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Honestly i dropped this at the part when the protagonist decided to tell everyone even the people he isn't familiar with that he is a hero from another world whenever isekai protagonist do this i always dropped it.
Grammar is some of the worst I’ve seen, made my brain hurt to try and decipher the first couple of chapters
The story could be interesting but the grammar and the idiot mc being friends with the pervert and issie gets the original harem like why we read these to see others get the girls instead of the idiot issie
I immediately disliked this novel when I found out that the MC is Issei's friend.................................................................................................................................
Mc is beta and cuckold man. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
The heck, you made him support his perverted friend, no taking his woman too? That's kinda hilarious. I'm wondering what kind of things is currently in your mind.
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揭示劇透
it's an ok story some problem with the plot the major issue is the grammar you keep on mixing up male and female most female you post as male and brother fix that up and it would be all good
Mc beta . Mc simp. MC is Isse's dog [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Good concept trash execution... nonsensical decision.. In conclusion, a wasted potential fic because of the subpar iq of the author.............
Friend of Issei... [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
The history have great potential Good Mc and history so far!! Please, dont drop!! Please, dont drop!! Please, dont drop!! Please, dont drop!!
Man, I don't care about grammar, but it is annoying that mc agrees with everything that is thrown at him. Ah! he is a hero, but that is no reason for him to agree with everything, or better yet, if he really was a hero, he should already start slaughtering the three factions completely, after all, they are the ones who cause the most misery for humans. But this is ignored by him ? Really? UwU [ Use Deepl, and Grammarly. This will improve your grammar, don't forget to reread what is written at least twice. ]
Mc beta and stupid [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
The gramar are non readable stat form my point and mc is a pathetic loser i mean his woman was seal and he has no problem with that.........
It's pretty good. I hope it continues You did a good job, writer......................................................................................................................................................
Pretty good, but why don't people like it when the MC is Issei's friend?, Well it's not like I like Issei.
I like the concept of the story and this could have been a really enjoyable read but your writing quality and grammar are simply atrocius. It's hard to keep reading. You need to seriously reconsider your plot development, charcter design and ofc. grammar.
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[img=recomendar] es entretenido ..............................................................................................................................
The only romance that the MC has was the first chapter. He says he wants to live in peace but does not leave the Town or try to get away from the supernatural world. HE IS A FRIEND OF ISSEI. ............................................................
The MC is a friend of Issei... ................................................... ...............................
Grammar is worse than MTL, character, and stories are bad. And if you hate Issei, then you will hate this fanfic more because the mc just supports Issei, and Issei still will get his original harem.
I really hate Issei as a person and as a protagonist, MC is Issei's best friend and supports him, so this story is a 1/5 in my opinion and I don't think he will come back, the grammar is horrible and the gender of people is not understood in certain scenes. And Issei got his original harem, so... im fking go
Get an editor. Great premise. Poor execution. Editor. Editor. Editor. Get an editor. Do it. Do it. Just do it. Not grammarly…..or maybe try it, but I don’t think it’ll be enough.
I mind a bit since MC stupid like issei but i can accept the reality Issei get the original harem. I think my soul is going dim because of this madness
Honestly i dropped this at the part when the protagonist decided to tell everyone even the people he isn't familiar with that he is a hero from another world whenever isekai protagonist do this i always dropped it.
Grammar is some of the worst I’ve seen, made my brain hurt to try and decipher the first couple of chapters
The story could be interesting but the grammar and the idiot mc being friends with the pervert and issie gets the original harem like why we read these to see others get the girls instead of the idiot issie
I immediately disliked this novel when I found out that the MC is Issei's friend.................................................................................................................................
Mc is beta and cuckold man. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
The heck, you made him support his perverted friend, no taking his woman too? That's kinda hilarious. I'm wondering what kind of things is currently in your mind.
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揭示劇透 it's an ok story some problem with the plot the major issue is the grammar you keep on mixing up male and female most female you post as male and brother fix that up and it would be all good
Mc beta . Mc simp. MC is Isse's dog [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Good concept trash execution... nonsensical decision.. In conclusion, a wasted potential fic because of the subpar iq of the author.............
Friend of Issei... [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
The history have great potential Good Mc and history so far!! Please, dont drop!! Please, dont drop!! Please, dont drop!! Please, dont drop!!
Man, I don't care about grammar, but it is annoying that mc agrees with everything that is thrown at him. Ah! he is a hero, but that is no reason for him to agree with everything, or better yet, if he really was a hero, he should already start slaughtering the three factions completely, after all, they are the ones who cause the most misery for humans. But this is ignored by him ? Really? UwU [ Use Deepl, and Grammarly. This will improve your grammar, don't forget to reread what is written at least twice. ]
Mc beta and stupid [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
The gramar are non readable stat form my point and mc is a pathetic loser i mean his woman was seal and he has no problem with that.........
It's pretty good. I hope it continues You did a good job, writer......................................................................................................................................................
Pretty good, but why don't people like it when the MC is Issei's friend?, Well it's not like I like Issei.
I like the concept of the story and this could have been a really enjoyable read but your writing quality and grammar are simply atrocius. It's hard to keep reading. You need to seriously reconsider your plot development, charcter design and ofc. grammar.
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[img=recomendar] es entretenido ..............................................................................................................................
The only romance that the MC has was the first chapter. He says he wants to live in peace but does not leave the Town or try to get away from the supernatural world. HE IS A FRIEND OF ISSEI. ............................................................
The MC is a friend of Issei... ................................................... ...............................
Grammar is worse than MTL, character, and stories are bad. And if you hate Issei, then you will hate this fanfic more because the mc just supports Issei, and Issei still will get his original harem.
I really hate Issei as a person and as a protagonist, MC is Issei's best friend and supports him, so this story is a 1/5 in my opinion and I don't think he will come back, the grammar is horrible and the gender of people is not understood in certain scenes. And Issei got his original harem, so... im fking go
Get an editor. Great premise. Poor execution. Editor. Editor. Editor. Get an editor. Do it. Do it. Just do it. Not grammarly…..or maybe try it, but I don’t think it’ll be enough.
I mind a bit since MC stupid like issei but i can accept the reality Issei get the original harem. I think my soul is going dim because of this madness