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Yeah. I am reviewing it again because it reached 130+ chapters. Honestly, I never thought I would reach this far. Anyway... The starting chapters like 20 to 30 chapters, are mostly rushed and written without a solid plan in my mind. Just for wish fulfillment. As I was translating another fanfic at the same time I can't really concentrate on the beginning chapters. So I stopped translating that and concentrated on this fanfic. There may be some grammatical and spelling mistakes in the starting chapters, but I improved myself and I think those are reduced in the latest chapters. And it's an Anti-TangSan novel. Give it a try... If you have any questions ask here, I will reply...
Where did the first like 30-40 chapters go it went straight to the master-student chapter the parts beforehand are gone?? And is the author going to keep writing this or what it was going good and then it just stopped I was looking forward to him going to other worlds from some of the worlds he got his rewards from like one piece or where his system got its name tensura. and what happened to the Yandere goddess??
Bagian awal-awal agak sulit di baca dan gak bikin betah tapi semakin jauh dari Bab awal ceritanya jadi lumayan enak buat di baca.
hey author are you going to delete it , why . it was a damn good fanfic on soul land. why are you not updateing it now . It was one of the favourite fanfic for me to read on soul land . I request you to update the novel . i loved the novel .
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Overpowered mc in soul land little with 18+ I think mc should have tortured the original main character Tang san I actually hate Tang san and rest of shrek seven devil because of them cute xiao wu got entangled in revenge although her mother died but she was innocent and thanking you for late wu be innocent and cute also revising an ru & an ain. Please continue to upload it.
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its good to see others POV in this novel. but i feel its kinda rash at some point. its mite be more interesting if the author did a star lou empire act even if its made up.
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hah, this felt like a once good story turned slightly annoying with unnecessary dramas, character retardation for plot purposes, and more... some girls get all the screen time while appearing for less than 20 chapters whereas some girls who are there from chapter 30 or something are ignored and even their first time is not shown... Author also seems to have a habit of changing the plot direction on a whim............ (Eg. author isn't a big fan of Rongrong, it can be seen and felt clearly...but when he introduced her, he had said that mc's attitude towards her is for her character devt and that it will slowly improve, but neither mc ever reels in his attitude nor does the author show Rongrong's character development...then suddenly boom Rongrong turns entitled, mc insults her, his fiancée slaps her and now she is not going to be a harem candidate anymore)... Well it also seems to have been abandoned so there's that as well
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I survived around 130 chapters before giving up. Something just missing here. Still a 5star, cause it's a good soul-land-ff, plus nothing went wrong, all good, just.. missing it. (maybe everything came too easily? flow is too 'god-like', too boring, that I find myself out of immersion. My opinion? If he's too OP - then go other routes, like, go have fun, go slice-of-life, leave the novel-plot, cause you already racked it. You cannot go too OP and expect readers to now feel immersion in the usual novel-plot we know of + I have no hard-feeling about characters changing personalities/background, but how can you explain the novel-plots coming to life when you erased the catalysts that led to it? + tang san, which I'm in the hate-club of, but nevermind me, author, choose a side, just stop playing both side around it).
it started ok, but later down the line its mostly just about his harem, the main plot barely moves, it focuses more on MC trying to get almost all main female leads and just romance and teasing, it goes from one of his girls to the next, always 18+ stuff and more 18+ no real story, pretty much like if MC likes a girl, he goes for her, that's about it.
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love the story so far, but I Just want to know if you are continuing to write this story. if you are then I don't mind waiting
Too Many Girls: Losing Interest in this fanfic. When I saw the long list of girls in the harem, my interest faded fast. There were just too many names to keep track of, making it hard to care about any of them. Instead of focusing on a few characters and their stories, the book kept introducing more and more, making it feel cluttered and confusing. This made it tough to stay engaged in the story.
Hi. This is one of the best fanfic of dulolo dalu i have seen . Please don't drop it . Many fans like me read this novel every day. Nd pls continue the story . And update it daily.
pleasure Sir/mam please upload more chapter i have addicted to this fan fiction of your please upload more chapter please i know you have your own reason for not updating the chapter because you are busy but even so please upload as soon as possible
Thanks for writing such a interesting story it has everything you can hope for if you are douluo dalu lover. once again thanks for the great work and please keep up the story until the end.
Hi i liked the novel very much . The character development is very good . The only regret is that the novel is not being updated daily . I request that Upload a chapter daily .
Author San I really love this fanfic please don't drop it for heaven's sa- no for your harem's sake
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What a completely mind blowing, could something like this be written by mere mortal!? What a splendid novel, completely smitten by it. Definitely should give this a try, if your looking for something amazing to read.
Ahem...As it is tradition for Authors to give 5 star for their own stories. Here I am giving 5 star to my own fanfiction, lol. If you like Douluo Dalu fanfiction with op mc, you can read this. Give it a shot.
