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really excited to read more! one of the few twilight fanfic's that adds to the wold.
It's quite good even I like the set up at the start and he seems pretty realistic as a person. I saw some people saying that oh he has no ambition and why did he learn to fight only after fighting a vampire. Well it's plain and simple, he can't die and it isn't even the start of the original twilight series we are still in old times and right now he is just enjoying life and what is currently happening is just the set up. Now for the fighting, that was the first vampire he fought and everything before that he could just one shot since he can't die. Like you can't tell you need something until you experience failure that shows what needs to be improved and how you can improve your weaknesses. All in all very good and I want more chapters.
loving this story please release more chapters . Godspeed Adam grey and thank you.
its a great fanfic and I wish I could give more stars, but I had to drop it because there is one MASSIVELY annoying thing that happens in it. and this happens in a lot of fan fiction, but it just irritates me so much and that is when a mc is reincarnated 1000s of years before the plot so they try to not change the timeline so the plot can happen. I mean why the FUCK would you care about keeping the original timeline. and no one world care so much that they wait 1000s of years. and even if you did, it would not matter as you existing will inevitably create butterfly effects, that the more years that pass the bigger the effect gets. plus the one thing the mc did was create a proper almost global bank well before its time which would drastically change the course of county's and intern the plot.
the entire novel collapses on the third chapter, until then we had a fairly sufferable prologue that was setting up just how wildly overpowered the mc is which is fine. it's better to have us SEE why the mc outclasses every other living being on the planet than to have him just show up at the start of twilight with thousands of years of experience and more power than any vampire ever born. so where does it fall on it's head? the first time the mc encounters vampires, the author very obviously wanted the mc to struggle for some reason but couldn't figure out the how or why so he made a choice. for literally no reason other than "the author is telling you so it is true now" the mc is conveniently and suddenly weakened by a factor of hundreds if not thousands. the vampires don't have kryptonite or something, no "oh we happen to have a specific way to weaken the strong protagonist for forced cheap tension" they just... have the authors powers or something..? the author threw away the entire setup/introduction for the novel and spat in the faces of every reader who was there until that point in favour of some lazy, forced and unneeded tension where the mc "finds out hes not the top of the food chain" while sitting miles above any perceivable top of said food chain. how this novel has more than 15 chapters when such a blatant mistake exists in the first 5, throttling the entire foundation of the novel as a whole, I don't know. my suggestion is to wait until the start of the novel has been edited before reading because outside this blatant screw up the rest of the story had potential. the mc is, for once, literally immortal instead of the cheap knock off immortal where they just don't age. he's superior in every tangible sense to vampires and is essentially just the deluxe version of said vampires down to the pale skin and superior physical features. once the third chapter is fixed into a readable state I'd actually recommend this novel, other than that maybe try to find a way to skip the earlier chapters to avoid ruining your experience and just get to the good parts (assuming that nothing important happens early on besides this mess).
absolutely yes please more chps this is fantastic.pre canon badass oc yes please.edge of my seat in anticipation.
It was good all the way up till the last chapter I read which just put so much stupid drama into this story that I hold no more interest in this story. But for those who love drama feel free to like the story.
no voy a ponerle un 5 solo porque el autor enredo la dinamica romantica osea entiendo que quieres poner al prota con una mujer de la familia culen pero no puedes generar ese enredo para solo intercambiar a la mujer y darle una justifcacion en el 119 si no le erro al capitulo. mas la nota al pie de pagina eso me parece mas una justificacion que se da el solo (autor) para que asi se, y ahi meter drama
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please update it daily if you're okay you have to catch up with others and win the race with time
OK AS A FAN THAT CAME LATE INTO THE STORY. START IN CHAPTER 12O..I LOVE THIS NOVEL IS A FUN READ..THE PLOT STORY IS FUN AND THE CHARACTER ARE FUN..I LOVE THE MC CHARACTER HIS FUN..ONE QUESTION WILL THE MC CREATE THE TECHNOLOGY TO TRAVEL TO OTHER PLANETS GALAXIES OR OTHER UNIVERSES AND WORLDS WHEN THE TWILIGHT STORY IS OVER . CMON AUTHOR THIS NOVEL HAS A LOT OF FUN POTENTIAL STORY..AUTHOR DO NOT QUIT THANK YOU.
