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This story is fairly good, however it spends far too much time covering the background portion. Also, it has an incredible amount of grammatical errors, and use of incorrect words. If you hate bad grammar you will not make it through the first few chapters, but the story is a good concept.
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I have read 41 chapters so far and honestly, I am forcing myself to read more. The first 10-12 chapters are info dumps and the dungeon is not original. It is just the Danmachi dungeon without the gods and with other anime shops included. The characters are completely one-dimensional and so is the MC. The worst part about this entire story however is the WRITING. The writing is absolutely horrendous and it is very hard to read and get immersed into. The story is littered with incorrect grammar and spelling mistakes. Author if English is not your first language then you need to put a disclaimer in the synopsis cause the writing was atrocious. Also, soooo many one piece character names were wrong. An example is when he calls Mihawk "eagle eye" instead of "hawk eye". This is just one of many examples. Overall I am disappointed because this could be a decent story if the writing was not so bad.
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Hemm.... alur plotnya lambat............................................................... ........ ..... ... ... ... .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . ... .tapi oke untuk bacaan ringan.
No personality, no logic and a very lousy writing. Not recommended at all. Nothing really interesting happens. ---------------------------------------------------------------
it's passable overall the world setting, rules, and overall performance etc. are very fleshed out. Sadly that's also where the Story crashes in my opinion, it's basically 90% Explanations in painful details or Dialog that explains things to much. Basically it's pure tell don't show and that gets very boring. The idea is good but i don't enjoy reading it.
This whole novel feels like something written by a non-english speaking 5th grader, both in grammar and the cohesiveness of the story. Main complaint is that characters are acting completely different from their cannon counterparts and are way too trusting of the MC
the concept is very nice , adventuring in dungeon. Especially starting with Rayleigh ..that was good tour. Not solely focussed on MC , I like that. It's a good novel till now . I just hope author could upload more chapters weekly .
Nice story, interesting concept, want more chapters! ................🙏🙏🙏🙏 🙏🙏🙏 🙏 🙏🙏 🙏 🙏 🙏.........................................................
The Thief Show: start as Kaito Kid!The Thief Show: start as Kaito Kid! The Thief Show: start as Kaito KiThe Thief Show: start as Kaito Kid!d!
Need more.....................................................................................................................................................
Harus lebih konsisten dalam up chapter dan pengembangan karakter utama kurang mendapat peran masa cuma duduk doang dan menjelaskan dongeon kepada orang lain ga ada yang lain
the plot is about danmachi, but without the waifus and without the gods, all involved in the world of one piece, a bad idea They should have chosen another world since the one in the open piece doesn't match.
It's a great One Piece fanfiction.. I like it!!! 👍👍😍😍 This fanfiction quite different from another OP Dungeon I read before, but it's great too.. It give detail about Dungeon, and make a dungeon like in RPG game.. Author sama, are you make the NPC from another anime (like Soma and Joushirou. And Sarasa)?? It's quite interesting.. There just a few wrong grammar/spelling/word, but I still understand it.. Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good work author sama... 😁😁👍👍👍
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Cerita sangat menarik dan berbeda dengan yang lain terus semangat untuk menulis jangan sampai berhenti di tengah jalan seperti kebanyakan cerita
FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA
Truthfully I like the previous version better even if the characters and the world building were a little off. Seriously, couldn't read past chapter 3 of this one . Too much info dump and the MC behaves in a cringe manner. The limitations placed in dungeon make it seems like a video game. I mean bro what's the meaning of no one will die even when killed only loose some level and then you add even if NPC's are killed they will also revive....... Bro it's a pirate world for crying out loud here people slaughter entire countries for no reason and you just came with a way to empower them without any risks......... Well all in all a huge disappointment.
First - This is a rewrite and not a repost of the original. In my opinion, this rewrite is much better. The story is a bit of a slow burn right now, but the world building is done well. There are grammer errors, but nothing that hinders me from reading. As of chapter 15, I would recommend reading.
The Main issue is the grammar, its hard to read, use grammarly or A.I. to correct the grammar. Then there is to much explanation, its takes to long when it can be explained properly in shorter time so there is much time for the adventure story part, and ita supposed to be a dungeon so the story should have more story about the dungeons adventure part. But over all if you get past the grammar, its an ok story
This story is fairly good, however it spends far too much time covering the background portion. Also, it has an incredible amount of grammatical errors, and use of incorrect words. If you hate bad grammar you will not make it through the first few chapters, but the story is a good concept.
