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It's simply an excellent story. One of the very few stories where the MC has a real and tangible impact on the world. His clan has been strengthened, several other significant clans that would have been exterminated in the canon (Hatake, Uchiha, Yuki, Kaguya..... etc... etc...) have not been thanks to his actions, the ninja wars are not just a more detailed version of what happened in the canon, on the contrary, they unfold differently because the author has imagination, is not talentless, and understands the effects that a very powerful person like an MC has on the unfolding of events. All in all, I highly recommend this read. And please ignore the wordiness of the text, I assume it's just the artificial intelligence the author or translator uses.
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I usually just skip harem, but was in the mood for a Hyuga fanfic. Feel bad that I cant give this a better score, it does some things really well, clearly a lot of thought was put in the story, the lore expansions generally make sense and show that the writer understands more obscure lore details well. The political conflict in Konoha is cool and no one seems to be portrayed as an incompetent parody of themselves. The story was at its best when the various factions were planning and negotiating. Hokage faction versus Clan faction trying to outmaneuver each other and gain strength. Unfortunately, the are significant issues(spoilers bellow): -harem, in over 95% of stories it is cringe and does not fit the setting, not a big element for now, but 2 haremets are shaping up, Hyuga and Uchiha girls. Can't be too harsh here, since I read despite seeing the tag ,but cheapens everything it touches. -pace issues, sometimes there are entire lore paragraphs that discuss lore or bring extra explanations that completely break the flow of scenes .I actually like many of the ideas but they do break the flow. -mist jinchuriki fight and everything after in that arc , way to easy gigantic win with no sacrifices(just this win theoretically crippled Kiri forever), very easy alliance with the bloodline rebels, easily getting to the main Land of Water unopposed and now protag most likely to soon to kill the mizukage. Made Kiri in a joke.
I've been really spoiled by those fast paced and idiotic naruto fanfics. and this my brother healed and regenerated my lost brain cells
Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!!
OFFICIAL REVIEW: (100 chapters read) Hi, here's my review on this series. The strength of this series is the political construction within the village and the clan of the protagonist with the author who managed to create intriguing patterns between the various factions. Good grammar. CONS: - Problems with writing, the author adds, in my opinion, too many useless descriptions, repeating the same thing many times, only in a different key, moving on to redundant chapters of this element. -Lack of action and characterization, In 100 chapters the element that is missing a lot is the action, with few fights and often very short. The author justifies this with the status of the protagonist, which I find ridiculous. Another negative element is the characterisation of the characters, given the actual lack of dialogue of the protagonist with the various characters, which makes everything a little soulless. OVERALL: I think the series is good from some points of view, but it is often heavy
It's a good story, but the mc thinks in essays. It's like we get 10 line of dialogue and rest is just thinking. Alss I don't think this author belives in show not tell, because he always tells like a lot
Diving deep into the power system of the Naruto world and the intra-village relationship that ensues, this novel is quite slow-paced but enjoyable. Despite, or maybe because, of the somewhat frequent gaps in the update frequency, this novel maintains high-quality, medium-large chapters that do not feel empty.
Pretty good all around, except for the tendency to fill in chapters with a lot of redundant and sometimes useless information. If you ignore that, it's a pretty solid fic.
I have to say for a Hyugaa transmigration fanfic this is amazing. I love the approach of being careful and cautious especially with the Hyugaa and the fact the can really read people this was done extremely well. I can’t wait to read more I’m about half way done with the current chapters which are out at this time(I’m just starting the chapter 37) and the total chapter out is 74. I really hope this fanfic gets finished this fanfic is too good to drop.
This is one of the top Naruto fanfiction because of it's various theories about the Naruto world and unique political landscape that it presents. Yet what it lacks is in Character interaction, there are very few dialogues involved between various characters that it seems more like a diary sometime. Other than that it's really good.
A good and detailed fanfic which tries to bring some sense of logic to naruto.
I love this fanfic but the only problem I have and it’s not really a problem, but I feel that the MC should reshape the Hyuga clan outside of the village and make it into a family clan like in cultivation novels also restructure the clan like in cultivation novels as in outer, inner,core, elder, clan leader and supreme elder, and also make the outer clan member of the clan Have the curse mark around the forehead, and also curse mark on their tongue like Danzo does with the Anbu to stop them revealing sensitive information And inner members of the Hyuga would have the curse mark around the forehead removed, but not the tongue only when you get to the level of core member would you have all curse marks removed.
