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Brother I have just finished your neji fanfic and I liked verymuch but I felt it's too rushed to be honest I see that you aren't making the same mistake here I hope that this new mc and I hope that u will show a humane side like neji in the latter part of the ur last novel plus romance and i will be very grateful not rushed one like the last novel plus more chapter I think it would be better if u followed the canon with some changes but not super big
the atmosphere of the work is great, MC anti selfish hero. a different view of the clan's internal politics. A big defect is the prolixity, it can be very inconvenient. explanation of the Byakugan's abilities repeatedly, events that occurred just a few chapters ago. I recommend the Author review with AI or consider that many readers will read the work in the future. I hope the reading doesn't get tiring for them and for you to continue. great fanfiction.
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author if the MC really wants to be strong and protect himself he has to be at the level of kaguya's children, so he can catch beasts with tails and cells from hashirama, tenseigan
Goodluck in writing this novel! Word of advice is limit yourself to post just one chap and bonus chap to make sure you have stockpiled chapters
Brother I have just finished your neji fanfic and I liked verymuch but I felt it's too rushed to be honest I see that you aren't making the same mistake here I hope that this new mc and I hope that u will show a humane side like neji in the latter part of the ur last novel plus romance and i will be very grateful not rushed one like the last novel plus more chapter I think it would be better if u followed the canon with some changes but not super big
the atmosphere of the work is great, MC anti selfish hero. a different view of the clan's internal politics. A big defect is the prolixity, it can be very inconvenient. explanation of the Byakugan's abilities repeatedly, events that occurred just a few chapters ago. I recommend the Author review with AI or consider that many readers will read the work in the future. I hope the reading doesn't get tiring for them and for you to continue. great fanfiction.
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author if the MC really wants to be strong and protect himself he has to be at the level of kaguya's children, so he can catch beasts with tails and cells from hashirama, tenseigan
Goodluck in writing this novel! Word of advice is limit yourself to post just one chap and bonus chap to make sure you have stockpiled chapters
Does the mc get an upgraded Byakugan ?