This incredible work captured me and did not let go until I read it completely! It was the best hours, and I'm glad that I was lucky enough to stumble upon it on the Internet, so then I'll be able to remember funny moments from this story, and I'll be warmed by all the events and feelings I've experienced since I started reading and ending with the last chapter at the moment! I'm expecting a sequel and I'm ready to wait forever, but that doesn't mean I have it! We're not getting any younger here!) As for the grizzly attack on my favorite character in the Saga, Emmett, I think it will be an intriguing event when Rosalie faces a choice, and I'm looking forward to reuniting the whole family and approaching the two thousandth years! Thank you for the great story that gave me unforgettable memories and brightened up my time!✨✨✨
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I loved every part of this novel....thank you author for such a wonderful piece of work ....😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍,..............😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊
Make Alice Cullen mc mate please if possible Alice Cullen mc mate Alice Cullen mc mate Alice Cullen Romantic mate for mc please Alice Cullen As mc wife please ?
i hope this hasn’t been dropped . z s. s s x s s s. s d d x d d d d d. x d d z z z s z s z s z z z z z. z z z z. z z z z z z z z z z z z s z z z z z z z zzz z. z z z z z z z z s z
Muy bueno pero muy poco capitulos, la historia se desarrolla bien diferente a cuando empiezan solo desde la historia principal y no exploran más el mundo.
¿Que paso?¿por qué no salen capítulos hace un mes? ................................................................................................................autor
Aku tahu penulis membuat dia semangkin pintar seiring berjalannya waktu, dan bro 3000 tahun tanpa perkembangan nyata selain dapat mengalah beberapa vampir. dan lebih buruknya lagi dia seperti tidak melakulan apapun tentangnya, ya dia belajar dan belajar tapi itu seperti omong kosong. penulis memaksa dalam 3000 tahun tanpa perkembangan selain kekeh ingin mengikuti alur cerita canon.
I loved it the history 💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜😃💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜😃💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜😃💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜😃💜💜💜💜
Mr Author don't listen to anyone's bullshit. Just write what you like and your initial intention. It's very relaxing to read about him just living his life. There are many novel there about ambitious mcs, world domination, being a god, etc. But yours is unique. So keep it up.
всё нравится! дерзай дальше. и смешно и местами грустно, но интересно попасть в сумерки за 6 тыщ лет до канона)) я еще такого не читала.
This story was so good that I couldn't stop and binged the whole thing in practically one go. Then I spent half an hour looking for something, anything like this to scratch the same itch and found nothing. It was torture. Amazing story, love the premise and the idea of the mc's small changes throughout history. The pacing is perfect. I can imagine that pacing would be the most difficult part of writing a story like this, one that covers such a long period of time but it was well done. I never felt bored. 10/10 would recommend!
One of the best Twilight Fanfic out there. Genuinely love how Adam has grown throughout the story. I genuinely hope that the author can complete this story.
Great Story, Author really shows the passage of time and how it affects our MC: he becomes much more mature, but also distant, mot wanting to form relationships with ppl that only live a fraction of his time. The normal plot is just starting now with 100 chapters in, but its definitely worth to read everything MC did throughtout the centuries, from ancient rome to the independence of the usa, all the while having to play around with the different vampire covens and politics.
This is really a breath of fresh air among all the other twilight clichè plots. What's more, this is a fantastic fanfic in and of itself. Writing quality is easy and smooth. Characters are so vividly portrayed, one can't help but be drawn into them and live their lives as if one is living them himself. And the world background, Just wow. From the limited and cramped story line that is the twilight, Author has created such a work of art from those tiny details, with originality marring the entirety of the story. Sometimes you can't help but feel this is an entirely different novel, not just a twilight fanfic. Such a good story, and every thing connects, things from millennia old moments to the latest ones. The story has literally no plot holes. At least I didn't see any. This is a must read for every Supernatural and twilight fan.
Overall it’s a good fic and it’s worth it to read it, it really wasn’t what you’d expect from a twilight fan fic but in a good way. I can’t wait to see what the author does with the story and how it ends.
Every day I wake up, I open this stupid app to check up on this stupid story to see if there’s any new chapters released because I can’t stop thinking about reading it. I would highly recommend this fanfic. It is a slice of life story about an immortal living through life just chilling, and it is a very comforting story to read. I think the world is well built up. Can’t wait to see how everything is gonna fit in when we come to the main storyline. 10 out of 10 would highly recommend.
Awesome story! Really enjoyed how it's progressing so far. We're finally getting to the main storyline and I can't wait to see how Adam deals with the Cullen family's teenage vampire drama. Good luck!🤞
hope this hasn’t been dropped ………………………………………………………………………………………………….………………………………………………………………………………………………….………………………………………………………………………………………………….
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This is undoubtedly the best fanfiction I've ever read. I started the story only a day ago and I'm already at chapter 97. God bless this author, I'll glace you for as long as you are still writing
This story is awesome, is original and plot makes sense, right amount of time skip w/o leaving unexplained gaps. It keeps you engaged in every chapter...
really excited to read more! one of the few twilight fanfic's that adds to the wold.