For me overall 9/10 the only thing dragging it down is the extreme detail put into every chapter about things that we already know because this is a fan fiction not an actual new novel cuz everyone reading this has watched/read Naruto already so we don't need that extreme detail to know about the world that we already know it gets so bad that I have to skip paragraphs or even full chapters because they're just so much
Just read the first chap, the concept kinda remind me of this mtl ff that I once read about a hyuga. He was orochimaru’s student, that’s the only thing I recall and I remember it was a good read so I’m looking forward to this.
Im enjoying this a lot your changes to the clan and the village make the story very interesting. Im also enjoying his developing potential romance.
So far very good, the author presents very interesting and easy to accept ideas. My only problem so far is the MC's lack of interaction with the Konoha characters and lack of romance.
I love this fic!!! please is this a translation? If yes what is the original name ? I would subscribe to your patreon but it's banned in my country so help me with the name please 🥹🥹🙏
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This is definitely one of the more well thought out and interesting Naruto fanfics I’ve read so far, so I would definitely recommend it. However, the single complaint I have is that the pacing of the plot is a bit too slow. It doesn’t really matter, but will become increasingly more noticeable when you get caught up and are reading the story one chapter at a time.
finally a fanfic which explores the hyuga clan, because the 700 chapter one focuses too much on chimera technique. And in this one he can take control of the hyuga clan and change it, maybe brand everyone else with the cage bird in the main family
So far it's been a great Naruto World building fanfiction and I can see the author is trying to make a very logical fanfiction. But, 30 chapters in and he's still explain the intricacies of the Hugo Clan so not much can be said...🤷♂️ It's well written though, and it's not as boring as you might think 🤔
Brother I have just finished your neji fanfic and I liked verymuch but I felt it's too rushed to be honest I see that you aren't making the same mistake here I hope that this new mc and I hope that u will show a humane side like neji in the latter part of the ur last novel plus romance and i will be very grateful not rushed one like the last novel plus more chapter I think it would be better if u followed the canon with some changes but not super big
the atmosphere of the work is great, MC anti selfish hero. a different view of the clan's internal politics. A big defect is the prolixity, it can be very inconvenient. explanation of the Byakugan's abilities repeatedly, events that occurred just a few chapters ago. I recommend the Author review with AI or consider that many readers will read the work in the future. I hope the reading doesn't get tiring for them and for you to continue. great fanfiction.
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It's simply an excellent story. One of the very few stories where the MC has a real and tangible impact on the world. His clan has been strengthened, several other significant clans that would have been exterminated in the canon (Hatake, Uchiha, Yuki, Kaguya..... etc... etc...) have not been thanks to his actions, the ninja wars are not just a more detailed version of what happened in the canon, on the contrary, they unfold differently because the author has imagination, is not talentless, and understands the effects that a very powerful person like an MC has on the unfolding of events. All in all, I highly recommend this read. And please ignore the wordiness of the text, I assume it's just the artificial intelligence the author or translator uses.
揭示劇透 I usually just skip harem, but was in the mood for a Hyuga fanfic. Feel bad that I cant give this a better score, it does some things really well, clearly a lot of thought was put in the story, the lore expansions generally make sense and show that the writer understands more obscure lore details well. The political conflict in Konoha is cool and no one seems to be portrayed as an incompetent parody of themselves. The story was at its best when the various factions were planning and negotiating. Hokage faction versus Clan faction trying to outmaneuver each other and gain strength. Unfortunately, the are significant issues(spoilers bellow): -harem, in over 95% of stories it is cringe and does not fit the setting, not a big element for now, but 2 haremets are shaping up, Hyuga and Uchiha girls. Can't be too harsh here, since I read despite seeing the tag ,but cheapens everything it touches. -pace issues, sometimes there are entire lore paragraphs that discuss lore or bring extra explanations that completely break the flow of scenes .I actually like many of the ideas but they do break the flow. -mist jinchuriki fight and everything after in that arc , way to easy gigantic win with no sacrifices(just this win theoretically crippled Kiri forever), very easy alliance with the bloodline rebels, easily getting to the main Land of Water unopposed and now protag most likely to soon to kill the mizukage. Made Kiri in a joke.
I've been really spoiled by those fast paced and idiotic naruto fanfics. and this my brother healed and regenerated my lost brain cells
Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!! Goood keep going!!
