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Ok so I gave it a chance and it wasn't bad I actually quite enjoyed it. I actually liked the character interactions and the direction it was going. But then bam outta nowhere kids, like no build up or anything just kids. And to be fair I'm not a fan of kids in stories until it's relatively late game or in an epilouge setting up for something. But that's just me what really through me off is the killing of the Z fighters. Like initially he talks about learning from them and exchanging techniques I thought he would be a distant character doing his own thing and would just occasionally interact or ignore them. But no just straight up Merced them. If you want to read it for yourself to make an opinion but this story just sadly wasn't for me.
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This fanfic used to be good but unfortunately the author managed to ruin it in an impressive way, I'm sad to know that something with so much potential was ruined in such a way
Where to start. This isn't worth spending time writing a long review for. But summarily, I hate this fic because of how wasted it's potential is. The idea was great, but MC basically has no personality, and when he does it changes abruptly to suit the author's needs. Power does not feel deserved. He kills everyone from original cast with utter ease and for literally no reason. Also he gets married and has kids extremely abruptly. None of those characters are interesting either. I've heard funnier jokes in She-Hulk SOMEHOW. God, it could have been so good. Oh well.
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This fanfiction used to good but it started to drop off the hill. The first arc, which basically consisted of only training and minimal contact with characters of dragon ball, was good. But then suddenly author starts killing off all dbz characters, and now author has no characters with whom MC can interact with. Now MC is klling anything he sees left and right while powering up.
This is good.. the story is not flawless but good nonetheless.. the only thing that puts me off is that some characters doesn't act like they supposed to .. Freiza should be wary of him if he get stronger quickly.. Mc act loyal to freiza even though he was strong enough to kill him..
The story is quite good, if you consider an actual evil Dragonball fanfic.I don't understand why people complain when the mc kills the dragon team. I mean, what do you expect from an evil mc ?This book is too good so I really hope the author completes this fanfic and even write other fanfics with evil MC's.Seriously though, you are doing a really good job author. I really hope you don't get discouraged by other people, there are still many like me who love your stories.
I think i finally found it…. my ideal dbz fanfic the main character is big brain, exploring the galaxy (you would not believe the amount of dbz fanfics that stay on earth), devious mc,etc. Just so you know author if you drop this… well my buddy chum pal buddy friend, i might get a little unfriendly with you, and wowza wouldnt that be a crummy juncture, do you want that? do you wish to come into physical experience with a crummy juncture? 😶
I love this this I think this is one of the top 3 dbz fanfics hope u dont drop it Also why not make patreon im fine with paying if it means seing chapters more often Also pls dont make the mc too broken after all thats what ruins a good story Im not saying dont make him stronger just make it make sense
This dgz fan fic is queit unique and has a lot of potential the only problem is the lack of chapters Author please try release more chapter anyways good job author
The novel is great, The main character is very smart, The world building is also good, He is strong but still uses his intelligence. All in all, I really enjoyed it and am looking forward to more. (Goglee translator)
This novel is quite good. I was very entertained by the unique story. Keep up the good work author I'm a new fan.
You're also writing on (fanfiction.net), and I've been following your work. It's a good fanfic; you might want to consider giving it a chance. The protagonist isn't chasing after women
This is arguably the best dragon ball fanfic/novel I’ve ever read, keep it up it’s amazing!!
A hidden gem, the author has great ideas, reincarnated turles is so cool of an idea man!! Your story and the increment of power level is also good. Keep up the good work man!
The idea is interesting but the execution is bad, the start is a bit off, it would be interesting if the protagonist was from a cultivation world, instead he doesn't have a backstory with no memories of previous life but knows the anime plot, he doesn't have any unique moves instead basic KI control with bad names, and his tail that can shoot Ki. He is able to control the transformation with minimal training, low power, and low talent, when it would make more sense to introduce this development after getting the KI fruit. The writing isn't bad, but the chapters are short and the dialogue is mediocre, where he talks to his annoying female lizard friend and is either arrogant or kind. He says others didn't train properly while dismissing the skill of someone like Vegeta that had most potential of the entire Saiyan race. Rather than having a more interesting journey to other worlds, after a single planet he hastily joins the Frieza force with meager power, contradicting their initial stance of avoiding involvement in the plot, and starts boring fights with saibamen and training that consists getting injured, fighting to death and healing, while not being smart and revealing his potential and insulting those who are stronger than him.
literally the only thing bad about this fic is that it's only updated every other week. if you can pls update more i give all my stones
Keep going keep going keep going. This is one of the best novels I have ever read.