It's quite good even I like the set up at the start and he seems pretty realistic as a person. I saw some people saying that oh he has no ambition and why did he learn to fight only after fighting a vampire. Well it's plain and simple, he can't die and it isn't even the start of the original twilight series we are still in old times and right now he is just enjoying life and what is currently happening is just the set up. Now for the fighting, that was the first vampire he fought and everything before that he could just one shot since he can't die. Like you can't tell you need something until you experience failure that shows what needs to be improved and how you can improve your weaknesses. All in all very good and I want more chapters.
loving this story please release more chapters . Godspeed Adam grey and thank you.
its a great fanfic and I wish I could give more stars, but I had to drop it because there is one MASSIVELY annoying thing that happens in it. and this happens in a lot of fan fiction, but it just irritates me so much and that is when a mc is reincarnated 1000s of years before the plot so they try to not change the timeline so the plot can happen. I mean why the FUCK would you care about keeping the original timeline. and no one world care so much that they wait 1000s of years. and even if you did, it would not matter as you existing will inevitably create butterfly effects, that the more years that pass the bigger the effect gets. plus the one thing the mc did was create a proper almost global bank well before its time which would drastically change the course of county's and intern the plot.
the entire novel collapses on the third chapter, until then we had a fairly sufferable prologue that was setting up just how wildly overpowered the mc is which is fine. it's better to have us SEE why the mc outclasses every other living being on the planet than to have him just show up at the start of twilight with thousands of years of experience and more power than any vampire ever born. so where does it fall on it's head? the first time the mc encounters vampires, the author very obviously wanted the mc to struggle for some reason but couldn't figure out the how or why so he made a choice. for literally no reason other than "the author is telling you so it is true now" the mc is conveniently and suddenly weakened by a factor of hundreds if not thousands. the vampires don't have kryptonite or something, no "oh we happen to have a specific way to weaken the strong protagonist for forced cheap tension" they just... have the authors powers or something..? the author threw away the entire setup/introduction for the novel and spat in the faces of every reader who was there until that point in favour of some lazy, forced and unneeded tension where the mc "finds out hes not the top of the food chain" while sitting miles above any perceivable top of said food chain. how this novel has more than 15 chapters when such a blatant mistake exists in the first 5, throttling the entire foundation of the novel as a whole, I don't know. my suggestion is to wait until the start of the novel has been edited before reading because outside this blatant screw up the rest of the story had potential. the mc is, for once, literally immortal instead of the cheap knock off immortal where they just don't age. he's superior in every tangible sense to vampires and is essentially just the deluxe version of said vampires down to the pale skin and superior physical features. once the third chapter is fixed into a readable state I'd actually recommend this novel, other than that maybe try to find a way to skip the earlier chapters to avoid ruining your experience and just get to the good parts (assuming that nothing important happens early on besides this mess).
absolutely yes please more chps this is fantastic.pre canon badass oc yes please.edge of my seat in anticipation.
It was good all the way up till the last chapter I read which just put so much stupid drama into this story that I hold no more interest in this story. But for those who love drama feel free to like the story.
no voy a ponerle un 5 solo porque el autor enredo la dinamica romantica osea entiendo que quieres poner al prota con una mujer de la familia culen pero no puedes generar ese enredo para solo intercambiar a la mujer y darle una justifcacion en el 119 si no le erro al capitulo. mas la nota al pie de pagina eso me parece mas una justificacion que se da el solo (autor) para que asi se, y ahi meter drama
揭示劇透 please update it daily if you're okay you have to catch up with others and win the race with time
OK AS A FAN THAT CAME LATE INTO THE STORY. START IN CHAPTER 12O..I LOVE THIS NOVEL IS A FUN READ..THE PLOT STORY IS FUN AND THE CHARACTER ARE FUN..I LOVE THE MC CHARACTER HIS FUN..ONE QUESTION WILL THE MC CREATE THE TECHNOLOGY TO TRAVEL TO OTHER PLANETS GALAXIES OR OTHER UNIVERSES AND WORLDS WHEN THE TWILIGHT STORY IS OVER . CMON AUTHOR THIS NOVEL HAS A LOT OF FUN POTENTIAL STORY..AUTHOR DO NOT QUIT THANK YOU.
