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Coming to 40 Chapters in and I thought I should do an initial shameless 5 star review before the end of Volume 1. First, thank you to those that have read my novel and those who may read it in the future. It is my pleasure to share my hobby and passion with you all. I believe my novel started off a little better than average, but thanks to the input from readers, it quickly improved for the better. Once the first 10 chapters, my opinion is that the quality only rises. The story is still in the early stages, the enemies and bosses from the games still haven't shown. Lucian had only just set on the path to finding himself (ch.38) and many of the girls' stories haven't even started. I update daily or twice the following day if I am late. The typical upload times are 12:00pm - 4:45pm British time. Once it's contracted, I will consider adding incentives for bonus chapters! This will be a long novel, so I apologise to those that wish for a fast pace and instant story. It will take a while to build up to the moments where he finally confronts the original hero, Lance, or the people who killed both his and Carmilla's parents. I won't rush this to make sure people can see more of their beloved characters and it doesn't end with a single chapter about how he became god and became unfeeling. (Most Cultivation novel endings.) The characters are my beloved creations. Because of the slow pace of my novel, most of them haven't even shown 10% of their true selves. Just like in reality where you can live with a woman for years and she still does things that will shock you. Or leave you stunned. I don't want them to be finished until the very last moment and so you will notice many characters start off jolly and active, yet further on you might find out they were born into an assassin cell or suffer from various ailments. Duke_Asmodeus
really good .i like it and I'm going to read your other books too after this. I'm satisfied so far . I'm only in 100 ish chaps. but it already feels worthwhile so five star review for now
Great story, well written and ensuing characters. Was rant enjoying it but. You knew there was a but, seems the author has dropped it after 200 chapters. Hopefully he will return or publish the whole story to but somewhere.
update?? update?? update?? update?? update?? update?? invitation to discord invalid. ......................................
Author sama when are you going continue you know we can't wait for too long..duke sama finish the break and continue the novel
really like this novel and saw it hasn't been updated for a while soo just wanted to know if it has been dropped no shame if it has I know its hard to keep up with many novels
good novel (rewrite version is way better but its update stability is weak) i like it authour despite its being one of your first novels you did a realy good job thanks for the novel good luck!
I love this sometimes but why is the mc controlled by the main females it seems he’s controled by all the powerful fm and he doesn’t have a single independent thought or enything it’ kinda frus tratings
Why did you block him from obtaining godhood? knowing that gods are ganna be after him?
I don't know if it's just me or you all noticed that the author uses more philosophical terms and phrases than necessary, I prefer simple reading over this complex thing
Author has done an awesome job with this story. Though few inconsistencies still remain, like Lucian's past life still is properly modified. It says at first that he had casual flings with different women everyday and later on it says that he is inexperienced virgin, i hope you correct that part author... other than that it's a good story. And me as a fellow man of culture give you my respect.
Hi! My name is Victoria and you write really well! I would like to inquire if you are interested in trying to work on an interactive novel? Our company is in the beginning stages of rolling out this scripted interactive game worldwide, so if you'd like to work on a new paid creation or would like to do that adaptation of the book, please feel free to get in touch with me!
-+The theme and the world itself were very interesting, but the early chapters did have a lot inconsistencies in particular with the system status. -This might be just me but it felt like the value of each status felt off, like strength somehow made some1 very fast and agility was largely ignored. -Also some times it is hard know if the mc is strong or weak and what the level actually does. -The first 20 chapters could also use a small either rewrite or edit, right now it is the biggest turn off and considering those are what make a person stick with a novel, I would recommend the author do it. +The characters feel very alive and that is some hard to find these days, especially in a harem novel. The girls are not just empty husk although at some point they start feeling similar because of the overwhelming and what not. +The MC character development was pretty good soo far but I'm still confused about some things that happened during it.
I honestly really love this novel. It's different than all the generic novels these days. Only problem I would have is the lack of comma usage, but to be honest, the story is still amazing. I highly recommend this novel to anyone who wants to read an actual interesting novel.
the story itself is good, it has a good pace and development so far. only things that are "weird" is the mc making jokes and making stupid decisions many times, but overall it's a good novel.
