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its's good enough for this platform from the start . but getting boring , nothing new , no adventure , his development isn't exciting enough for me. i guess i shouldn't have some expectations from the danmachi story itself . this anime was good because of girls and at that time dungeon were kinda new thing
Im not that far into the novel, but im loving it. it is both wholesome and humorous with some action. no complaints so far. KEEP UP THE AWSOME WORK😆😆
One of the best danmachi ff! bell is literaly original character now!nice writing!just read you will like it!
well is started good but MC dialogue is so cringe is borderline disgusting to read. only half chapter l already give up 😂
REALLY LIKING THIS STORY SO FAR. THERES A LOT OF THINGS GOING ON AND A LOT OF POSSIBILITIES I MOSTLY LIKE THE FACT THAT YOU ARE NOT FOLLOWING CANNON TO THE LETTER, I DONT HAVE A PROBLEM WITH AUTHORS THAT FOLLOW CANNON BUT WITH THOSE THAT ARE UNABLE TO DEVIATE FROM IT... NO MATTER HOW OP, SMART OR NUMEROUS ARE THE NEW CHARACTERS OR OCC. PLEASE CONTINUE UPDATING AND STAY SAFE FROM C19
The OC is just very boring and the way characters talk together feels cringe half the time
I've only read up to chapter 12 so things might have changed later on. The story is good but the mc is too trusting going as far as showing his status(skills and stats) to a person he only met the previous day. I stopped reading the ff when I realized that things like that will keep on happening.
The writing is great but the rest... The mc is a cringy Garry Stu, he can do everything, he is very observant, very nice, very talented, very smart, strong, the author barely bothers to even excuse the power up rainfall (like seriously, getting from a scrawny kid to a buff adult in a day via training and diluted potions?! A magic, two developmental skills and a skill from the moment he got his falna just because?), everyone likes him despite the conversations feeling wooden, it's enough for the mc to say something like "Ur very purty" to a girl and that's it, she is all already a blushing mess sighing how dreamy he is with little to no attention paid to circumstances and backstory and etc. And on the other hand there is a feeling of bloat to most chapters, a lot of the text is spent inside the mc's head with little to nothing happening or conversations where another character gushes how great he is. In short, the glaring issues are that the author should have held back with how super special awesome the mc is and worked on conversations some more, not every conversations has to be a variation of the mc cornily flirting or impressing someone, especially when EVERYONE are so receptive of the corny flirting...
I don't get it what's it about raising children it's less about adventures and more about slice of life it gets boring very Fast
One of the best fanfics out here, and one of the top danmachi fics. I love everything about it, from character interactions to fight scenes to comedy bits. hopefully it doesn't end in hiatus.
Chaptes feels bloated, main character is too op its boring, its one of those stories where lots of female characters fall for the mc but hes monogamous which is good, the problem is you already know nothings going to happen so the scenes where it shows those female chracter falling for the mc feels pointless and feels like uneeded filler
I started reading, and then I remembered that I had already read it. And I quit because of the unrealistic relationship between the characters and, most importantly... Seriously, the author? Did you bring home a bird from the dungeon, and then she became a human, the daughter of the protagonist, and has the powers of the OP? He literally thinks she's his daughter right after he finds the animal? which?
it was ok at the start but when magical children started to just pop up killed it for me I was ok with bells but welf just came out of the blue was just wild
Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good.
gotta say this is the best danmachi fic I've read. well written. MC's abilities makes it possible to integrate things from other fic without making it weird. plenty of interaction between characters. overall a very very good fic
The best thing I've read about danmachi so far, keep it up I hope you get to the end no matter how long it takes to write the chapters. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Semua bagus, kecuali fakta bahwa banyak wanita yang 'tampak'nya memiliki ketertarikan pada Bell, saat tak ada tag haram di novel ini. Oh, aku juga rada nggak seru karena gk ada darknya:v
no harem?????? then I'm in🫠🫠🫠🫠😁😁 ...................................................................................................................................................
It had a lot of potential but in chapter 15, the story had a first and giant mistake for me that made it seem like a cliché isekai anime, I don't know if it was because of that, but from then on I even lost a lot of desire to continue reading and somehow the story seemed to have dropped in quality by 80%, DISAPPOINTMENT
Uma das melhores histórias de danmachi que já tive o prazer de ler, a história é única e o desenvolvimento de personagem é muito bom, a escrita também é muito boa, é uma obra de arte
The more I read the more the story becomes a slice of life. At this point nothing new happens in the story. It's boring. The story is not about the mc anymore, it's about his daughter. Dropped.
When when you try to beat the harem with a stick, and hopes, but your a natural flirt You get this A romantic comedy where the world hates you for fighting fate lol
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Интересно, атмосферно, персонажи чувствуются как живые. Много подробностей, немного романтики... и всё. Никакого нормального авантюризма, 5-6 походов в подземелье за 48 (больших глав). ГГ до сих пор жалкий 1-вый уровень. Весь ФИК о том как ГГ экспериментирует со своими навыками, жрёт стероиды, наращивает мышцы, тусит со своими знакомыми/друзьями, играет в семью и заводит дочек от богинь ТОЧКА.
I love the pacing, plot, but one think I hate is too much power. no man can create legendary weapon just of aspiration, or skill. I was hoping for corrozo storyline. but well overall it is good read. but ...
One of the best Danmachi FICS after the EPIC fic. I just sometimes wish that this story did not have much of fluff and just continued with the bird being transformed into a variety of high grade phoenix than the human form. other than that, this is a very good story.
