9評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
與他人分享您的想法
寫檢討
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The grammar is terrible. It is hard to follow, The mc is a guy who asks to be a girl with a retractable Slong, the gods feel extremely weird.
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this story is very good so far and I'm looking forward for more chapters and how the story will continue onwards. so please keep up the good work
need more chapters so please please please please start writing more. really really really really really like the story. [img=update][img=recommend][img=exp][img=fp]
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The grammar is terrible. It is hard to follow, The mc is a guy who asks to be a girl with a retractable Slong, the gods feel extremely weird.
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this story is very good so far and I'm looking forward for more chapters and how the story will continue onwards. so please keep up the good work
need more chapters so please please please please start writing more. really really really really really like the story. [img=update][img=recommend][img=exp][img=fp]