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Happy new year author thank you for bringing us Chapter of your novel many blessings and have a good time this day December 31 Mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm
This novel is awesome👍 .one of the best novel I read but i wanna ask one question to the author till how many chapters are you going to continue or see it to the end or well you might just drop it in the middle of nowhere . .so author please 🙏 give me an honest answer
I liked the novel the moment I dived in to read... but I don't know why I find that remnant soul of the original Fang Lord kind of annoying since I am still 20ish chapters into it... Well, writing quality is good, very good... Author writes like a native English speaker and I had to stalk his profile just to confirm😂 And I get it now how his words flow like that. Was it waddle? I learned a new word today. Character Design, hmm. Well, I find no problem with that, simply because I can remember all the characters due to their unique traits, of course there are monster girls of different flavors😂. MC comes out cowardly at first, which was a turn-off to some degree but later on, starts developing character-wise. Update stability. Just one word. Consistent. World Background. It's a simple fantasy world based off an Eroge(Title of the bk says it all). Kingdoms, Empires, Continents... I am used to CN-kind of topography, so that's why it's simple for me. Story development, hmm, the structure of the story, I don't know... it's just heading toward the right direction. With the power of the MONSTER GIRLS... I initially wanted to drop a 4.8 but since I am in a good mood today I went with 5 stars... I haven't read any Monster girls novels just watched some anime instead like Interspecies Reviewers *Cough* So this will be my first.
Finally found something good to read, was getting so bored 😭 …………………………… ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… …………………………… ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… Thank you author for this novel.
Now this right here is what I call a underrated novel. ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… …………………………………
Very much so recommend, you won’t regret it if you love these types of novel, trust me. 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍
it's good I'm at chapter 20-30 cause i re read it and still not get it how did lucien turn into vampir? can anyone hear know about how cause i still don't get it thank
Great story overall, just please don’t make it too long before he starts getting his memories back or figuring out things about his sister. Pains me ever time he’s oblivious to it.
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Could you please inform me where did you get this cover art? Just the name of the character or the name of the artist is enough. I thank you in advance, and please continue with the good work. :)
I give this story 5 stars becasue I really enjoyed reading it, the author really has good sense of humour and his grammar is top notch. Girls are like Pokemon picking but i don't really mind it [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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Bro will there be ntr in this story later? and how much harem members can we expect from the story? I hope all of them are developed and not vases like some other stories.
Honestly surprised this doesn't have mire reviews, its quite a good read so far and it definetly has potential keep up the good work!!......
Coming to 40 Chapters in and I thought I should do an initial shameless 5 star review before the end of Volume 1. First, thank you to those that have read my novel and those who may read it in the future. It is my pleasure to share my hobby and passion with you all. I believe my novel started off a little better than average, but thanks to the input from readers, it quickly improved for the better. Once the first 10 chapters, my opinion is that the quality only rises. The story is still in the early stages, the enemies and bosses from the games still haven't shown. Lucian had only just set on the path to finding himself (ch.38) and many of the girls' stories haven't even started. I update daily or twice the following day if I am late. The typical upload times are 12:00pm - 4:45pm British time. Once it's contracted, I will consider adding incentives for bonus chapters! This will be a long novel, so I apologise to those that wish for a fast pace and instant story. It will take a while to build up to the moments where he finally confronts the original hero, Lance, or the people who killed both his and Carmilla's parents. I won't rush this to make sure people can see more of their beloved characters and it doesn't end with a single chapter about how he became god and became unfeeling. (Most Cultivation novel endings.) The characters are my beloved creations. Because of the slow pace of my novel, most of them haven't even shown 10% of their true selves. Just like in reality where you can live with a woman for years and she still does things that will shock you. Or leave you stunned. I don't want them to be finished until the very last moment and so you will notice many characters start off jolly and active, yet further on you might find out they were born into an assassin cell or suffer from various ailments. Duke_Asmodeus
really good .i like it and I'm going to read your other books too after this. I'm satisfied so far . I'm only in 100 ish chaps. but it already feels worthwhile so five star review for now
Great story, well written and ensuing characters. Was rant enjoying it but. You knew there was a but, seems the author has dropped it after 200 chapters. Hopefully he will return or publish the whole story to but somewhere.
update?? update?? update?? update?? update?? update?? invitation to discord invalid. ......................................
Author sama when are you going continue you know we can't wait for too long..duke sama finish the break and continue the novel
really like this novel and saw it hasn't been updated for a while soo just wanted to know if it has been dropped no shame if it has I know its hard to keep up with many novels
good novel (rewrite version is way better but its update stability is weak) i like it authour despite its being one of your first novels you did a realy good job thanks for the novel good luck!
