/ Anime & Comics / Gacha Is Bad Civilization! (DC Meta Essence Fic)
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I am the bone of my salt.
Black keys is my body.
Sodium is my blood.
I shall endeavor to roll 1000 times.
Unknown to luck, nor known to the source.
I have withstood the pain of universes.
Yet my hands shall seek to hold everything.
So, as I pray, unlimited, gacha works!
(Let it be known that any previously created, characters or settings belong to their original owners or companies.)
(Also, shout out to EvansKannon For his work with the marvel gacha story.)
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寫檢討It starts very well, honestly, although the beginning is forced and an event happens for him to go to the league of shadows just because of the reason that the author wants to get the waifus there, the plot starts well for a fanfic... But everything it goes downhill when there is descendant drama, and these multiverse OP entities meddling in the MC's life. Why can't we just have a direct reincarnation? Why does he need to reconcile with his system? Why does it have to be so complicated? Now, in the recent chapter, he was an existence similar to an Edritch god, he was unique, now thanks to his SIMP for his death, he 'forcibly' signed a kind of contract for his soul to be handed over to her if he died thus completely losing its unique status. Yes, this had a lot of potential, but it was completely destroyed by the pointless drama, and these multiverse beings that keep sprouting out of nowhere. It's only the 20th chapter, it's at the power level of a city destroyer, but these beings keep appearing like flies, meh.
None of this makes sense, I don't understand the MC's behavior, nor his actions, none of it makes sense, it's just poorly crafted wish fulfillment.Read it for yourself.
Thank you for creating DC fanfiction. i will always upload one power stone everyday. so please don't drop or stop writing it.
The idea is cool, but the story doesn't make sense, full of forced and stupid events and decisions. Although the gacha isn't random at all, I liked how it placed the MC on the street level instead of starting on the city-destroying level, but unfortunately the bad plot ruined the fic for me.
This was a really good idea. And it was pretty good up until you had him go be a part of the brotherhood of assassins. You spent way too long in that place. You had him there for multiple multiple multiple multiple multiple chapters. That should have just been a stop gap until he got powerful enough to escape. But you had an languish there. Then you had the stupid thought to send him to another fking universe. Why would you do that when you haven't even explored the one you're fking currently in? We have seen there are 2 places in the one universe that he was reborn into. Gotham city and the brotherhood of assassins. There's really 2 places we've seen. He hasn't gone to metropolis. He hasn't gone anywhere else in that f****** universe. And he hasn't done anything but stupid missions for the brotherhood. What happened to him getting place of his own? What happened him setting up his own operation? Nothing is going as it should in the book.
I’m not gonna lie “shoutout to Evanskannon” really got me there and also your other dxd work is also amazing Please dont drop ARIGATO!!🙇🏽♂️🙇🏽♂️
Dude please do not drop this fanfic, it has a great potential and there really isn't much of juicy DC gacha fanfic like this one. (maybe none lol)
This story has a massive potential to be great. Already one masterpiece with the Cao Cao story, looking forward to this as well. Please continue both!
It's very nice and i love this book along with the other one of spear boy and hope that you can continue both till the end and maybe update more chapters if you can. I will be honest both the books mentioned are in my top of the favourites list(same as akikan40) works and hope your work as much lengthy as his books.
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How about making a Superboy fanfic? There aren't many and the ones that do exist are either bad or abandoned. ................................................................................................................................
Good idea, poor execution. Pros: - The Gacha started nice, with competent but not overly powerful gains, giving him the power to survive mundane threats. - Attention to little details like how having taskmaster's aptitude and mimicry would change his balance and gait, revealing him as unordinary. Cons: - Started in Gotham again. It's a city that's suffering from a warlock's curse, not transmigration and reincarnation central. - The story lacks proper emotional expression, from both the MC and the other characters. It's only got sentences that states what they are feeling bluntly and adjectives set a tone that is never properly explored. - Plot points lack proper foreshadowing and build up. Like the league of shadows suddenly attacking the MC. It would be fine if there was a paragraph of events leading up to that point afterwards or may snippets, but no, the author just put in a note saying that the league was watching batman for a while. - Too many powerful entities are interacting with the MC, creating a dissonance with the setting. - The MC's personality is bland. He's got traits like being calm but that's it. No proper motivation beyond surviving to be found. But this is early on in the story, so this can change. These are just a few points and critics. The author can improve upon these, making it null. If the author decides to give high intellect to the MC, be aware of mundane plots and situations that this intelligence can help prevent, because judging from the current material, I highly doubt the author can write a proper genius MC.