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寫檢討I’ll tell you what, author, your story is awesome, very well-researched and quite balanced, but there is too much, too much water in your story, you can remove this water a little, otherwise the story is crazy.
This a heavily AU dxd inspired by DBZ, the MC is incredibly stupid and forgot the plot but author did an incredible job in justifying the stupidness of MC that I find it amazing, the only problem I have with this is the implied cucking of Brakiel due to misunderstanding
giving 5 stars cause for some unknown reason people are 1 star bombing dont't know why, its's good a bit slow but even then its's not a bad thing, keep up the good work author and dont't let the negative reviews ruin your day.
I thought it was a great story and I appreciate the effort put in trying to make a background about a new species (Aryans) in a world as coarse as DXD, it can be annoying in some points but all in all it is a good story to pass the time.
El concepto estaba bien hasta que empezó con las pendejadas de que Baraquiel sabía las artes marciales modernas como un recuerdo del pasado, osea, estamos hablando de un puto angel con miles de años de antigüedad, y las historias sigue con la misma estupidez de que Baraquiel tubo un discípulo parecido al prota eso está bien pero la actitud de Baraquiel y Azazel molesta parecen retardados, me saltes las partes que dan cáncer de cerebro pero es que las verdad sigue con lo mismo.
well it is brainless bad and dead you just made dxd a dragon ball verse like it is even worth it.characters don't even have their original personality in basic words it's just trash
Decepcionante realmente, me gusto que sea humano y todo pero que se invento una historia de como los humanos eran la raza mas poderosa en la antigüedad para poder justificar los poderes de su propio MC, fue lo primero que no me gusto después como cualquier autor genérico empezó a cagarla mas y mas, realmente tenia muchas esperanza para este fanfic y termine decepcionado
Good, very good, I really liked it, I really liked the story and its plot is incredible and the development of two characters and their personalities, I expect many things from the continuation of the story
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揭示劇透It’s DBZ in DXD, all fighting with no story development. All that happens is the MC gets mad or something then ends up fighting with someone and before and after the fight its just unintelligent nonsense until he fight with the person again. Instead of having dialogue it’s just cursing and Chinese fanfic insults. Decent concept but very poorly executed
the story is one of the best and most unique fanfiction I've read so far. Keep up the good work
It's good and unique but in chapter 80 there is a mention of something which gives me an idea that mc will cuck akeno's father. And considering he trained him in the first few chapters and had a very good relationship with akeno's father so in my point of view it's pretty bad and I hate both cucking others(those who are mc's friends) and getting cucked fanfic.
Trash novel don’t read this fanfic. The MC knows that something bad will happen to Akeno and Shuri but did nothing to change their fate. He has the time chamber but he still allowed tragic event to happen to his love ones. Trash MC like the author of this book.
Mc is an easily triggered battle junky and author seems to follow general dbz format of rule of cool. Problem is this ain’t tv. Also boy shouldn’t tick you off unless grew up with racist
i like the story at first it's really interesting but.... by chapter 40+ MC uses of time chamber turn him into more of a child then goku. Even goku knows when to stop unlike MC child muscled brain picking whatever fight he can't even win.
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he's just a dumb muscle character, doesn't think much and the akenos father part was bad too, he's like a angry Goku with who doesn't think on what his actions do
It is fun, not perfect, far from that, but fun, you should try it. .................................................................................
El autor es chino o se "inspiró" de un fanfic chino. Es molesto lo tonto que es el protagonista, y lo peor es que el auto no advierte que todos la historia es tan tonta.
This is hot garbage I in the past wrote actual criticism in the hope of making it a better story but the author deleted it so f him here’s a 1 star
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揭示劇透I’ll tell you what, author, your story is awesome, very well-researched and quite balanced, but there is too much, too much water in your story, you can remove this water a little, otherwise the story is crazy.
This a heavily AU dxd inspired by DBZ, the MC is incredibly stupid and forgot the plot but author did an incredible job in justifying the stupidness of MC that I find it amazing, the only problem I have with this is the implied cucking of Brakiel due to misunderstanding
giving 5 stars cause for some unknown reason people are 1 star bombing dont't know why, its's good a bit slow but even then its's not a bad thing, keep up the good work author and dont't let the negative reviews ruin your day.
I thought it was a great story and I appreciate the effort put in trying to make a background about a new species (Aryans) in a world as coarse as DXD, it can be annoying in some points but all in all it is a good story to pass the time.
El concepto estaba bien hasta que empezó con las pendejadas de que Baraquiel sabía las artes marciales modernas como un recuerdo del pasado, osea, estamos hablando de un puto angel con miles de años de antigüedad, y las historias sigue con la misma estupidez de que Baraquiel tubo un discípulo parecido al prota eso está bien pero la actitud de Baraquiel y Azazel molesta parecen retardados, me saltes las partes que dan cáncer de cerebro pero es que las verdad sigue con lo mismo.
well it is brainless bad and dead you just made dxd a dragon ball verse like it is even worth it.characters don't even have their original personality in basic words it's just trash
Decepcionante realmente, me gusto que sea humano y todo pero que se invento una historia de como los humanos eran la raza mas poderosa en la antigüedad para poder justificar los poderes de su propio MC, fue lo primero que no me gusto después como cualquier autor genérico empezó a cagarla mas y mas, realmente tenia muchas esperanza para este fanfic y termine decepcionado
Good, very good, I really liked it, I really liked the story and its plot is incredible and the development of two characters and their personalities, I expect many things from the continuation of the story
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揭示劇透It’s DBZ in DXD, all fighting with no story development. All that happens is the MC gets mad or something then ends up fighting with someone and before and after the fight its just unintelligent nonsense until he fight with the person again. Instead of having dialogue it’s just cursing and Chinese fanfic insults. Decent concept but very poorly executed
the story is one of the best and most unique fanfiction I've read so far. Keep up the good work
It's good and unique but in chapter 80 there is a mention of something which gives me an idea that mc will cuck akeno's father. And considering he trained him in the first few chapters and had a very good relationship with akeno's father so in my point of view it's pretty bad and I hate both cucking others(those who are mc's friends) and getting cucked fanfic.
Trash novel don’t read this fanfic. The MC knows that something bad will happen to Akeno and Shuri but did nothing to change their fate. He has the time chamber but he still allowed tragic event to happen to his love ones. Trash MC like the author of this book.
Mc is an easily triggered battle junky and author seems to follow general dbz format of rule of cool. Problem is this ain’t tv. Also boy shouldn’t tick you off unless grew up with racist
i like the story at first it's really interesting but.... by chapter 40+ MC uses of time chamber turn him into more of a child then goku. Even goku knows when to stop unlike MC child muscled brain picking whatever fight he can't even win.
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he's just a dumb muscle character, doesn't think much and the akenos father part was bad too, he's like a angry Goku with who doesn't think on what his actions do
It is fun, not perfect, far from that, but fun, you should try it. .................................................................................
El autor es chino o se "inspiró" de un fanfic chino. Es molesto lo tonto que es el protagonista, y lo peor es que el auto no advierte que todos la historia es tan tonta.
This is hot garbage I in the past wrote actual criticism in the hope of making it a better story but the author deleted it so f him here’s a 1 star
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