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To bad you dropped it. It was a good run ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++
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Really good so far. Excited to read more chapters. Also merry christmas to those who celebrate it. Really good so far. Excited to read more chapters. Also merry christmas to those who celebrate it.
Lego man, Cant wait for moar ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
is this dropped? because the book just got Intresting and you don't seem to be posting or is it that your just posting this on another site orrr???
The story and character development is quite good, so far so good. But if you put (") on conversation line it will be more good, right now im confused who speak cause in conversation sometimes don't have (")
Very good story development, good writing quality and good character design that is not look like talking emotionless robots. Very brilliant story indeed [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
can you do patron for advanced chapters. i'm willing to pay. ................................................................................................
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Good fic so far. The author of this has already written more than 60ch and does not seem to be planning to drop it. I hope he doesnt . . . . .
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interesting so far. Excited to read more. interesting so far. Excited to read more.interesting so far. Excited to read more.interesting so far. Excited to read more.interesting so far. Excited to read more.
Strange translation, you can link to the original, the translator, you must indicate that this is not your fanfiction. (TT) (TT) (TT) (TT) (TT) (TT)
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a really good finding, UmU.................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................UmU
..............................its good 5 star and i hope that the stability of updates stay the same or at the minimum once or twice a week.
hey author, can you change the magician into bender? since it kind of confusinggghgggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggygggggggggggggggooooooo
well, I have learned quite a few thing from the fanfic side of this site. If a fic has a cover pic of some realistic/hot fictional girl, 9 out of 10 times it is a typical generic harem power trip with no depth and infinite horniness.
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To bad you dropped it. It was a good run ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++ ±++++++++++++++±++++++++++++++
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Really good so far. Excited to read more chapters. Also merry christmas to those who celebrate it. Really good so far. Excited to read more chapters. Also merry christmas to those who celebrate it.
Lego man, Cant wait for moar ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
is this dropped? because the book just got Intresting and you don't seem to be posting or is it that your just posting this on another site orrr???
The story and character development is quite good, so far so good. But if you put (") on conversation line it will be more good, right now im confused who speak cause in conversation sometimes don't have (")
Very good story development, good writing quality and good character design that is not look like talking emotionless robots. Very brilliant story indeed [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
can you do patron for advanced chapters. i'm willing to pay. ................................................................................................
exp..........................................................................................................................................
Good fic so far. The author of this has already written more than 60ch and does not seem to be planning to drop it. I hope he doesnt . . . . .
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interesting so far. Excited to read more. interesting so far. Excited to read more.interesting so far. Excited to read more.interesting so far. Excited to read more.interesting so far. Excited to read more.
Strange translation, you can link to the original, the translator, you must indicate that this is not your fanfiction. (TT) (TT) (TT) (TT) (TT) (TT)
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a really good finding, UmU.................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................UmU
..............................its good 5 star and i hope that the stability of updates stay the same or at the minimum once or twice a week.
hey author, can you change the magician into bender? since it kind of confusinggghgggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggygggggggggggggggooooooo
well, I have learned quite a few thing from the fanfic side of this site. If a fic has a cover pic of some realistic/hot fictional girl, 9 out of 10 times it is a typical generic harem power trip with no depth and infinite horniness.
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Too boring. It feels like I am reading some old story.