The only problem I have is the updating quality but the character development and how the main character doesn’t just treat this as a game and actually cares about others opinions and sees problem is a plus for me
its's good enough for this platform from the start . but getting boring , nothing new , no adventure , his development isn't exciting enough for me. i guess i shouldn't have some expectations from the danmachi story itself . this anime was good because of girls and at that time dungeon were kinda new thing
Im not that far into the novel, but im loving it. it is both wholesome and humorous with some action. no complaints so far. KEEP UP THE AWSOME WORK😆😆
One of the best danmachi ff! bell is literaly original character now!nice writing!just read you will like it!
well is started good but MC dialogue is so cringe is borderline disgusting to read. only half chapter l already give up 😂
REALLY LIKING THIS STORY SO FAR. THERES A LOT OF THINGS GOING ON AND A LOT OF POSSIBILITIES I MOSTLY LIKE THE FACT THAT YOU ARE NOT FOLLOWING CANNON TO THE LETTER, I DONT HAVE A PROBLEM WITH AUTHORS THAT FOLLOW CANNON BUT WITH THOSE THAT ARE UNABLE TO DEVIATE FROM IT... NO MATTER HOW OP, SMART OR NUMEROUS ARE THE NEW CHARACTERS OR OCC. PLEASE CONTINUE UPDATING AND STAY SAFE FROM C19
The OC is just very boring and the way characters talk together feels cringe half the time
I've only read up to chapter 12 so things might have changed later on. The story is good but the mc is too trusting going as far as showing his status(skills and stats) to a person he only met the previous day. I stopped reading the ff when I realized that things like that will keep on happening.
The writing is great but the rest... The mc is a cringy Garry Stu, he can do everything, he is very observant, very nice, very talented, very smart, strong, the author barely bothers to even excuse the power up rainfall (like seriously, getting from a scrawny kid to a buff adult in a day via training and diluted potions?! A magic, two developmental skills and a skill from the moment he got his falna just because?), everyone likes him despite the conversations feeling wooden, it's enough for the mc to say something like "Ur very purty" to a girl and that's it, she is all already a blushing mess sighing how dreamy he is with little to no attention paid to circumstances and backstory and etc. And on the other hand there is a feeling of bloat to most chapters, a lot of the text is spent inside the mc's head with little to nothing happening or conversations where another character gushes how great he is. In short, the glaring issues are that the author should have held back with how super special awesome the mc is and worked on conversations some more, not every conversations has to be a variation of the mc cornily flirting or impressing someone, especially when EVERYONE are so receptive of the corny flirting...
I don't get it what's it about raising children it's less about adventures and more about slice of life it gets boring very Fast
One of the best fanfics out here, and one of the top danmachi fics. I love everything about it, from character interactions to fight scenes to comedy bits. hopefully it doesn't end in hiatus.
Chaptes feels bloated, main character is too op its boring, its one of those stories where lots of female characters fall for the mc but hes monogamous which is good, the problem is you already know nothings going to happen so the scenes where it shows those female chracter falling for the mc feels pointless and feels like uneeded filler
I started reading, and then I remembered that I had already read it. And I quit because of the unrealistic relationship between the characters and, most importantly... Seriously, the author? Did you bring home a bird from the dungeon, and then she became a human, the daughter of the protagonist, and has the powers of the OP? He literally thinks she's his daughter right after he finds the animal? which?
it was ok at the start but when magical children started to just pop up killed it for me I was ok with bells but welf just came out of the blue was just wild
Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good.
gotta say this is the best danmachi fic I've read. well written. MC's abilities makes it possible to integrate things from other fic without making it weird. plenty of interaction between characters. overall a very very good fic
The best thing I've read about danmachi so far, keep it up I hope you get to the end no matter how long it takes to write the chapters. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Semua bagus, kecuali fakta bahwa banyak wanita yang 'tampak'nya memiliki ketertarikan pada Bell, saat tak ada tag haram di novel ini. Oh, aku juga rada nggak seru karena gk ada darknya:v
no harem?????? then I'm in🫠🫠🫠🫠😁😁 ...................................................................................................................................................
It had a lot of potential but in chapter 15, the story had a first and giant mistake for me that made it seem like a cliché isekai anime, I don't know if it was because of that, but from then on I even lost a lot of desire to continue reading and somehow the story seemed to have dropped in quality by 80%, DISAPPOINTMENT
Uma das melhores histórias de danmachi que já tive o prazer de ler, a história é única e o desenvolvimento de personagem é muito bom, a escrita também é muito boa, é uma obra de arte
The more I read the more the story becomes a slice of life. At this point nothing new happens in the story. It's boring. The story is not about the mc anymore, it's about his daughter. Dropped.
When when you try to beat the harem with a stick, and hopes, but your a natural flirt You get this A romantic comedy where the world hates you for fighting fate lol
揭示劇透 Интересно, атмосферно, персонажи чувствуются как живые. Много подробностей, немного романтики... и всё. Никакого нормального авантюризма, 5-6 походов в подземелье за 48 (больших глав). ГГ до сих пор жалкий 1-вый уровень. Весь ФИК о том как ГГ экспериментирует со своими навыками, жрёт стероиды, наращивает мышцы, тусит со своими знакомыми/друзьями, играет в семью и заводит дочек от богинь ТОЧКА.
I love the pacing, plot, but one think I hate is too much power. no man can create legendary weapon just of aspiration, or skill. I was hoping for corrozo storyline. but well overall it is good read. but ...
One of the best Danmachi FICS after the EPIC fic. I just sometimes wish that this story did not have much of fluff and just continued with the bird being transformed into a variety of high grade phoenix than the human form. other than that, this is a very good story.
The only problem I have is the updating quality but the character development and how the main character doesn’t just treat this as a game and actually cares about others opinions and sees problem is a plus for me