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Came from the forum. It’s my first time doing a quick review., so forgive me if it sounded off. From an overall stand point, I could say you nailed the character. Lively, relatable, alive, those words can be used to describe them. However, I haven’t read everything yet, so I can’t comment on the dynamic. Although they’re basic, they work. Next is the writing, you keep it simple, and i think it’s great that you do that. This kind of story definitely benefit from that. Very easy to take in. Development? It’s there, but very few chapters( Ijust don’t invest on paid chapters anyway, for all stories too) make it hard to judge whether if doing it good or not. Just my opinion though. For Stability, I’m gonna give it a 2 for now since I wasn’t there when the update was constant. But if it’s back to 2 months ago, I think a 4-star would better fit your story. Last but not least, the background. Hmm, what to say. It’s great. Thanks to it not being a fantasy world, many details can be ommitted easily without consequence. And that means info dump hardly exist, that’s what I feel about this. Wish you luck in the future, fellow author!
I have to say that that you writing skill is so nice but I have one question why you right so short because I read and three chapter under 15 min I will recommend you to increase the word counts up to more than 1000 because if you make feel people like that they are in your story and they doesn't know how many word they read like I have written on novel you can review that and read that first chapter and second chapter I have written like a summary because it is not very big I have to only it is my character was from third chapter I have written it so long that no one can say that I will not write a good story so I will recommend you to write a chapter between 1000 word and that's my all point
This is a big improvement from when I read this story the last time. The pacing is flawless, not too fast and not too slow. The characters are better fleshed out and dialogues feel natural. This story showcases the kind of pressure that a lot of Indian teenagers face when studying abroad. And how sometimes it's just outright stupid. The bond between the friends is well fleshed out. It was a enjoyable read, anyone looking to read a good slife-of-life novel should definitely try this one out.
"Kay that's an awesome novella you've got there,but I think you focused more on one of the mc at the beginning, maybe you could like change the pov more frequently.This is in my top ten pov novels
it is definitely an interesting story worth reading but yet somehow I was surprised at how the author ended their chapters. this may only be an early chapter thing since I've only read five chapters; but keep up the good work.
It's a wonderful narrative that teenagers who are just starting to make friends would be able to relate to. It's admirable that you had the guts to attempt such a premise in your work. Strongly suggested. To pass the time, read a slice-of-life novel like this one. I really appreciate it when you develop characters because it's simple to read and extremely simple for the brain to comprehend. I am reminded of my youth by it. I appreciate the book.
I must say, I am thoroughly impressed with your writing style! Your story has a great flow . Well done! Keep up the good work
A slice of life and teenhood stories are just my cup of tea, and when I read the synopsis I was very much excited to give it a go...however it didn't really gave me much of a feeling...(well not your fault it's just not upto my expectations) Next the characters I believe could have been more colorfully introduced, with more enthusiasm. The words used didn't feel like a normal convo between friends...it was too formal to be exact...it didn't go in flow but felt kinda forced. Plus I wonder if this is going to be a short story (maybe around 100 chapters?) If not then locking the story at such a early stage would be quite a risk. Because people might not get into the story so early espically when it's a slice of life and no cliffhanger too. Well the story is good but it could have been a lot better. Anyway Happy writing Author!
揭示劇透
I usually am not a big fan of laid back or slice of life stories, but THIS is gOOood😩✨ Very well written and has good pacing👌 And I like how every one from the big five has their own unique personality and style (≧∀≦)ゞ Viri Gud!ヾ(≧▽≦*)o
It's an amazingly good read with lots of good slice of life moments ! Easy to interpret and the characters are life like...will be awaiting more chapters from the author.
Reading a few chapters I'll say it's going smooth. Your rythm is pretty good and the dialogues have a fine ring to them. With a little more improvement, you might just make it far! Good work author!
Alright you might not like my review but here it is. I'm not always into slice of life type works but this one is good and has a steady pace. The dialogue and I'm guilty of this too may need to be read aloud by the author in the editing process. Some of the wording is more formal then the context requires but that is my incredibly specific nit pick. As in if I absolutely had to find a flaw this really good work that was it.
It is a cool story, with which adolescents who are beginning to form their group of friends will identify. It's good that you dared to write a story with this type of plot! Highly recommended.
