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the book is spectacular and had been truly interesting from the very first chapter and after reading the first chapter I become a ''diehard" fan of this beautifully written/translated book ❤️ 😍 form 🇵🇰 🇵🇰 [img=recommend][img=recommend]
Pokemon fanfics are always fun to read , and this one had a pretty fun twist. Translation is pretty bad but not too bad , translator sometimes makes mistakes like using the wrong names or forgetting the system introduced in chapter 1 . Overall fun idea but bad Translation.
The idea of the story is awesome. but ultimately it fails to delivery on its premise. A daycare no ones allowed to enter or question. of the thousand pokemon hes collected to sell and breed, only a handful have been sold. The blue potentials sit and languish, doing nothing except breeding. No one questions his pokemon, no one questions his strength, no one seems to be aware of anything he does. idk, I bet professional Chinese writers are awesome but Chinese fanfic authors are the dumbest breed of human in existence. maybe one or two normal ones but for the most part trash. it reflects in this story. if he didn't have social plot armor he wouldn't have friends. and lastly, the translation is decent but there should of been editing and replacing of Chinese phrases to more English ones. it might be some proverb but how it translated, it sounds like nonsense.
Very boring god the MC our more interested in Roberto than any woman or feminine person haha I said that he simply bats for the other side that is why he does not have a female partner.
Translation quality is rather good. story development and main character are utterly bad... typical useless hypocritical chinese mc... a useless system ... and a story and chapters more focused on word count and nit the quality of the story etc ... readable if you are bored bit nit really high quality in that regard
overall a solid translation of a Pokémon world set pre cannon by 2years I believe an exciting read if you can shoulder through the first few chaps which i felt were a bit rough i love the concepts and the execution is decent of these idea at c806 been a good read these past 3 days so far would recommend having a bit of patience on the fact MC doesnt start as a dedicated trainer
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Even though this is a translation work its well done with little to no grammatical errors, story is fun and captivating to read.The story itself is good, not perfect, but still good.🤔
one of the best pokemon fanfics I've ever read but what's odd to me is the power stones readers voted for it the last time I check it was a few hundred but now it's only in the double digits [img=Speechless]
A good slice of life Pokémon fanfiction is rare and this is a good one. There are very little grammatical/spelling errors so overall good translationfic.
Hello I really liked this story, sadly I deleted the app becausr of school and now I downloaded it again. A question is this still ongoing 🥹 I really miss waiting for the updates
Me esta gustantando bastante leerlo, pero en mi opinion podría tener relaciones mas intimas con las mujeres( no hace falta contenido sexual ni nada solo decir que ha estado con tales mujeres o en en relaciones con ellas) sería bueno para el aumento de los miembros familiares, ya que siento que le falta en ese aspecto.
Solid fanfic one of the best translated fanfics I’ve ever read. Although it is very slow paced. I recommend it 8.5 arceus out of 10 rayquaza
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I’m happy you started posting chapters again this story is pretty good in my opinion. I’m not an expert in figuring out what’s good or not in stories but I enjoyed this one and I hope you can continue writing chapters.
