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寫檢討
I really like the story and am very curious to see how the plot progresses .
This is pretty good so far, can't wait to read more ;.....................................................................................................
The premise and ideas are great but the narration and grammar makes this a difficult read. There is some sort of uncomfortable third person narration, where the author will occasionally info dump or expound on points like a narrator. On top of that, minor but consistent grammar mistakes and Inproper tenses makes this read very uncomfortably. 3.8/10, I cannot reccomend it and it is unfortunate because there are good ideas here.
This is pretty good so far im really just waiting for the story to progress and ill adjust my review according to that........................
I really like the story and am very curious to see how the plot progresses .
This is pretty good so far, can't wait to read more ;.....................................................................................................
The premise and ideas are great but the narration and grammar makes this a difficult read. There is some sort of uncomfortable third person narration, where the author will occasionally info dump or expound on points like a narrator. On top of that, minor but consistent grammar mistakes and Inproper tenses makes this read very uncomfortably. 3.8/10, I cannot reccomend it and it is unfortunate because there are good ideas here.
This is pretty good so far im really just waiting for the story to progress and ill adjust my review according to that........................
Another author that is afraid of going against canon…