This is slice of life novel type to pass your time. It's easy to read and very easy for brain to digest, I like it very much with character you build. It makes me remember youth. Thanks for the novel
An amazing and personal book written with precision that makes you feel that they are life. The background of the world is simple and easy to understand. It is comforting
I liked the story. It's simple and can be related to our lives well. It's been a long time since a read a story from one perspective and this story is well written in that aspect. Overall, It's an interesting and well thought story. Fighting author !!!
A interesting premise that so far didn't disappoint one bit. A good slice of life story that has great writing quality and conistent grammar. I like the simplicity of conveying the context to the reader. I will be looking forward to more chapters. Keep it up
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The concept is nice and writing style and story's flow is good. The plot is nice and character designs are great. However I'd like to suggest you to separate the paragraphs each time a different character speaks, scene changes or perspective changes. this story has good potential
This book is great. The starting of the novel drags you, making you wonder what will happen next. Plus the world building is greatly written and so is the plot. The writing is smoothly going. Great job
Nice writing style, nice world background easy to understand. overall "Great potential".
The story is good. :) It's easy to understand and well made! It's a great novel and is worth reading
This is a great slice of life novel! It got good characters, good pace, and great overall writing quality! I think of making chapter more lengthy Good luck!
Its a wonderful story about youth, friendship and self discovery. I think its an amazing book so far, I love the setting, its heart warming and endearing.
Read a few chapters pretty interesting so far a nice concept. However, I feel like the chapter length could be a bit lengthier. Keep updating man!
It is a cool story, with which adolescents who are beginning to form their group of friends will identify. It's good that you dared to write a story with this type of plot! Highly recommended.
GREAT NOVEL WITH A GREAT WRITING STYLE, IT IS UNIQUE AND INTERESTING TO READ THOUGH SEEING IT AT FIRST PUT ME OFF BUT READING IT OPEN MY MIND. IT HAS GREAT POTENTIAL, CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER. GREAT JOB AUTHOR, HIGHLY RECOMMENDED
Love the fact that it takes me back to my teenage years and the friendships I've made, it's wonderful.
Came from the forum. It’s my first time doing a quick review., so forgive me if it sounded off. From an overall stand point, I could say you nailed the character. Lively, relatable, alive, those words can be used to describe them. However, I haven’t read everything yet, so I can’t comment on the dynamic. Although they’re basic, they work. Next is the writing, you keep it simple, and i think it’s great that you do that. This kind of story definitely benefit from that. Very easy to take in. Development? It’s there, but very few chapters( Ijust don’t invest on paid chapters anyway, for all stories too) make it hard to judge whether if doing it good or not. Just my opinion though. For Stability, I’m gonna give it a 2 for now since I wasn’t there when the update was constant. But if it’s back to 2 months ago, I think a 4-star would better fit your story. Last but not least, the background. Hmm, what to say. It’s great. Thanks to it not being a fantasy world, many details can be ommitted easily without consequence. And that means info dump hardly exist, that’s what I feel about this. Wish you luck in the future, fellow author!
I have to say that that you writing skill is so nice but I have one question why you right so short because I read and three chapter under 15 min I will recommend you to increase the word counts up to more than 1000 because if you make feel people like that they are in your story and they doesn't know how many word they read like I have written on novel you can review that and read that first chapter and second chapter I have written like a summary because it is not very big I have to only it is my character was from third chapter I have written it so long that no one can say that I will not write a good story so I will recommend you to write a chapter between 1000 word and that's my all point
This is a big improvement from when I read this story the last time. The pacing is flawless, not too fast and not too slow. The characters are better fleshed out and dialogues feel natural. This story showcases the kind of pressure that a lot of Indian teenagers face when studying abroad. And how sometimes it's just outright stupid. The bond between the friends is well fleshed out. It was a enjoyable read, anyone looking to read a good slife-of-life novel should definitely try this one out.
"Kay that's an awesome novella you've got there,but I think you focused more on one of the mc at the beginning, maybe you could like change the pov more frequently.This is in my top ten pov novels
it is definitely an interesting story worth reading but yet somehow I was surprised at how the author ended their chapters. this may only be an early chapter thing since I've only read five chapters; but keep up the good work.