This incredible work captured me and did not let go until I read it completely! It was the best hours, and I'm glad that I was lucky enough to stumble upon it on the Internet, so then I'll be able to remember funny moments from this story, and I'll be warmed by all the events and feelings I've experienced since I started reading and ending with the last chapter at the moment! I'm expecting a sequel and I'm ready to wait forever, but that doesn't mean I have it! We're not getting any younger here!) As for the grizzly attack on my favorite character in the Saga, Emmett, I think it will be an intriguing event when Rosalie faces a choice, and I'm looking forward to reuniting the whole family and approaching the two thousandth years! Thank you for the great story that gave me unforgettable memories and brightened up my time!✨✨✨
.........................................................................................................................................................................................................🙂😶
揭示劇透 I loved every part of this novel....thank you author for such a wonderful piece of work ....😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍,..............😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊
Make Alice Cullen mc mate please if possible Alice Cullen mc mate Alice Cullen mc mate Alice Cullen Romantic mate for mc please Alice Cullen As mc wife please ?
i hope this hasn’t been dropped . z s. s s x s s s. s d d x d d d d d. x d d z z z s z s z s z z z z z. z z z z. z z z z z z z z z z z z s z z z z z z z zzz z. z z z z z z z z s z
Muy bueno pero muy poco capitulos, la historia se desarrolla bien diferente a cuando empiezan solo desde la historia principal y no exploran más el mundo.
¿Que paso?¿por qué no salen capítulos hace un mes? ................................................................................................................autor
Aku tahu penulis membuat dia semangkin pintar seiring berjalannya waktu, dan bro 3000 tahun tanpa perkembangan nyata selain dapat mengalah beberapa vampir. dan lebih buruknya lagi dia seperti tidak melakulan apapun tentangnya, ya dia belajar dan belajar tapi itu seperti omong kosong. penulis memaksa dalam 3000 tahun tanpa perkembangan selain kekeh ingin mengikuti alur cerita canon.
I loved it the history 💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜😃💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜😃💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜😃💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜😃💜💜💜💜
Mr Author don't listen to anyone's bullshit. Just write what you like and your initial intention. It's very relaxing to read about him just living his life. There are many novel there about ambitious mcs, world domination, being a god, etc. But yours is unique. So keep it up.
всё нравится! дерзай дальше. и смешно и местами грустно, но интересно попасть в сумерки за 6 тыщ лет до канона)) я еще такого не читала.
This story was so good that I couldn't stop and binged the whole thing in practically one go. Then I spent half an hour looking for something, anything like this to scratch the same itch and found nothing. It was torture. Amazing story, love the premise and the idea of the mc's small changes throughout history. The pacing is perfect. I can imagine that pacing would be the most difficult part of writing a story like this, one that covers such a long period of time but it was well done. I never felt bored. 10/10 would recommend!
One of the best Twilight Fanfic out there. Genuinely love how Adam has grown throughout the story. I genuinely hope that the author can complete this story.
Great Story, Author really shows the passage of time and how it affects our MC: he becomes much more mature, but also distant, mot wanting to form relationships with ppl that only live a fraction of his time. The normal plot is just starting now with 100 chapters in, but its definitely worth to read everything MC did throughtout the centuries, from ancient rome to the independence of the usa, all the while having to play around with the different vampire covens and politics.
This is really a breath of fresh air among all the other twilight clichè plots. What's more, this is a fantastic fanfic in and of itself. Writing quality is easy and smooth. Characters are so vividly portrayed, one can't help but be drawn into them and live their lives as if one is living them himself. And the world background, Just wow. From the limited and cramped story line that is the twilight, Author has created such a work of art from those tiny details, with originality marring the entirety of the story. Sometimes you can't help but feel this is an entirely different novel, not just a twilight fanfic. Such a good story, and every thing connects, things from millennia old moments to the latest ones. The story has literally no plot holes. At least I didn't see any. This is a must read for every Supernatural and twilight fan.
Overall it’s a good fic and it’s worth it to read it, it really wasn’t what you’d expect from a twilight fan fic but in a good way. I can’t wait to see what the author does with the story and how it ends.
Every day I wake up, I open this stupid app to check up on this stupid story to see if there’s any new chapters released because I can’t stop thinking about reading it. I would highly recommend this fanfic. It is a slice of life story about an immortal living through life just chilling, and it is a very comforting story to read. I think the world is well built up. Can’t wait to see how everything is gonna fit in when we come to the main storyline. 10 out of 10 would highly recommend.
Awesome story! Really enjoyed how it's progressing so far. We're finally getting to the main storyline and I can't wait to see how Adam deals with the Cullen family's teenage vampire drama. Good luck!🤞
hope this hasn’t been dropped ………………………………………………………………………………………………….………………………………………………………………………………………………….………………………………………………………………………………………………….
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This is undoubtedly the best fanfiction I've ever read. I started the story only a day ago and I'm already at chapter 97. God bless this author, I'll glace you for as long as you are still writing
This story is awesome, is original and plot makes sense, right amount of time skip w/o leaving unexplained gaps. It keeps you engaged in every chapter...