I love this sometimes but why is the mc controlled by the main females it seems he’s controled by all the powerful fm and he doesn’t have a single independent thought or enything it’ kinda frus tratings
Why did you block him from obtaining godhood? knowing that gods are ganna be after him?
I don't know if it's just me or you all noticed that the author uses more philosophical terms and phrases than necessary, I prefer simple reading over this complex thing
Author has done an awesome job with this story. Though few inconsistencies still remain, like Lucian's past life still is properly modified. It says at first that he had casual flings with different women everyday and later on it says that he is inexperienced virgin, i hope you correct that part author... other than that it's a good story. And me as a fellow man of culture give you my respect.
Hi! My name is Victoria and you write really well! I would like to inquire if you are interested in trying to work on an interactive novel? Our company is in the beginning stages of rolling out this scripted interactive game worldwide, so if you'd like to work on a new paid creation or would like to do that adaptation of the book, please feel free to get in touch with me!
-+The theme and the world itself were very interesting, but the early chapters did have a lot inconsistencies in particular with the system status. -This might be just me but it felt like the value of each status felt off, like strength somehow made some1 very fast and agility was largely ignored. -Also some times it is hard know if the mc is strong or weak and what the level actually does. -The first 20 chapters could also use a small either rewrite or edit, right now it is the biggest turn off and considering those are what make a person stick with a novel, I would recommend the author do it. +The characters feel very alive and that is some hard to find these days, especially in a harem novel. The girls are not just empty husk although at some point they start feeling similar because of the overwhelming and what not. +The MC character development was pretty good soo far but I'm still confused about some things that happened during it.
I honestly really love this novel. It's different than all the generic novels these days. Only problem I would have is the lack of comma usage, but to be honest, the story is still amazing. I highly recommend this novel to anyone who wants to read an actual interesting novel.
the story itself is good, it has a good pace and development so far. only things that are "weird" is the mc making jokes and making stupid decisions many times, but overall it's a good novel.
揭示劇透 Happy new year author thank you for bringing us Chapter of your novel many blessings and have a good time this day December 31 Mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm
This novel is awesome👍 .one of the best novel I read but i wanna ask one question to the author till how many chapters are you going to continue or see it to the end or well you might just drop it in the middle of nowhere . .so author please 🙏 give me an honest answer
I liked the novel the moment I dived in to read... but I don't know why I find that remnant soul of the original Fang Lord kind of annoying since I am still 20ish chapters into it... Well, writing quality is good, very good... Author writes like a native English speaker and I had to stalk his profile just to confirm😂 And I get it now how his words flow like that. Was it waddle? I learned a new word today. Character Design, hmm. Well, I find no problem with that, simply because I can remember all the characters due to their unique traits, of course there are monster girls of different flavors😂. MC comes out cowardly at first, which was a turn-off to some degree but later on, starts developing character-wise. Update stability. Just one word. Consistent. World Background. It's a simple fantasy world based off an Eroge(Title of the bk says it all). Kingdoms, Empires, Continents... I am used to CN-kind of topography, so that's why it's simple for me. Story development, hmm, the structure of the story, I don't know... it's just heading toward the right direction. With the power of the MONSTER GIRLS... I initially wanted to drop a 4.8 but since I am in a good mood today I went with 5 stars... I haven't read any Monster girls novels just watched some anime instead like Interspecies Reviewers *Cough* So this will be my first.
Finally found something good to read, was getting so bored 😭 …………………………… ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… …………………………… ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… Thank you author for this novel.
Now this right here is what I call a underrated novel. ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… ………………………………… ………………………… …………………………………
Very much so recommend, you won’t regret it if you love these types of novel, trust me. 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍
it's good I'm at chapter 20-30 cause i re read it and still not get it how did lucien turn into vampir? can anyone hear know about how cause i still don't get it thank
Great story overall, just please don’t make it too long before he starts getting his memories back or figuring out things about his sister. Pains me ever time he’s oblivious to it.
揭示劇透 Could you please inform me where did you get this cover art? Just the name of the character or the name of the artist is enough. I thank you in advance, and please continue with the good work. :)
I give this story 5 stars becasue I really enjoyed reading it, the author really has good sense of humour and his grammar is top notch. Girls are like Pokemon picking but i don't really mind it [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM
Bro will there be ntr in this story later? and how much harem members can we expect from the story? I hope all of them are developed and not vases like some other stories.
Honestly surprised this doesn't have mire reviews, its quite a good read so far and it definetly has potential keep up the good work!!......