OFFICIAL REVIEW: (100 chapters read) Hi, here's my review on this series. The strength of this series is the political construction within the village and the clan of the protagonist with the author who managed to create intriguing patterns between the various factions. Good grammar. CONS: - Problems with writing, the author adds, in my opinion, too many useless descriptions, repeating the same thing many times, only in a different key, moving on to redundant chapters of this element. -Lack of action and characterization, In 100 chapters the element that is missing a lot is the action, with few fights and often very short. The author justifies this with the status of the protagonist, which I find ridiculous. Another negative element is the characterisation of the characters, given the actual lack of dialogue of the protagonist with the various characters, which makes everything a little soulless. OVERALL: I think the series is good from some points of view, but it is often heavy
It's a good story, but the mc thinks in essays. It's like we get 10 line of dialogue and rest is just thinking. Alss I don't think this author belives in show not tell, because he always tells like a lot
Diving deep into the power system of the Naruto world and the intra-village relationship that ensues, this novel is quite slow-paced but enjoyable. Despite, or maybe because, of the somewhat frequent gaps in the update frequency, this novel maintains high-quality, medium-large chapters that do not feel empty.
Pretty good all around, except for the tendency to fill in chapters with a lot of redundant and sometimes useless information. If you ignore that, it's a pretty solid fic.
I have to say for a Hyugaa transmigration fanfic this is amazing. I love the approach of being careful and cautious especially with the Hyugaa and the fact the can really read people this was done extremely well. I can’t wait to read more I’m about half way done with the current chapters which are out at this time(I’m just starting the chapter 37) and the total chapter out is 74. I really hope this fanfic gets finished this fanfic is too good to drop.
This is one of the top Naruto fanfiction because of it's various theories about the Naruto world and unique political landscape that it presents. Yet what it lacks is in Character interaction, there are very few dialogues involved between various characters that it seems more like a diary sometime. Other than that it's really good.
A good and detailed fanfic which tries to bring some sense of logic to naruto.
I love this fanfic but the only problem I have and it’s not really a problem, but I feel that the MC should reshape the Hyuga clan outside of the village and make it into a family clan like in cultivation novels also restructure the clan like in cultivation novels as in outer, inner,core, elder, clan leader and supreme elder, and also make the outer clan member of the clan Have the curse mark around the forehead, and also curse mark on their tongue like Danzo does with the Anbu to stop them revealing sensitive information And inner members of the Hyuga would have the curse mark around the forehead removed, but not the tongue only when you get to the level of core member would you have all curse marks removed.
For me overall 9/10 the only thing dragging it down is the extreme detail put into every chapter about things that we already know because this is a fan fiction not an actual new novel cuz everyone reading this has watched/read Naruto already so we don't need that extreme detail to know about the world that we already know it gets so bad that I have to skip paragraphs or even full chapters because they're just so much
Just read the first chap, the concept kinda remind me of this mtl ff that I once read about a hyuga. He was orochimaru’s student, that’s the only thing I recall and I remember it was a good read so I’m looking forward to this.
Im enjoying this a lot your changes to the clan and the village make the story very interesting. Im also enjoying his developing potential romance.
So far very good, the author presents very interesting and easy to accept ideas. My only problem so far is the MC's lack of interaction with the Konoha characters and lack of romance.
I love this fic!!! please is this a translation? If yes what is the original name ? I would subscribe to your patreon but it's banned in my country so help me with the name please 🥹🥹🙏
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This is definitely one of the more well thought out and interesting Naruto fanfics I’ve read so far, so I would definitely recommend it. However, the single complaint I have is that the pacing of the plot is a bit too slow. It doesn’t really matter, but will become increasingly more noticeable when you get caught up and are reading the story one chapter at a time.
finally a fanfic which explores the hyuga clan, because the 700 chapter one focuses too much on chimera technique. And in this one he can take control of the hyuga clan and change it, maybe brand everyone else with the cage bird in the main family
So far it's been a great Naruto World building fanfiction and I can see the author is trying to make a very logical fanfiction. But, 30 chapters in and he's still explain the intricacies of the Hugo Clan so not much can be said...🤷♂️ It's well written though, and it's not as boring as you might think 🤔
Brother I have just finished your neji fanfic and I liked verymuch but I felt it's too rushed to be honest I see that you aren't making the same mistake here I hope that this new mc and I hope that u will show a humane side like neji in the latter part of the ur last novel plus romance and i will be very grateful not rushed one like the last novel plus more chapter I think it would be better if u followed the canon with some changes but not super big
the atmosphere of the work is great, MC anti selfish hero. a different view of the clan's internal politics. A big defect is the prolixity, it can be very inconvenient. explanation of the Byakugan's abilities repeatedly, events that occurred just a few chapters ago. I recommend the Author review with AI or consider that many readers will read the work in the future. I hope the reading doesn't get tiring for them and for you to continue. great fanfiction.
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