The fic is awesome. Let MC achieve Tail Weakness Removal,Oozaru Control,Ikari/Wrathful State,False SSJ,Spirit Bomb SSJ,SSJ1 Full Power Kaioken,SSJ grade2&3(Perfected),SSJ2(Mastered),SSJ3 Full Power Unleashed,Ultimate State/Potential Unleashed/Mystic Form(Gohan),Evil Saiyan(Turles),Super Saiyan God,Super Full Power Saiyan 4 Limit Breaker,Super Saiyan Rage(Future Trunks),Spirit Bomb Super Trunks,SSGSS Blue(Controled Berserk),SSGSS Blue Kaioken x20,SSGSS Blue Evolution,Legendary Super Saiyan Full Power(Broly),LSSJ2(Kefla),Beast Saiyan(Gohan Beast),Ultra Ego,Perfected Mastered Ultra Instinct,All Forms Merged etc. MC should wish for Eternal Youth,Lifespan Extention&Expansion,Birth/Sperm Fertility/Pregnency Control,Disease Immunity,Space Survivability,Underwater Breathing,Eternal Youth&Disease Immunity for Whomever Girls MC had Seggss with and they will not betray him nor have seggss with others except LGTB and please let the romance&seggss be realistic so NO ahegao and NTR,MC could recreate/Modufy his Body with Cells/DNA from Previous Broly,New Broly,Evil Saiyan Turles,Cumber,Goku,Vegeta,Gohan,Gogeta,Vegeta,Bardock,Kefla,Future Trunks,Gotenks and Other Known Saiyans various Transformations till Now without any Bodily defect,errors and problems,MC could wish for the Knowledge of DB Character's Techniques till Now,MC could get Hoi-Pui Capsule tech,Upgraded Scouter(no tracker),Upgraded Saiyan Suit,Upgraded Spaceship with Co-ordinates of Earth,Namek,Yardrat,Metamor,Cereal and Capsule tech,Healing Pod,Big Gete Star Chip,Dr.Myuu,Dr.Gero,#21,Fuu,Towa scientific Computer Data,Hoi-Pui capsule demension to grow Senzu Beans,Tree of Might Fruit,King Yemma Fruit much faster without harming any Planet,Gravity-Pressure-Temperature-Hyperbolic Training Space-Time Chamber(Portable) etc. Also Please Add DB Fillers,Movies,Manga,Video Games,early DB,DB Z,DB Super,DB GT,DB Heroes,Super DB Heroes,DBZ Kakkarot,DB Xenoverse1&2 Plot,Characters,Transformations,Techniques in this Fic. MC could add girls like Launch,Colonel Violet,Bulma,Tights,Android #18/Lazuli,Pie Pie Mermaid,Android #21/Vomi,Kefla(Caulifla and Kale),West Supreme Kai,Chronoa,Aeos,Lagss,Vidro,Kamin,Towa,Robelu,Vados,Kusu,Zangya,Sheela,Macki,Muezli,Ranfan,Eresa,Maron,Mai,Yurin,Marcarita,Annin,Angela,Aurora,Bikal,Rylibeu,Ribrianne,Kakunsa,Roasie,Akane Kamidori,Aoi Kamidori,Caway,Chao,Cheelai,Niyusu,Chico,Chuu Lee,Coco,Cocoa Amaguri,Cocotte,Cynthia,Dercori,Ena,Princess Snake,Fairy,Fanfan,Fasha,Gine,Fyler,Rulah,Galena,Haru Haru,Shun Shun,Hasky,Pasta,Haya,Heles,Hijiki,Hop,Iwaza,Miza,Kikaza,Videl,July,Kooky Cook,Leena,Leggings,Lime,Suno,Mamba,Xeno Oceanus Shenron,Melee,Miss Piiza,Mint,Mizore,Momo-Chan,Nain,Nion,Nico,Note,Pansy,Pare,PaoPao,Penne Macareni,Plamo,Pocawatha,Polly Bucket,Princess Misa,Princess of the Flower Country,Putine,Saria,Sorrel,Sargent Nutz,Sho,Tanmen,Titima,Tranpire,Tsururin Tsun,Valese,Viola,Wairu,Chi Chi,Bikini/Panchy etc.in his harem but Please make the Romance and Seggs scenes Realistic,so No ahegao and Specially no NTR and Please wish for Birth/Fertility Control and Eternal Youth and Disease Immunity for you and the girls you have Seggss with.(These are just Some of the Beautiful Dragon Ball Female Characters List)
Shameless 5-star review of my own unfinished work here. Come on and stop by if you like Dragon Ball Z and reading about a villainous protagonist. Fair warning, some of your beloved characters will die, and it might be excruciatingly brutal and detailed.
