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it was an interesting concept but it quickly got boring there's no plot, all he did is fight and train, MC is an typical musclebrain, every time he talks there's always a curse word on it.
Odio que sea obligatorio tener que dejar una reseña para puntuar una historia así que solo estoy escribiendo lo que se me viene a la cabeza por qué realmente no me voy a molestar en dejar una reseña bien formada y estructurada, así que solo voy a arrojar mi odio a esta historia junto con el desprecio que siento hacia a mi mismo, son libres de ignorar las palabras que ahora escribo por qué se que a nadie le importa y si siguen leyendo que sepan que solo a sido una perdida como letra de tiempo que no pueden recuperar a diferencia de mi que estoy en el baño cagando.
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its hard to make smart and strong mc at the same time, it easier to make dude who can say "i want to be strongest in the universe!" but its boring. Power without brain not worth it.
the writing is ok the plot is ok but I hate the part where they tell the MC he has to get married and have kids they are basically forcing him when the other Aryan could decipher the seals that prevent Aryans from appearing just because he wants to see an Aryan but the already and it's also horrible that the MC is so damn stupid it's not worth thinking that he will improve he won't his brain only works to hit harder and train harder until he almost kills himself multiple times in short don't read it if you don't like the Stupid MC who has no functional neurons and basically forces the MC to have kids or get married or whatever.
Trash book, to be honset. Author do not know power scale. Akeno dad easily fold MC,but author say” noooooo mc must strong as dad”, Bullshit! And he don’t know the dcd, looks as author only knowledge lf DXD from fanfics.
the latest chapter was the one that broke the camel's back for me. i really wanted to read more even though it had many red flags like the shuri thing, the author hinting at the potential relationship between Asia and him and the recent losing to atid. i mainly read this fanfiction because I thought I finally found a MC who will solve everything with brute force and at least be strongest of his age but in the latest chapter all my good will towards it was gone and I was extremely disappointed. He even lost to someone who is a blueprint of a golden spoon fed OC character who thinks himself as goku when since birth he was given a dragon as his personal 'tool' and was born as a demigod. He was given the best trainers and he won against igor because Indra's ego couldn't see his son losing so he thought of breaking the rules set by him and Shiva as a part of agreement. This latest chapter really left me lost and all my hopes for it being going to be a one of the best fanfiction of dxd was gone. In the future even it becomes the best fanfiction of the world even better than the original story I wouldn't come back to read it. peace out.
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Positives about this story: I haven't seen another DBZ/DxD fic on here. The MC remains human, at least as far as I've read. Negatives: The pacing is terrible. 18 chapters in and nothing related to any kind of plot has happened. There was a 6-8 chapter break from the training montage to have the MC and Baraquiel punch each other for no reason. I can say without any hesitation, skip this story.
I love the lord I love the lord for granting you I love you for greatness chapter I love you for granted book came away from this can't wait for better you I love you man continue to update continue to make me smile you are funny cruise me can't wait for more
The story has a good writing quality and ngl, i have a love and hate relationship with this fanfic. I love that the characters' personalities are distincly defined which makes it very easy for readers to get attached. On the other hand, the MC's personality...does come with shortcomings. The whole plot of MC saving a certain woman should've never happened and let her die a hero. I have been wondering the whole time if the author just secretly hates the character since MC's personality wouldn't take someone like her or anyone else in any possible future. Forcing him to like them will just ruin the story unless you can find a way to make him more mature and possibly attracted to them?.. Well whatever. I'm probably not coming back since I read fanfics to shut my brain off and entertain myself but that doesn't mean it's not a good read. Give this a try before you judge it.
author loves to state that even though the main character is 90+ mentally (due to being in a space that allows him to train without physically training) physically he's 9ish and love to call other characters pedos but refuses to acknowledge that same logic when it comes to igor kissing someone in the same situation as him. this is all leading to the main character dating 16 year old even though he's is an adult. it's one of those fics the mc is unable to control himself and is the worst aspects of both vegeta and goku without and actual humor. avoid thus fic
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the events of the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I like this story anyway, so author, don't lose heart and continue to actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the events of the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I like this story anyway, so author, don't lose heart and continue to actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the events of the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I like this story anyway, so author, don't lose heart and continue to actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the events of the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I like this story anyway, so author, don't lose heart and continue to actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
The idea was good, but in the end it just created a battle-loving MC who can't use his mind for anything other than fighting and insulting absurdly. I tried to continue reading (Chap 60) but I don't give any more
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author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
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author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
The MC is a dumb person who mainly cares about fighting he even knows himself that he is dumb my problem is after the himagima incident it just went downhill hill I am currently on chapter 106 and while there have been some plot points in this time it has been the same day for over 30 chapters it looks like the other is cucking other characters by bringing akenos mom back to life with no memories and making her mom fall in love with the MC who is only 9 right now and also before she died said that he is like a son to her , the author is also setting up another member of his race to be a love interest from what I can tell even though it is going extremely fast and they just met 1 hour ago story wise but I am still going to read and if I enjoy the story and it goes to the quality from before then I will edit my review
揭示劇透 author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (it is a translation)
I don't know where you've been reading stories but almost all of them occupy the human or divine race in the dxd world, they rarely occupy the demonic race, so removing the echo of the repeated cliché, the protagonist is very stupid to let the canon pass, either out of stupidity or simply because it gives him pleasure, the plot in general is quite basic with nothing to highlight
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this is a good book, but it's sizzled too long and the chef forgot to turn off the heat.
it was an interesting concept but it quickly got boring there's no plot, all he did is fight and train, MC is an typical musclebrain, every time he talks there's always a curse word on it.
