality is average, nothing much to say there. I found myself skipping the next three chapters the moment kinjaku appeared (during yuji and mahito fight), it was so forced that I couldn't bear to read it. So overall, a bit below average in terms of plot (however little there is lol) with acceptable writing quality and a lacklustre mc who doesn't seem to impact the story at all even with his tremendous boost in power compared to Canon yuji. Very disappointing, but expected.
i read 25 chapters. this is a case of way to close to main story and pretending to deviate only to use some boring excuse to mask the unwillingness to try something new. how can you praise itadori learning techniques when it's not even slightly earned. the writing is good at least so i clearly understand what is going on. it's already aged poorly lore wise. ultimately why read this when you can just reread the manga or watch the anime. at least you get likeable, actually relatable characters whom you can see.
This is awesome. Can't wait for more. You are doing great. Thank you for all the hard work keep it up. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=Smug]
Good ...............................ekmfcnwooenfndkwkwksndnfnfjeowoskncbfkdowlwmsmdbdjekwlsncbdheiwowlamsndnfbjelwowksndndhrowkwcndmwpwodocnfneklalsmsnfndkwlwlapxmcmdkwolsdmmfrk
I honestly think this is the best jjk fanfic I've read, the only reason it's not 5 stars is because there were quite a few spelling errors but towards the middle point, those started going away so I honestly don't have any big complaints. Great Book.
I love this story keep going and I hope Yuji gets open and cleave soon and maybe even the calamity claws eventually but is Sukuna going to leave Yuji's body somehow?
it's freaking amazing! I've never read a fanfiction this good~ every new chapter brings me ecstasy my one problem is obviously the fact that the story hasn't changed anything significant. it's honestly sad to see me reading close to 60 chapters with no improvement whatsoever on the story, the characters and their abilities has seen a pleasant change though.
Didn't had any hope but man, the fights are done great yes sometimes pacing is just fine but NOT BAD, yuji has very well developed character in here, realistic THERE IS ONLY 1 PROBLEM, give other chracter more depth i mean you already have with their fights but try to slow down a little giving the reader more about their personal views and day to day problems it will help them connect better, (STILL TOP LEVEL JJK FAN-FIC)
Honestly i'm giving this because its a jjk fan-fic but really study more on jjk and how yuji's powers work because a lot of the information is incorrect
l'histoire est bonne etr les interactions sont plutot bonnes on s'en bien quil reste une part de yugi en lui car certaines partie jai limpression de voir un meilleur version de yugi ou si yugi avait ete mieux prepare
Я уже ранее писал отзыв, но решил немного его отредактировать. Ваша работа действительно интересна - я искал не мало рассказов по JJK или с самоставкой, но ваша, на мой взгляд, одна из лучших. Не могу дать комментарий по поводу орфографии или пунктуации, так как сам читаю работу, переведенную на русский язык. Поэтому автор, тебе вдохновения, и чтобы все у тебя было хорошо. И большое спасибо за работу, которая даёт возможность отдохнуть
e, I thought itadori already had the reverse technique .................................................................................. .. ... ......