Этот фанфик кажется прототипом <настоящий мир покемонов> качество средное. Но хорошо читабельный фанфик.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👏👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👏👏👍👍👍👏👏👍👍👏👏👏👏👍👍👏👏👏👍
Well, where do I start. This is one of those rare occasions where an author actually wanted to tell a story.....hmmm...how do I write this down so it makes sense to you as well.... Okay. Here. So the Pokémon fanbase keeps complaining that every Pokémon game we get is literally the exact same formula. 8 badges, baddie team fight that you borderline bully because they are pathetic, elite four, you are the champion, non-existent post-game. Every single game. And it completely baffles me that a Pokémon fan would then go and say "Hey, you know what? If Game Freak won't do it, I'll do it myself". And then they go on to write the most generic story with the exact same formula that we've come to despise, where a 10-year-old goes and beats 8 gyms and so on. Really? Well, you sure showed them, my boy. And obviously, 98% of the time, it's either the Kanto region or the Hoenn region (sometimes the Alolan region), because the rest doesn't exist, I guess. I told you this so that I could tell you that every time an author actually decides to do something, you know, different. I'm going to like it. So here's my biased review: Refreshing. I like the story idea. I like the slow, almost slice-of-life storytelling. I like how the system is a sort of background "character", used mostly as a plot device rather than some sort of power-levelling thingy. You know, it's more like a "The MC needs a house upgrade or something, but I want it now, not two years later, oh no what I am going to do, I could really use some magic b.llsh.ttery to solve this problem, oh, wait I can" You know, like that. I like how there are naturally strong Pokémon that just decide to follow the MC because he can give them a 11/10 environment, and they fight for him in return. You know? The harmonious coexistence of Pokémon and humans that the media would like you to believe, but they never show it because 19 times out of 20, they just fight instead? I really like that. So those were some of the positives, now some of the negatives. Well, I have two big problems with the story in general, and some itty-bitty little ones I am not going to mention because I don't want to spoil everything. The first of the big problems is the relatively low IQ decisions made by the MC (or anyone for that matter). But to be honest, the more I read the story, the more I feel that it's not really the MC who's stupid, but rather the author who has a low IQ, or he's just really inexperienced in this regard, so he doesn't see things in a more realistic way and how his decisions would actually affect a realistic world, I think. But because it's the MC we see all the time, we confuse the MC's stupidity with the author's. Again I'm not going g to go into details, See it for yourself. The second problem is that although there was an effort to flesh out the characters and the world... eh, it's not really amazing. Like, again, there's been an effort, but it's still lacking. The characters are still very two-dimensional, I don't really know why there isn't any romance or at least a woman interested in the MC. You know he's rich, good with Pokémon (one of the most important things in this bloody world!!!), later in the story he'll have a powerful background, great achievements not only in general but for his age as well...and no romance. None. Like, this story even goes with the "possessing a dead guy type of reincarnation" so you can't even say the MC is ugly, because everybody is good looking in an anime world. You don't have to make it a love story, just let him have a girlfriend that you only mention twice every 100 chapters ffs. Come on.
Someone please tell me chatot dies in immense pain i don’t know if I can’t read 900+ chapters of obnoxious gay parrot. (I know that sounds like word soup, read it and you will eventually find they make sense)
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WQ: Mistakes that were commented on 5+ months ago are not fixed, heck: the translator sometimes likes the comments. You can't tell me they don't see them. Some sentences make zero sense for a typical English-speaking reader who doesn't regularly read MTL. CD: MC acts rather stupid from chapters 2-3, not looking good for the future. So yeah, I will not continue hurting my eyes, but you do you.
not a bad rip off from royal road you actually did a better translation although it still has a lot that could have been done with the Grammer
Awesome novel, we follow a character whose main job is breeding following by training his pokemon, an absolute blast to read, with a nice touch of comedy and drama, like any pokemon story should have
is this still updated? truly I like this book. Hoping for more chapters, thanks.
Great work would recommend to someone who is new to fabrics as it's a great representation of a translated work looking forward to more updates and the continuation of exemplary work by the author and translation in real time your a legend man or madam or whomever you may be
It's a great Pokemon fanfiction!! I love it!!! 😍😍 It have a great storyline/plot and good english/translation.. The grammar is quite good too... I like this kind of story (slice of life with little fighting and adventure between).. I like that MC/Yuga continue his parent daycare (although that because his system, but it still great).. His system is good too, it give many reward to make MC daycare more success and famous (pokeblock recipe, incense recipe, Evolution Stone Vein, etc).. His quest is also relate to Daycare and not to forceful (it give a long time or no time limit).. I like MC is caught Pokemon with limitation (not destroy that pokemon ecosystem/not caught all of pokemon in one spesies).. There a few flaw, like the data of your pokemon is bad writing sometimes.. The inconsistent of he/she.. Not give a women/mate for MC.. Etc Love your story author sama.. Keep up the great work 👍😁😍😍😍
the book is spectacular and had been truly interesting from the very first chapter and after reading the first chapter I become a ''diehard" fan of this beautifully written/translated book ❤️ 😍 form 🇵🇰 🇵🇰 [img=recommend][img=recommend]
Pokemon fanfics are always fun to read , and this one had a pretty fun twist. Translation is pretty bad but not too bad , translator sometimes makes mistakes like using the wrong names or forgetting the system introduced in chapter 1 . Overall fun idea but bad Translation.