Odio que sea obligatorio tener que dejar una reseña para puntuar una historia así que solo estoy escribiendo lo que se me viene a la cabeza por qué realmente no me voy a molestar en dejar una reseña bien formada y estructurada, así que solo voy a arrojar mi odio a esta historia junto con el desprecio que siento hacia a mi mismo, son libres de ignorar las palabras que ahora escribo por qué se que a nadie le importa y si siguen leyendo que sepan que solo a sido una perdida como letra de tiempo que no pueden recuperar a diferencia de mi que estoy en el baño cagando.
揭示劇透 its hard to make smart and strong mc at the same time, it easier to make dude who can say "i want to be strongest in the universe!" but its boring. Power without brain not worth it.
the writing is ok the plot is ok but I hate the part where they tell the MC he has to get married and have kids they are basically forcing him when the other Aryan could decipher the seals that prevent Aryans from appearing just because he wants to see an Aryan but the already and it's also horrible that the MC is so damn stupid it's not worth thinking that he will improve he won't his brain only works to hit harder and train harder until he almost kills himself multiple times in short don't read it if you don't like the Stupid MC who has no functional neurons and basically forces the MC to have kids or get married or whatever.
Trash book, to be honset. Author do not know power scale. Akeno dad easily fold MC,but author say” noooooo mc must strong as dad”, Bullshit! And he don’t know the dcd, looks as author only knowledge lf DXD from fanfics.
the latest chapter was the one that broke the camel's back for me. i really wanted to read more even though it had many red flags like the shuri thing, the author hinting at the potential relationship between Asia and him and the recent losing to atid. i mainly read this fanfiction because I thought I finally found a MC who will solve everything with brute force and at least be strongest of his age but in the latest chapter all my good will towards it was gone and I was extremely disappointed. He even lost to someone who is a blueprint of a golden spoon fed OC character who thinks himself as goku when since birth he was given a dragon as his personal 'tool' and was born as a demigod. He was given the best trainers and he won against igor because Indra's ego couldn't see his son losing so he thought of breaking the rules set by him and Shiva as a part of agreement. This latest chapter really left me lost and all my hopes for it being going to be a one of the best fanfiction of dxd was gone. In the future even it becomes the best fanfiction of the world even better than the original story I wouldn't come back to read it. peace out.
揭示劇透 Positives about this story: I haven't seen another DBZ/DxD fic on here. The MC remains human, at least as far as I've read. Negatives: The pacing is terrible. 18 chapters in and nothing related to any kind of plot has happened. There was a 6-8 chapter break from the training montage to have the MC and Baraquiel punch each other for no reason. I can say without any hesitation, skip this story.
I love the lord I love the lord for granting you I love you for greatness chapter I love you for granted book came away from this can't wait for better you I love you man continue to update continue to make me smile you are funny cruise me can't wait for more
The story has a good writing quality and ngl, i have a love and hate relationship with this fanfic. I love that the characters' personalities are distincly defined which makes it very easy for readers to get attached. On the other hand, the MC's personality...does come with shortcomings. The whole plot of MC saving a certain woman should've never happened and let her die a hero. I have been wondering the whole time if the author just secretly hates the character since MC's personality wouldn't take someone like her or anyone else in any possible future. Forcing him to like them will just ruin the story unless you can find a way to make him more mature and possibly attracted to them?.. Well whatever. I'm probably not coming back since I read fanfics to shut my brain off and entertain myself but that doesn't mean it's not a good read. Give this a try before you judge it.
author loves to state that even though the main character is 90+ mentally (due to being in a space that allows him to train without physically training) physically he's 9ish and love to call other characters pedos but refuses to acknowledge that same logic when it comes to igor kissing someone in the same situation as him. this is all leading to the main character dating 16 year old even though he's is an adult. it's one of those fics the mc is unable to control himself and is the worst aspects of both vegeta and goku without and actual humor. avoid thus fic
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the events of the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I like this story anyway, so author, don't lose heart and continue to actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the events of the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I like this story anyway, so author, don't lose heart and continue to actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the events of the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I like this story anyway, so author, don't lose heart and continue to actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the events of the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I like this story anyway, so author, don't lose heart and continue to actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
The idea was good, but in the end it just created a battle-loving MC who can't use his mind for anything other than fighting and insulting absurdly. I tried to continue reading (Chap 60) but I don't give any more
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author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
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author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (this is a translation)
The MC is a dumb person who mainly cares about fighting he even knows himself that he is dumb my problem is after the himagima incident it just went downhill hill I am currently on chapter 106 and while there have been some plot points in this time it has been the same day for over 30 chapters it looks like the other is cucking other characters by bringing akenos mom back to life with no memories and making her mom fall in love with the MC who is only 9 right now and also before she died said that he is like a son to her , the author is also setting up another member of his race to be a love interest from what I can tell even though it is going extremely fast and they just met 1 hour ago story wise but I am still going to read and if I enjoy the story and it goes to the quality from before then I will edit my review
揭示劇透 author, your story is very interesting, of course very slow but very balanced, I like it, if the author would speed up the development/maturation of the main character a little, it would be very good, but I already like this story, so the author don’t lose heart and continue actively post the story, good luck author, you have a very good story. (it is a translation)
I don't know where you've been reading stories but almost all of them occupy the human or divine race in the dxd world, they rarely occupy the demonic race, so removing the echo of the repeated cliché, the protagonist is very stupid to let the canon pass, either out of stupidity or simply because it gives him pleasure, the plot in general is quite basic with nothing to highlight
Gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooodjooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooobbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbb
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this is a good book, but it's sizzled too long and the chef forgot to turn off the heat.