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Ok so I gave it a chance and it wasn't bad I actually quite enjoyed it. I actually liked the character interactions and the direction it was going. But then bam outta nowhere kids, like no build up or anything just kids. And to be fair I'm not a fan of kids in stories until it's relatively late game or in an epilouge setting up for something. But that's just me what really through me off is the killing of the Z fighters. Like initially he talks about learning from them and exchanging techniques I thought he would be a distant character doing his own thing and would just occasionally interact or ignore them. But no just straight up Merced them. If you want to read it for yourself to make an opinion but this story just sadly wasn't for me.
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This fanfic used to be good but unfortunately the author managed to ruin it in an impressive way, I'm sad to know that something with so much potential was ruined in such a way
Where to start. This isn't worth spending time writing a long review for. But summarily, I hate this fic because of how wasted it's potential is. The idea was great, but MC basically has no personality, and when he does it changes abruptly to suit the author's needs. Power does not feel deserved. He kills everyone from original cast with utter ease and for literally no reason. Also he gets married and has kids extremely abruptly. None of those characters are interesting either. I've heard funnier jokes in She-Hulk SOMEHOW. God, it could have been so good. Oh well.
揭示劇透 This fanfiction used to good but it started to drop off the hill. The first arc, which basically consisted of only training and minimal contact with characters of dragon ball, was good. But then suddenly author starts killing off all dbz characters, and now author has no characters with whom MC can interact with. Now MC is klling anything he sees left and right while powering up.
This is good.. the story is not flawless but good nonetheless.. the only thing that puts me off is that some characters doesn't act like they supposed to .. Freiza should be wary of him if he get stronger quickly.. Mc act loyal to freiza even though he was strong enough to kill him..
The story is quite good, if you consider an actual evil Dragonball fanfic.I don't understand why people complain when the mc kills the dragon team. I mean, what do you expect from an evil mc ?This book is too good so I really hope the author completes this fanfic and even write other fanfics with evil MC's.Seriously though, you are doing a really good job author. I really hope you don't get discouraged by other people, there are still many like me who love your stories.
I think i finally found it…. my ideal dbz fanfic the main character is big brain, exploring the galaxy (you would not believe the amount of dbz fanfics that stay on earth), devious mc,etc. Just so you know author if you drop this… well my buddy chum pal buddy friend, i might get a little unfriendly with you, and wowza wouldnt that be a crummy juncture, do you want that? do you wish to come into physical experience with a crummy juncture? 😶
I love this this I think this is one of the top 3 dbz fanfics hope u dont drop it Also why not make patreon im fine with paying if it means seing chapters more often Also pls dont make the mc too broken after all thats what ruins a good story Im not saying dont make him stronger just make it make sense
This dgz fan fic is queit unique and has a lot of potential the only problem is the lack of chapters Author please try release more chapter anyways good job author
The novel is great, The main character is very smart, The world building is also good, He is strong but still uses his intelligence. All in all, I really enjoyed it and am looking forward to more. (Goglee translator)
This novel is quite good. I was very entertained by the unique story. Keep up the good work author I'm a new fan.
You're also writing on (fanfiction.net), and I've been following your work. It's a good fanfic; you might want to consider giving it a chance. The protagonist isn't chasing after women
This is arguably the best dragon ball fanfic/novel I’ve ever read, keep it up it’s amazing!!
A hidden gem, the author has great ideas, reincarnated turles is so cool of an idea man!! Your story and the increment of power level is also good. Keep up the good work man!
The idea is interesting but the execution is bad, the start is a bit off, it would be interesting if the protagonist was from a cultivation world, instead he doesn't have a backstory with no memories of previous life but knows the anime plot, he doesn't have any unique moves instead basic KI control with bad names, and his tail that can shoot Ki. He is able to control the transformation with minimal training, low power, and low talent, when it would make more sense to introduce this development after getting the KI fruit. The writing isn't bad, but the chapters are short and the dialogue is mediocre, where he talks to his annoying female lizard friend and is either arrogant or kind. He says others didn't train properly while dismissing the skill of someone like Vegeta that had most potential of the entire Saiyan race. Rather than having a more interesting journey to other worlds, after a single planet he hastily joins the Frieza force with meager power, contradicting their initial stance of avoiding involvement in the plot, and starts boring fights with saibamen and training that consists getting injured, fighting to death and healing, while not being smart and revealing his potential and insulting those who are stronger than him.
literally the only thing bad about this fic is that it's only updated every other week. if you can pls update more i give all my stones
Keep going keep going keep going. This is one of the best novels I have ever read.