It's a wonderful narrative that teenagers who are just starting to make friends would be able to relate to. It's admirable that you had the guts to attempt such a premise in your work. Strongly suggested. To pass the time, read a slice-of-life novel like this one. I really appreciate it when you develop characters because it's simple to read and extremely simple for the brain to comprehend. I am reminded of my youth by it. I appreciate the book.
I must say, I am thoroughly impressed with your writing style! Your story has a great flow . Well done! Keep up the good work
A slice of life and teenhood stories are just my cup of tea, and when I read the synopsis I was very much excited to give it a go...however it didn't really gave me much of a feeling...(well not your fault it's just not upto my expectations) Next the characters I believe could have been more colorfully introduced, with more enthusiasm. The words used didn't feel like a normal convo between friends...it was too formal to be exact...it didn't go in flow but felt kinda forced. Plus I wonder if this is going to be a short story (maybe around 100 chapters?) If not then locking the story at such a early stage would be quite a risk. Because people might not get into the story so early espically when it's a slice of life and no cliffhanger too. Well the story is good but it could have been a lot better. Anyway Happy writing Author!
揭示劇透 I usually am not a big fan of laid back or slice of life stories, but THIS is gOOood😩✨ Very well written and has good pacing👌 And I like how every one from the big five has their own unique personality and style (≧∀≦)ゞ Viri Gud!ヾ(≧▽≦*)o
It's an amazingly good read with lots of good slice of life moments ! Easy to interpret and the characters are life like...will be awaiting more chapters from the author.
Reading a few chapters I'll say it's going smooth. Your rythm is pretty good and the dialogues have a fine ring to them. With a little more improvement, you might just make it far! Good work author!
Alright you might not like my review but here it is. I'm not always into slice of life type works but this one is good and has a steady pace. The dialogue and I'm guilty of this too may need to be read aloud by the author in the editing process. Some of the wording is more formal then the context requires but that is my incredibly specific nit pick. As in if I absolutely had to find a flaw this really good work that was it.
It is a cool story, with which adolescents who are beginning to form their group of friends will identify. It's good that you dared to write a story with this type of plot! Highly recommended.
This is slice of life novel type to pass your time. It's easy to read and very easy for brain to digest, I like it very much with character you build. It makes me remember youth. Thanks for the novel
An amazing and personal book written with precision that makes you feel that they are life. The background of the world is simple and easy to understand. It is comforting
I liked the story. It's simple and can be related to our lives well. It's been a long time since a read a story from one perspective and this story is well written in that aspect. Overall, It's an interesting and well thought story. Fighting author !!!
A interesting premise that so far didn't disappoint one bit. A good slice of life story that has great writing quality and conistent grammar. I like the simplicity of conveying the context to the reader. I will be looking forward to more chapters. Keep it up
Show the power of youth. Guy sensi like it very much [img=strong][img=strong]
The concept is nice and writing style and story's flow is good. The plot is nice and character designs are great. However I'd like to suggest you to separate the paragraphs each time a different character speaks, scene changes or perspective changes. this story has good potential
This book is great. The starting of the novel drags you, making you wonder what will happen next. Plus the world building is greatly written and so is the plot. The writing is smoothly going. Great job
Nice writing style, nice world background easy to understand. overall "Great potential".
The story is good. :) It's easy to understand and well made! It's a great novel and is worth reading
This is a great slice of life novel! It got good characters, good pace, and great overall writing quality! I think of making chapter more lengthy Good luck!
Its a wonderful story about youth, friendship and self discovery. I think its an amazing book so far, I love the setting, its heart warming and endearing.
Read a few chapters pretty interesting so far a nice concept. However, I feel like the chapter length could be a bit lengthier. Keep updating man!
It is a cool story, with which adolescents who are beginning to form their group of friends will identify. It's good that you dared to write a story with this type of plot! Highly recommended.
GREAT NOVEL WITH A GREAT WRITING STYLE, IT IS UNIQUE AND INTERESTING TO READ THOUGH SEEING IT AT FIRST PUT ME OFF BUT READING IT OPEN MY MIND. IT HAS GREAT POTENTIAL, CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER. GREAT JOB AUTHOR, HIGHLY RECOMMENDED
Love the fact that it takes me back to my teenage years and the friendships I've made, it's wonderful.