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This book explores friendship, resilience, and the search for truth in a world where the ordinary meets the extraordinary. A truly wonderful novel and highly recommended!
The narrative is praised for its elegant prose and engaging style, maintaining a good pace in the story's progression. The mysterious plot attracts readers, as do the well-developed characters and their dynamics. The suggestion to add more sensory details can further deepen immersion in the story. Additionally, it is important to correct the formatting issue with spaces between paragraphs to enhance the reading experience. Overall, it is a promising read, full of mysteries that pique the reader's curiosity.
Author has such a beautiful way with words. The way the story is written feels like ethereal poetry. You become really invested in the characters and their dynamic. It's such a mysterious, dark yet beautiful story unveiling.
This story is sent forward by the prose of the book, as well as good pacing that doesn't drag or move too fast for us to understand. It's a book worth reading.
Author's narration is very beautiful! It's like your reading poetry with a nice story^^ Keep up the good work author!🙌
The writing style is very pleasant, and the characters' personalities are well-defined. In certain situations, you can even anticipate their actions. Overall, I liked it a lot and consider it time well spent!
Interest story. beautiful writing, creative word play, and a very strong character writing and development.
The most striking part about this novel is its prose...which is beautiful. The style is fluent and smooth, and the story progresses fairly well. It's a truly enjoyable read.
Wait... I love stories like this. I hope the girl doesn't give up on love immediately. lol Good job author!
A wonderful read. Filled with so many mysteries that I wanna unravel. Love d bond between Lilly and Maria and wanna c whats really troubling Lilly. Dt fate wanna know it. So keep up d good wek. Looking forward to more🥰🥰
The writing style was a little too stiff at the beginning, but it gets better. It's a nice story, and the author is really getting the mystery thing right.Good luck 🤞🤞
I have only one question...When is the movie out? I mean if they made a movie series out of Twilight...This one must be the next one. The language has made me fall in love with the writer. I am IN LOVE...I mean it...I can spend the rest of my life reading the stories written by the author. it was a breath taking journey...If you are into mystery and enigma..you must give this a try!!!
Great so far not going to lie. Some minor mistakes but that happens. Overall an great story. I might finish it tonight
The writing is solid I saw few if any grammar errors the story flows well, but I would like a bit more sensory detail here and there (not much just a few spots I noticed seemed...empty? My biggest pet peeve is no spaces between paragraphs makes it really hard to read on webnovel, but that is a formatting issue not writing issue.
Its a well written novel and all three main lead have an interesting part to play in the story. While the grammar is a little lacking, the story and plot makes up for it!
Great Novel, a lot of bad grammars tho. (Mine has a lot too. Still a great novel, well executed . And I only read chapter 1)
An mystery story with three main leads that actually ends up being well-written ? Wow, ok, now that's talent, can't wait to see the potential twists and turns in the future chapters !
I'm ten chapters in and I can say that this story is a great one. Well fleshed out characters, a poetic writing style that captures imagination and stable updates that mean that you would always get your daily dose of the drug. There are a few issues, but if the author works on them, then this story is destined for greatness!
It's an intriguing novel, Keep it up :) wish for more chapters. The way Noah is describe is good though some scenes are kinda shorts. Its a wonderful novel.
I feel like the chapters are a little bit rushed, but nevertheless, this novel is still an intriguing read. I love all the mysteries and the story is very descriptive which is something I value when reading novels. I'm a five star rating because I believe this story has real potential😊.
Interesting... The story has a good flow even when the writing style needs some changes. For example: the start of Chapter 2 somehow missed dots and big words that start the sentences which means I needed to read it at least three times to fully understand the content there. It's only around six or seven sentences... But, still after a well-written first chap, the next ones began to lose the composure and information started appearing too fast for me. It has potential and it is a captivating story, only the grammar I would change :D But don't be thrown from a good mood by some negative words of mine. Keep up with your tough work and enjoy the moment of being in a different world through your own words <3
I like your writing style! All in all, I have not much to criticize about your work, however I would suggest that you try to not put so much text into one reading block as it is a bit harder on the eyes to rad (or maybe it's just me). And eventually it's also just me but the chapters feel kind of short so maybe you can attempt to increase your wordcount. I like your work so far so keep at it!
This was a great read! The characters are interesting and the mystery kept me reading! There are grammar errors but I think that you can improve those by simply using software like grammarly. It was a great rear! Looking forward to more!
I'm in chapter 3, and so far I liked this story's characters and tone personally. The plot is full of mysteries which makes the opening of the story interesting. I like it when MC is a painter, it gives me different vibes as I like to paint too. Keep up the good work!All the best
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I find your mystery novel to be thoroughly captivating and exceptionally well-crafted.
I liked your descriptions a lot. It had the feeling that it was a poem, not a story. What I found lacking is the first chapter. It is a bit rushed, and the leads were installed one after another. There is more to tell than show throughout the story but it did work well with the plot. Most of the conversations were told to us as sentences. It would be better if It could be transformed into dialogues. The world background is less mentioned (Where did this story happen? And Where are the leads' families?..) The characters need to be more fleshed up. What are their goals, fears and personalities? Overall, I liked the poetic descriptions and the way you wrote the mystery of the story.
One word, Good. The work is amazing till now, and I would ask the author to keep up this consistency but at the same time release longer chapters. That is all
This book explores friendship, resilience, and the search for truth in a world where the ordinary meets the extraordinary. A truly wonderful novel and highly recommended!
