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I'm liking the plot so far in this revenge story. God, I love revenge type of stories when they are done right! The descriptive narration is decent at best but hey, we gotta start somewhere when it comes to narrative writing! And so far it's going well with the details of the characters' voicelines. I can't wait until the author came back with more and more chapters to come. Give this a read already if you haven't!
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The story is interesting and engaging. This is a fast paced work. Initial chapters are filled with necessary background details. There were certain grammatical errors but not enough to take away the interest from the plot. Author, please update soon, I want to read more!
okay, so far I think the plot is great but could be better, I enjoyed it obviously but something just felt missing, can't put my finger on it.
I really like where this novel is heading at and the romance which would be coming at the future also excites me. You have my full support, I will follow you novel till the end
I like how Alex is motivated to become king. It shows the character's strong determination to achieve what he wants. This story partly reminds me of ATLA. There are a few missed punctuations and repeated words, but I'm sure that it'll be great as the story unfolds. ✨
There are quite a bit of repetition and run on sentences. I think there could be more of a hook to pull me into the story. Overall this is a really good story. Expecting this story to become a hit soon! Keep going, you got this <3!
This is a bit of a classic hero's journey set in the author's fantasy world, in short. Overall, an enjoyable read and good story beats; if you like a fast pace this is for you (at least if it keeps going the same way in future chapters). The writing style take a bit of getting used to with the long sentence form, and everything is very spelled out for the reader, probably making for a casual read above all else. There are mistakes in grammar and typesetting, but in just four chapters the writing seems to have improved quite a bit, making me hopeful for future chapters.
Wow this book is cool but there are some few grammatical error still yet the book is simple and cool to understand ............................. ....
Really good read, there is only one area of concern for me, but that is personal preference and doesn’t affect the quality of the story. I wish the author luck and good fortune on their journey of writing.
it's really captivating how the author has described everything .it seems so vivid and the plot is also mysterious and exciting . hope to read it more!
A very intriguing and suspenseful story which has me hoping for more! I found it quite entertaining despite how short each chapter. Keep up the good work author!
hello, a friendly reader here. The author has put some thought into the world setting. On the surface it looks simple while the intricacies are complex. I liked the smooth flow of dialogues too. I would love to come back to the story once there are enough chapters. good luck to the author with his future direction.
Plot wise, it's very interesting seeing how the author is working on story building. However, the descriptions of the world, like colors, smells, and just how awe-inspiring the magic appears to (glowing spheres of mana or ethereal neon lights) is missing for me
Author has a very vivid imagination. I always liked stories about the four elemental powers, fire, water, earth and air. Minor edits are needed in some area but does affect overall story. I looked forward to more chapters. Keep it up author.
woooooooooooooow! this story is gonna be interesting, I guess. Keep it up. the story development is nice, but the character gave me some headache
The main idea of the story has potential and I believe there are many things that will be revealed in the future. A lot is also revealed about the world setting so you won’t be stuck in a mist like veil with almost every other character in the story knowing more than you. The narration is also quite unique, the over convoluted sentences that plague many other novels, making you skip paragraphs have little presence in this story. I don’t want to spoil so I’ll just say the first few chapters are full of surprises :)
Good plot overall but might need a little bit of touch-up for the kingdoms descriptions. I like how the story flows. Keep up the good work![img=recommend]
awesome fantasy and I love that the author makes good use of his imagination, making it into something outstanding. the author has my full support and spot-on recommendation
I must say the story line is pretty good. I also like the idea. The world background is also explained well. I look forward to the next chapter. Though, I saw that there are quite a few repetitive phrases.
I loved the world building and storytelling and all those different powers are very intriguing. Keep writing author, you are doing a good job.
I could see some effort was nicely put into the worldbuilding. Keep it up. That would what make the story interesting. On the side note, i think the plot development was a bit rushed for these 4 chaps. U might want to slow it down. Overall, still a promising story. I believed you will improve as the time you spent more into writing. Cheers!
The Tale of the Worst One is a great book with amazing world building. The writing style is very easy to follow and the story is very engaging. The world building is very detailed and the reader can easily imagine the different kingdoms. I would definitely recommend this book to anyone who is looking for a great fantasy story. I can't wait for future updates to the novel
So I will just say the story development is good. I love the easy world system. Not complicated. The story is developing welll, nice dialogues jjust need to work on grammar. All in all this is a nice piece
the book is good to say least, atleast the plot. The thing is that you give way to much info at the beginning making it to much for someone to gobble and so creating a loss in interest .The plot is good, but it will be better is you make you dialogue more descriptive and add more description to the world. Just like the type of town he grows up in. I just assume it's an old age empire... But the plot is good. And some few grammatical errors here and there to.
The story is interesting with good world background, as for the writing it's good but there's a few dialogue between paragraphs. overall and give it a good read.
Hello, i have read your prologue and looked at your cover. I like the story, but I think it will be more attractive if the cover has some text inside. But I do really like the story, you should keep on updating more.
The feel of the story has a way, the four kingdom feels very avatar like but let's take it as a general idea. The story progresses in a much more historic approach and I think it's nice for a story based on fantasy. Overall very nice piece of work a solid 5. Let's see what it holds for the future.
A very fast pace story, with all the necessary info to understand what is happening... Just wish that their was more details in the story. Plus after dealing with some grammatical errors, the story would be amazing, as it is very propelling... Thanks for the read!