Mtl? Plot ZZZZZZZZZZZZ ZZZZZ ZZZZ ZZZ ZZ Z [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
I have read 41 chapters so far and honestly, I am forcing myself to read more. The first 10-12 chapters are info dumps and the dungeon is not original. It is just the Danmachi dungeon without the gods and with other anime shops included. The characters are completely one-dimensional and so is the MC. The worst part about this entire story however is the WRITING. The writing is absolutely horrendous and it is very hard to read and get immersed into. The story is littered with incorrect grammar and spelling mistakes. Author if English is not your first language then you need to put a disclaimer in the synopsis cause the writing was atrocious. Also, soooo many one piece character names were wrong. An example is when he calls Mihawk "eagle eye" instead of "hawk eye". This is just one of many examples. Overall I am disappointed because this could be a decent story if the writing was not so bad.
揭示劇透 Hemm.... alur plotnya lambat............................................................... ........ ..... ... ... ... .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . ... .tapi oke untuk bacaan ringan.
No personality, no logic and a very lousy writing. Not recommended at all. Nothing really interesting happens. ---------------------------------------------------------------
it's passable overall the world setting, rules, and overall performance etc. are very fleshed out. Sadly that's also where the Story crashes in my opinion, it's basically 90% Explanations in painful details or Dialog that explains things to much. Basically it's pure tell don't show and that gets very boring. The idea is good but i don't enjoy reading it.
This whole novel feels like something written by a non-english speaking 5th grader, both in grammar and the cohesiveness of the story. Main complaint is that characters are acting completely different from their cannon counterparts and are way too trusting of the MC
the concept is very nice , adventuring in dungeon. Especially starting with Rayleigh ..that was good tour. Not solely focussed on MC , I like that. It's a good novel till now . I just hope author could upload more chapters weekly .
Nice story, interesting concept, want more chapters! ................🙏🙏🙏🙏 🙏🙏🙏 🙏 🙏🙏 🙏 🙏 🙏.........................................................
The Thief Show: start as Kaito Kid!The Thief Show: start as Kaito Kid! The Thief Show: start as Kaito KiThe Thief Show: start as Kaito Kid!d!
Need more.....................................................................................................................................................
Harus lebih konsisten dalam up chapter dan pengembangan karakter utama kurang mendapat peran masa cuma duduk doang dan menjelaskan dongeon kepada orang lain ga ada yang lain
the plot is about danmachi, but without the waifus and without the gods, all involved in the world of one piece, a bad idea They should have chosen another world since the one in the open piece doesn't match.
It's a great One Piece fanfiction.. I like it!!! 👍👍😍😍 This fanfiction quite different from another OP Dungeon I read before, but it's great too.. It give detail about Dungeon, and make a dungeon like in RPG game.. Author sama, are you make the NPC from another anime (like Soma and Joushirou. And Sarasa)?? It's quite interesting.. There just a few wrong grammar/spelling/word, but I still understand it.. Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the good work author sama... 😁😁👍👍👍
Like Nise like like love like like like like like like like like like love love love love love nise nise nise nise craze like like like like like like like like likelike lie like like good good good good good good good good good good good good
Cerita sangat menarik dan berbeda dengan yang lain terus semangat untuk menulis jangan sampai berhenti di tengah jalan seperti kebanyakan cerita
FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA FODA
Truthfully I like the previous version better even if the characters and the world building were a little off. Seriously, couldn't read past chapter 3 of this one . Too much info dump and the MC behaves in a cringe manner. The limitations placed in dungeon make it seems like a video game. I mean bro what's the meaning of no one will die even when killed only loose some level and then you add even if NPC's are killed they will also revive....... Bro it's a pirate world for crying out loud here people slaughter entire countries for no reason and you just came with a way to empower them without any risks......... Well all in all a huge disappointment.
First - This is a rewrite and not a repost of the original. In my opinion, this rewrite is much better. The story is a bit of a slow burn right now, but the world building is done well. There are grammer errors, but nothing that hinders me from reading. As of chapter 15, I would recommend reading.
The Main issue is the grammar, its hard to read, use grammarly or A.I. to correct the grammar. Then there is to much explanation, its takes to long when it can be explained properly in shorter time so there is much time for the adventure story part, and ita supposed to be a dungeon so the story should have more story about the dungeons adventure part. But over all if you get past the grammar, its an ok story