Yeah. I am reviewing it again because it reached 130+ chapters. Honestly, I never thought I would reach this far. Anyway... The starting chapters like 20 to 30 chapters, are mostly rushed and written without a solid plan in my mind. Just for wish fulfillment. As I was translating another fanfic at the same time I can't really concentrate on the beginning chapters. So I stopped translating that and concentrated on this fanfic. There may be some grammatical and spelling mistakes in the starting chapters, but I improved myself and I think those are reduced in the latest chapters. And it's an Anti-TangSan novel. Give it a try... If you have any questions ask here, I will reply...
Where did the first like 30-40 chapters go it went straight to the master-student chapter the parts beforehand are gone?? And is the author going to keep writing this or what it was going good and then it just stopped I was looking forward to him going to other worlds from some of the worlds he got his rewards from like one piece or where his system got its name tensura. and what happened to the Yandere goddess??
Bagian awal-awal agak sulit di baca dan gak bikin betah tapi semakin jauh dari Bab awal ceritanya jadi lumayan enak buat di baca.
hey author are you going to delete it , why . it was a damn good fanfic on soul land. why are you not updateing it now . It was one of the favourite fanfic for me to read on soul land . I request you to update the novel . i loved the novel .
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Overpowered mc in soul land little with 18+ I think mc should have tortured the original main character Tang san I actually hate Tang san and rest of shrek seven devil because of them cute xiao wu got entangled in revenge although her mother died but she was innocent and thanking you for late wu be innocent and cute also revising an ru & an ain. Please continue to upload it.
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hah, this felt like a once good story turned slightly annoying with unnecessary dramas, character retardation for plot purposes, and more... some girls get all the screen time while appearing for less than 20 chapters whereas some girls who are there from chapter 30 or something are ignored and even their first time is not shown... Author also seems to have a habit of changing the plot direction on a whim............ (Eg. author isn't a big fan of Rongrong, it can be seen and felt clearly...but when he introduced her, he had said that mc's attitude towards her is for her character devt and that it will slowly improve, but neither mc ever reels in his attitude nor does the author show Rongrong's character development...then suddenly boom Rongrong turns entitled, mc insults her, his fiancée slaps her and now she is not going to be a harem candidate anymore)... Well it also seems to have been abandoned so there's that as well
揭示劇透 I survived around 130 chapters before giving up. Something just missing here. Still a 5star, cause it's a good soul-land-ff, plus nothing went wrong, all good, just.. missing it. (maybe everything came too easily? flow is too 'god-like', too boring, that I find myself out of immersion. My opinion? If he's too OP - then go other routes, like, go have fun, go slice-of-life, leave the novel-plot, cause you already racked it. You cannot go too OP and expect readers to now feel immersion in the usual novel-plot we know of + I have no hard-feeling about characters changing personalities/background, but how can you explain the novel-plots coming to life when you erased the catalysts that led to it? + tang san, which I'm in the hate-club of, but nevermind me, author, choose a side, just stop playing both side around it).
it started ok, but later down the line its mostly just about his harem, the main plot barely moves, it focuses more on MC trying to get almost all main female leads and just romance and teasing, it goes from one of his girls to the next, always 18+ stuff and more 18+ no real story, pretty much like if MC likes a girl, he goes for her, that's about it.
揭示劇透 love the story so far, but I Just want to know if you are continuing to write this story. if you are then I don't mind waiting
Too Many Girls: Losing Interest in this fanfic. When I saw the long list of girls in the harem, my interest faded fast. There were just too many names to keep track of, making it hard to care about any of them. Instead of focusing on a few characters and their stories, the book kept introducing more and more, making it feel cluttered and confusing. This made it tough to stay engaged in the story.
Hi. This is one of the best fanfic of dulolo dalu i have seen . Please don't drop it . Many fans like me read this novel every day. Nd pls continue the story . And update it daily.
pleasure Sir/mam please upload more chapter i have addicted to this fan fiction of your please upload more chapter please i know you have your own reason for not updating the chapter because you are busy but even so please upload as soon as possible
Thanks for writing such a interesting story it has everything you can hope for if you are douluo dalu lover. once again thanks for the great work and please keep up the story until the end.
Hi i liked the novel very much . The character development is very good . The only regret is that the novel is not being updated daily . I request that Upload a chapter daily .
Author San I really love this fanfic please don't drop it for heaven's sa- no for your harem's sake
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What a completely mind blowing, could something like this be written by mere mortal!? What a splendid novel, completely smitten by it. Definitely should give this a try, if your looking for something amazing to read.
Ahem...As it is tradition for Authors to give 5 star for their own stories. Here I am giving 5 star to my own fanfiction, lol. If you like Douluo Dalu fanfiction with op mc, you can read this. Give it a shot.