I'm liking the plot so far in this revenge story. God, I love revenge type of stories when they are done right! The descriptive narration is decent at best but hey, we gotta start somewhere when it comes to narrative writing! And so far it's going well with the details of the characters' voicelines. I can't wait until the author came back with more and more chapters to come. Give this a read already if you haven't!
揭示劇透 The story is interesting and engaging. This is a fast paced work. Initial chapters are filled with necessary background details. There were certain grammatical errors but not enough to take away the interest from the plot. Author, please update soon, I want to read more!
okay, so far I think the plot is great but could be better, I enjoyed it obviously but something just felt missing, can't put my finger on it.
I really like where this novel is heading at and the romance which would be coming at the future also excites me. You have my full support, I will follow you novel till the end
I like how Alex is motivated to become king. It shows the character's strong determination to achieve what he wants. This story partly reminds me of ATLA. There are a few missed punctuations and repeated words, but I'm sure that it'll be great as the story unfolds. ✨
There are quite a bit of repetition and run on sentences. I think there could be more of a hook to pull me into the story. Overall this is a really good story. Expecting this story to become a hit soon! Keep going, you got this <3!
This is a bit of a classic hero's journey set in the author's fantasy world, in short. Overall, an enjoyable read and good story beats; if you like a fast pace this is for you (at least if it keeps going the same way in future chapters). The writing style take a bit of getting used to with the long sentence form, and everything is very spelled out for the reader, probably making for a casual read above all else. There are mistakes in grammar and typesetting, but in just four chapters the writing seems to have improved quite a bit, making me hopeful for future chapters.
Wow this book is cool but there are some few grammatical error still yet the book is simple and cool to understand ............................. ....
Really good read, there is only one area of concern for me, but that is personal preference and doesn’t affect the quality of the story. I wish the author luck and good fortune on their journey of writing.
it's really captivating how the author has described everything .it seems so vivid and the plot is also mysterious and exciting . hope to read it more!
A very intriguing and suspenseful story which has me hoping for more! I found it quite entertaining despite how short each chapter. Keep up the good work author!
hello, a friendly reader here. The author has put some thought into the world setting. On the surface it looks simple while the intricacies are complex. I liked the smooth flow of dialogues too. I would love to come back to the story once there are enough chapters. good luck to the author with his future direction.
Plot wise, it's very interesting seeing how the author is working on story building. However, the descriptions of the world, like colors, smells, and just how awe-inspiring the magic appears to (glowing spheres of mana or ethereal neon lights) is missing for me
Author has a very vivid imagination. I always liked stories about the four elemental powers, fire, water, earth and air. Minor edits are needed in some area but does affect overall story. I looked forward to more chapters. Keep it up author.
woooooooooooooow! this story is gonna be interesting, I guess. Keep it up. the story development is nice, but the character gave me some headache
The main idea of the story has potential and I believe there are many things that will be revealed in the future. A lot is also revealed about the world setting so you won’t be stuck in a mist like veil with almost every other character in the story knowing more than you. The narration is also quite unique, the over convoluted sentences that plague many other novels, making you skip paragraphs have little presence in this story. I don’t want to spoil so I’ll just say the first few chapters are full of surprises :)
Good plot overall but might need a little bit of touch-up for the kingdoms descriptions. I like how the story flows. Keep up the good work![img=recommend]
awesome fantasy and I love that the author makes good use of his imagination, making it into something outstanding. the author has my full support and spot-on recommendation
I must say the story line is pretty good. I also like the idea. The world background is also explained well. I look forward to the next chapter. Though, I saw that there are quite a few repetitive phrases.
I loved the world building and storytelling and all those different powers are very intriguing. Keep writing author, you are doing a good job.
I could see some effort was nicely put into the worldbuilding. Keep it up. That would what make the story interesting. On the side note, i think the plot development was a bit rushed for these 4 chaps. U might want to slow it down. Overall, still a promising story. I believed you will improve as the time you spent more into writing. Cheers!
The Tale of the Worst One is a great book with amazing world building. The writing style is very easy to follow and the story is very engaging. The world building is very detailed and the reader can easily imagine the different kingdoms. I would definitely recommend this book to anyone who is looking for a great fantasy story. I can't wait for future updates to the novel
So I will just say the story development is good. I love the easy world system. Not complicated. The story is developing welll, nice dialogues jjust need to work on grammar. All in all this is a nice piece
the book is good to say least, atleast the plot. The thing is that you give way to much info at the beginning making it to much for someone to gobble and so creating a loss in interest .The plot is good, but it will be better is you make you dialogue more descriptive and add more description to the world. Just like the type of town he grows up in. I just assume it's an old age empire... But the plot is good. And some few grammatical errors here and there to.
The story is interesting with good world background, as for the writing it's good but there's a few dialogue between paragraphs. overall and give it a good read.
Hello, i have read your prologue and looked at your cover. I like the story, but I think it will be more attractive if the cover has some text inside. But I do really like the story, you should keep on updating more.
The feel of the story has a way, the four kingdom feels very avatar like but let's take it as a general idea. The story progresses in a much more historic approach and I think it's nice for a story based on fantasy. Overall very nice piece of work a solid 5. Let's see what it holds for the future.
A very fast pace story, with all the necessary info to understand what is happening... Just wish that their was more details in the story. Plus after dealing with some grammatical errors, the story would be amazing, as it is very propelling... Thanks for the read!