The narrative is praised for its elegant prose and engaging style, maintaining a good pace in the story's progression. The mysterious plot attracts readers, as do the well-developed characters and their dynamics. The suggestion to add more sensory details can further deepen immersion in the story. Additionally, it is important to correct the formatting issue with spaces between paragraphs to enhance the reading experience. Overall, it is a promising read, full of mysteries that pique the reader's curiosity.
Author has such a beautiful way with words. The way the story is written feels like ethereal poetry. You become really invested in the characters and their dynamic. It's such a mysterious, dark yet beautiful story unveiling.
This story is sent forward by the prose of the book, as well as good pacing that doesn't drag or move too fast for us to understand. It's a book worth reading.
Author's narration is very beautiful! It's like your reading poetry with a nice story^^ Keep up the good work author!🙌
The writing style is very pleasant, and the characters' personalities are well-defined. In certain situations, you can even anticipate their actions. Overall, I liked it a lot and consider it time well spent!
Interest story. beautiful writing, creative word play, and a very strong character writing and development.
The most striking part about this novel is its prose...which is beautiful. The style is fluent and smooth, and the story progresses fairly well. It's a truly enjoyable read.
Wait... I love stories like this. I hope the girl doesn't give up on love immediately. lol Good job author!
A wonderful read. Filled with so many mysteries that I wanna unravel. Love d bond between Lilly and Maria and wanna c whats really troubling Lilly. Dt fate wanna know it. So keep up d good wek. Looking forward to more🥰🥰
The writing style was a little too stiff at the beginning, but it gets better. It's a nice story, and the author is really getting the mystery thing right.Good luck 🤞🤞
I have only one question...When is the movie out? I mean if they made a movie series out of Twilight...This one must be the next one. The language has made me fall in love with the writer. I am IN LOVE...I mean it...I can spend the rest of my life reading the stories written by the author. it was a breath taking journey...If you are into mystery and enigma..you must give this a try!!!
Great so far not going to lie. Some minor mistakes but that happens. Overall an great story. I might finish it tonight
The writing is solid I saw few if any grammar errors the story flows well, but I would like a bit more sensory detail here and there (not much just a few spots I noticed seemed...empty? My biggest pet peeve is no spaces between paragraphs makes it really hard to read on webnovel, but that is a formatting issue not writing issue.
Its a well written novel and all three main lead have an interesting part to play in the story. While the grammar is a little lacking, the story and plot makes up for it!
Great Novel, a lot of bad grammars tho. (Mine has a lot too. Still a great novel, well executed . And I only read chapter 1)
An mystery story with three main leads that actually ends up being well-written ? Wow, ok, now that's talent, can't wait to see the potential twists and turns in the future chapters !
I'm ten chapters in and I can say that this story is a great one. Well fleshed out characters, a poetic writing style that captures imagination and stable updates that mean that you would always get your daily dose of the drug. There are a few issues, but if the author works on them, then this story is destined for greatness!
It's an intriguing novel, Keep it up :) wish for more chapters. The way Noah is describe is good though some scenes are kinda shorts. Its a wonderful novel.
I feel like the chapters are a little bit rushed, but nevertheless, this novel is still an intriguing read. I love all the mysteries and the story is very descriptive which is something I value when reading novels. I'm a five star rating because I believe this story has real potential😊.
Interesting... The story has a good flow even when the writing style needs some changes. For example: the start of Chapter 2 somehow missed dots and big words that start the sentences which means I needed to read it at least three times to fully understand the content there. It's only around six or seven sentences... But, still after a well-written first chap, the next ones began to lose the composure and information started appearing too fast for me. It has potential and it is a captivating story, only the grammar I would change :D But don't be thrown from a good mood by some negative words of mine. Keep up with your tough work and enjoy the moment of being in a different world through your own words <3
I like your writing style! All in all, I have not much to criticize about your work, however I would suggest that you try to not put so much text into one reading block as it is a bit harder on the eyes to rad (or maybe it's just me). And eventually it's also just me but the chapters feel kind of short so maybe you can attempt to increase your wordcount. I like your work so far so keep at it!
This was a great read! The characters are interesting and the mystery kept me reading! There are grammar errors but I think that you can improve those by simply using software like grammarly. It was a great rear! Looking forward to more!
I'm in chapter 3, and so far I liked this story's characters and tone personally. The plot is full of mysteries which makes the opening of the story interesting. I like it when MC is a painter, it gives me different vibes as I like to paint too. Keep up the good work!All the best
揭示劇透 I find your mystery novel to be thoroughly captivating and exceptionally well-crafted.
I liked your descriptions a lot. It had the feeling that it was a poem, not a story. What I found lacking is the first chapter. It is a bit rushed, and the leads were installed one after another. There is more to tell than show throughout the story but it did work well with the plot. Most of the conversations were told to us as sentences. It would be better if It could be transformed into dialogues. The world background is less mentioned (Where did this story happen? And Where are the leads' families?..) The characters need to be more fleshed up. What are their goals, fears and personalities? Overall, I liked the poetic descriptions and the way you wrote the mystery of the story.
One word, Good. The work is amazing till now, and I would ask the author to keep up this consistency but at the same time release longer chapters. That is all
mystery novel finally,hhhhhh love the developing so far