The fic is awesome. Let MC achieve Tail Weakness Removal,Oozaru Control,Ikari/Wrathful State,False SSJ,Spirit Bomb SSJ,SSJ1 Full Power Kaioken,SSJ grade2&3(Perfected),SSJ2(Mastered),SSJ3 Full Power Unleashed,Ultimate State/Potential Unleashed/Mystic Form(Gohan),Evil Saiyan(Turles),Super Saiyan God,Super Full Power Saiyan 4 Limit Breaker,Super Saiyan Rage(Future Trunks),Spirit Bomb Super Trunks,SSGSS Blue(Controled Berserk),SSGSS Blue Kaioken x20,SSGSS Blue Evolution,Legendary Super Saiyan Full Power(Broly),LSSJ2(Kefla),Beast Saiyan(Gohan Beast),Ultra Ego,Perfected Mastered Ultra Instinct,All Forms Merged etc. MC should wish for Eternal Youth,Lifespan Extention&Expansion,Birth/Sperm Fertility/Pregnency Control,Disease Immunity,Space Survivability,Underwater Breathing,Eternal Youth&Disease Immunity for Whomever Girls MC had Seggss with and they will not betray him nor have seggss with others except LGTB and please let the romance&seggss be realistic so NO ahegao and NTR,MC could recreate/Modufy his Body with Cells/DNA from Previous Broly,New Broly,Evil Saiyan Turles,Cumber,Goku,Vegeta,Gohan,Gogeta,Vegeta,Bardock,Kefla,Future Trunks,Gotenks and Other Known Saiyans various Transformations till Now without any Bodily defect,errors and problems,MC could wish for the Knowledge of DB Character's Techniques till Now,MC could get Hoi-Pui Capsule tech,Upgraded Scouter(no tracker),Upgraded Saiyan Suit,Upgraded Spaceship with Co-ordinates of Earth,Namek,Yardrat,Metamor,Cereal and Capsule tech,Healing Pod,Big Gete Star Chip,Dr.Myuu,Dr.Gero,#21,Fuu,Towa scientific Computer Data,Hoi-Pui capsule demension to grow Senzu Beans,Tree of Might Fruit,King Yemma Fruit much faster without harming any Planet,Gravity-Pressure-Temperature-Hyperbolic Training Space-Time Chamber(Portable) etc. Also Please Add DB Fillers,Movies,Manga,Video Games,early DB,DB Z,DB Super,DB GT,DB Heroes,Super DB Heroes,DBZ Kakkarot,DB Xenoverse1&2 Plot,Characters,Transformations,Techniques in this Fic. MC could add girls like Launch,Colonel Violet,Bulma,Tights,Android #18/Lazuli,Pie Pie Mermaid,Android #21/Vomi,Kefla(Caulifla and Kale),West Supreme Kai,Chronoa,Aeos,Lagss,Vidro,Kamin,Towa,Robelu,Vados,Kusu,Zangya,Sheela,Macki,Muezli,Ranfan,Eresa,Maron,Mai,Yurin,Marcarita,Annin,Angela,Aurora,Bikal,Rylibeu,Ribrianne,Kakunsa,Roasie,Akane Kamidori,Aoi Kamidori,Caway,Chao,Cheelai,Niyusu,Chico,Chuu Lee,Coco,Cocoa Amaguri,Cocotte,Cynthia,Dercori,Ena,Princess Snake,Fairy,Fanfan,Fasha,Gine,Fyler,Rulah,Galena,Haru Haru,Shun Shun,Hasky,Pasta,Haya,Heles,Hijiki,Hop,Iwaza,Miza,Kikaza,Videl,July,Kooky Cook,Leena,Leggings,Lime,Suno,Mamba,Xeno Oceanus Shenron,Melee,Miss Piiza,Mint,Mizore,Momo-Chan,Nain,Nion,Nico,Note,Pansy,Pare,PaoPao,Penne Macareni,Plamo,Pocawatha,Polly Bucket,Princess Misa,Princess of the Flower Country,Putine,Saria,Sorrel,Sargent Nutz,Sho,Tanmen,Titima,Tranpire,Tsururin Tsun,Valese,Viola,Wairu,Chi Chi,Bikini/Panchy etc.in his harem but Please make the Romance and Seggs scenes Realistic,so No ahegao and Specially no NTR and Please wish for Birth/Fertility Control and Eternal Youth and Disease Immunity for you and the girls you have Seggss with.(These are just Some of the Beautiful Dragon Ball Female Characters List)
Shameless 5-star review of my own unfinished work here. Come on and stop by if you like Dragon Ball Z and reading about a villainous protagonist. Fair warning, some of your beloved characters will die, and it might be excruciatingly brutal and detailed.
Writing Quality Updating Stability Story Development Character Design world background Overall Rate 0.0 Review should be more than 140 characters