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- 寫作品質
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- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
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寫檢討
He started out as a good MC then he was dumbed down as soon as he went to school so he can fit into Harry’s little gang to tell the truth if I wanted to reread Harry Potter I would just do so there is really nothing new to this fanfic just HP plus one but hey the system seemed interesting in the beginning so read if yo don’ t good luck 👍 👍**********************££**********************************
I recommend to have someone that actually know the English language to point out your errors and spelling mistakes. Lot's of grammatical errors in the text as well as using wrong terms for different things, example: calling the first years "freshmen". The story seems like it might be decent if not for the glaring errors making it unreadable. Dropped.
Its was good before he went to hovard.he is a genius who awaken his magic in his childhood but he didnot learn magic.ten in hovard suddenly hr is not talented to learn magic.now he is more like a spectator on harry potter movies.
If this work is translation ... can anyone please point out details about original .......................................................
bad grammar, cant read .........................................................................................................................
a translation? because the spelling sucks ............................................................................................................
Easy, clear. The ''power" of the mc (tween of Drago)'s to switch a magic with another one of anime similar but more powerful. That strange, it's so simple but way to efficace. Hope u don't wast that with a harem and continue to do a good fanfic. If u want to breath and drop ur head on a good HP fanfic read that.
He started out as a good MC then he was dumbed down as soon as he went to school so he can fit into Harry’s little gang to tell the truth if I wanted to reread Harry Potter I would just do so there is really nothing new to this fanfic just HP plus one but hey the system seemed interesting in the beginning so read if yo don’ t good luck 👍 👍**********************££**********************************
I recommend to have someone that actually know the English language to point out your errors and spelling mistakes. Lot's of grammatical errors in the text as well as using wrong terms for different things, example: calling the first years "freshmen". The story seems like it might be decent if not for the glaring errors making it unreadable. Dropped.
Its was good before he went to hovard.he is a genius who awaken his magic in his childhood but he didnot learn magic.ten in hovard suddenly hr is not talented to learn magic.now he is more like a spectator on harry potter movies.
If this work is translation ... can anyone please point out details about original .......................................................
bad grammar, cant read .........................................................................................................................
a translation? because the spelling sucks ............................................................................................................
Easy, clear. The ''power" of the mc (tween of Drago)'s to switch a magic with another one of anime similar but more powerful. That strange, it's so simple but way to efficace. Hope u don't wast that with a harem and continue to do a good fanfic. If u want to breath and drop ur head on a good HP fanfic read that.
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