The idea of the story is awesome. but ultimately it fails to delivery on its premise. A daycare no ones allowed to enter or question. of the thousand pokemon hes collected to sell and breed, only a handful have been sold. The blue potentials sit and languish, doing nothing except breeding. No one questions his pokemon, no one questions his strength, no one seems to be aware of anything he does. idk, I bet professional Chinese writers are awesome but Chinese fanfic authors are the dumbest breed of human in existence. maybe one or two normal ones but for the most part trash. it reflects in this story. if he didn't have social plot armor he wouldn't have friends. and lastly, the translation is decent but there should of been editing and replacing of Chinese phrases to more English ones. it might be some proverb but how it translated, it sounds like nonsense.
Very boring god the MC our more interested in Roberto than any woman or feminine person haha I said that he simply bats for the other side that is why he does not have a female partner.
Translation quality is rather good. story development and main character are utterly bad... typical useless hypocritical chinese mc... a useless system ... and a story and chapters more focused on word count and nit the quality of the story etc ... readable if you are bored bit nit really high quality in that regard
overall a solid translation of a Pokémon world set pre cannon by 2years I believe an exciting read if you can shoulder through the first few chaps which i felt were a bit rough i love the concepts and the execution is decent of these idea at c806 been a good read these past 3 days so far would recommend having a bit of patience on the fact MC doesnt start as a dedicated trainer
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揭示劇透 Even though this is a translation work its well done with little to no grammatical errors, story is fun and captivating to read.The story itself is good, not perfect, but still good.🤔
one of the best pokemon fanfics I've ever read but what's odd to me is the power stones readers voted for it the last time I check it was a few hundred but now it's only in the double digits [img=Speechless]
A good slice of life Pokémon fanfiction is rare and this is a good one. There are very little grammatical/spelling errors so overall good translationfic.
Hello I really liked this story, sadly I deleted the app becausr of school and now I downloaded it again. A question is this still ongoing 🥹 I really miss waiting for the updates
Me esta gustantando bastante leerlo, pero en mi opinion podría tener relaciones mas intimas con las mujeres( no hace falta contenido sexual ni nada solo decir que ha estado con tales mujeres o en en relaciones con ellas) sería bueno para el aumento de los miembros familiares, ya que siento que le falta en ese aspecto.
Solid fanfic one of the best translated fanfics I’ve ever read. Although it is very slow paced. I recommend it 8.5 arceus out of 10 rayquaza
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I’m happy you started posting chapters again this story is pretty good in my opinion. I’m not an expert in figuring out what’s good or not in stories but I enjoyed this one and I hope you can continue writing chapters.
Этот фанфик кажется прототипом <настоящий мир покемонов> качество средное. Но хорошо читабельный фанфик.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👏👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👏👏👍👍👍👏👏👍👍👏👏👏👏👍👍👏👏👏👍
Well, where do I start. This is one of those rare occasions where an author actually wanted to tell a story.....hmmm...how do I write this down so it makes sense to you as well.... Okay. Here. So the Pokémon fanbase keeps complaining that every Pokémon game we get is literally the exact same formula. 8 badges, baddie team fight that you borderline bully because they are pathetic, elite four, you are the champion, non-existent post-game. Every single game. And it completely baffles me that a Pokémon fan would then go and say "Hey, you know what? If Game Freak won't do it, I'll do it myself". And then they go on to write the most generic story with the exact same formula that we've come to despise, where a 10-year-old goes and beats 8 gyms and so on. Really? Well, you sure showed them, my boy. And obviously, 98% of the time, it's either the Kanto region or the Hoenn region (sometimes the Alolan region), because the rest doesn't exist, I guess. I told you this so that I could tell you that every time an author actually decides to do something, you know, different. I'm going to like it. So here's my biased review: Refreshing. I like the story idea. I like the slow, almost slice-of-life storytelling. I like how the system is a sort of background "character", used mostly as a plot device rather than some sort of power-levelling thingy. You know, it's more like a "The MC needs a house upgrade or something, but I want it now, not two years later, oh no what I am going to do, I could really use some magic b.llsh.ttery to solve this problem, oh, wait I can" You know, like that. I like how there are naturally strong Pokémon that just decide to follow the MC because he can give them a 11/10 environment, and they fight for him in return. You know? The harmonious coexistence of Pokémon and humans that the media would like you to believe, but they never show it because 19 times out of 20, they just fight instead? I really like that. So those were some of the positives, now some of the negatives. Well, I have two big problems with the story in general, and some itty-bitty little ones I am not going to mention because I don't want to spoil everything. The first of the big problems is the relatively low IQ decisions made by the MC (or anyone for that matter). But to be honest, the more I read the story, the more I feel that it's not really the MC who's stupid, but rather the author who has a low IQ, or he's just really inexperienced in this regard, so he doesn't see things in a more realistic way and how his decisions would actually affect a realistic world, I think. But because it's the MC we see all the time, we confuse the MC's stupidity with the author's. Again I'm not going g to go into details, See it for yourself. The second problem is that although there was an effort to flesh out the characters and the world... eh, it's not really amazing. Like, again, there's been an effort, but it's still lacking. The characters are still very two-dimensional, I don't really know why there isn't any romance or at least a woman interested in the MC. You know he's rich, good with Pokémon (one of the most important things in this bloody world!!!), later in the story he'll have a powerful background, great achievements not only in general but for his age as well...and no romance. None. Like, this story even goes with the "possessing a dead guy type of reincarnation" so you can't even say the MC is ugly, because everybody is good looking in an anime world. You don't have to make it a love story, just let him have a girlfriend that you only mention twice every 100 chapters ffs. Come on.
Someone please tell me chatot dies in immense pain i don’t know if I can’t read 900+ chapters of obnoxious gay parrot. (I know that sounds like word soup, read it and you will eventually find they make sense)
揭示劇透 WQ: Mistakes that were commented on 5+ months ago are not fixed, heck: the translator sometimes likes the comments. You can't tell me they don't see them. Some sentences make zero sense for a typical English-speaking reader who doesn't regularly read MTL. CD: MC acts rather stupid from chapters 2-3, not looking good for the future. So yeah, I will not continue hurting my eyes, but you do you.
not a bad rip off from royal road you actually did a better translation although it still has a lot that could have been done with the Grammer
Awesome novel, we follow a character whose main job is breeding following by training his pokemon, an absolute blast to read, with a nice touch of comedy and drama, like any pokemon story should have
is this still updated? truly I like this book. Hoping for more chapters, thanks.
Great work would recommend to someone who is new to fabrics as it's a great representation of a translated work looking forward to more updates and the continuation of exemplary work by the author and translation in real time your a legend man or madam or whomever you may be
It's a great Pokemon fanfiction!! I love it!!! 😍😍 It have a great storyline/plot and good english/translation.. The grammar is quite good too... I like this kind of story (slice of life with little fighting and adventure between).. I like that MC/Yuga continue his parent daycare (although that because his system, but it still great).. His system is good too, it give many reward to make MC daycare more success and famous (pokeblock recipe, incense recipe, Evolution Stone Vein, etc).. His quest is also relate to Daycare and not to forceful (it give a long time or no time limit).. I like MC is caught Pokemon with limitation (not destroy that pokemon ecosystem/not caught all of pokemon in one spesies).. There a few flaw, like the data of your pokemon is bad writing sometimes.. The inconsistent of he/she.. Not give a women/mate for MC.. Etc Love your story author sama.. Keep up the great work 👍😁😍😍😍