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Primordial Dimensions

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作者: HideousGrain

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摘要

"Finally,“ he thought, stepping through the spatial membrane, into the vast and dangerous `Primordial Dimension` where life and death are infinitely close to each other.

Dying unexpectedly, Shane found himself in the body of a newborn baby, within a strange, foreign world.

The foreign world, inhabited all kinds of terrifying beasts which escaped from the Primordial Dimensions in order to create havoc on it.

Even though humanity was on the brink of extinction, the Primordial Dimensions provided an unimaginable opportunity to reach higher realms, while imminently threatening them with the possibility to be conquered by foreign races.

But who would have thought that the destructive and cruel Primordial Dimension where monstrous existences emerged from, would one day become humanity´s ray of hope?

Becoming stronger and wielding elements by absorbing mana was not a dream anymore, only to notice, that everything was not as simple, as they initially thought...


Follow Shane Suro on his journey through the vast Primordial Dimensions where he learns about freedom, friendship, cruelty, loyalty, and betrayal.


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Mc's name is the same as one character in my other novel, but they're not the same! It has a deeper meaning but other than that these two characters have nothing really in common!
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[This novel has the "Fantasy" tag for a reason and does not necessarily follow a common logic]
[Information/World-build/Character-growth and interaction with new characters are important to build a proper novel and take their time. Every chapter is important, even if it's difficult to spot it sometimes!]
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Anirudh7

The story itself is quite nice, the information "dump" is quite easily consumable and doesnt overwhelm as its written well, in this novel in comparison to god eyes we have more detail for the cultivation, with how the first three stages are preparatory for actual tranformations or evolutions to come, how in these three supposed perfect foundations for body and energy can be made, and further levels dont have these foundations to segregate but will have "actual cultivation" so more on their own comprehensions and raw power, while building on their formidable base which they can create before breaking through to the 4th level, the academy is also finally including more characters which is a fresh feeling and much needed Now for other things Seeing as the other novel is heavily focused on beasts, i honestly hope we dont actually see an actual beast army here like we will potentially see in the other one The novel is again quite smooth and in 161 chapters has set quite a nice base, from the slow start to the quick catchup to now competing with the same age, which has made the novel quite enjoyable to read, though honestly freaky situations only happening alround the mc in 200 years of history has to stop at some point now that its been done 2-3 times Lastly and my only problem with this novel honestly except the unending monologues and constant calculative and nuetral thought process of the mc which doesnt match his personality anyway, adding some actual additional characters his age who have conversations is much needed, the monologues at 161 chapters are finally starting to live out their welcome with the base for the story set The mc, has been depicted in quite a paradoxical way, ill ignore the reincarnated stuff as thats honestly not really given much to his personality except a sense of adventure which he wouldve gotten himself anyway in time , we have in these chapters seen so many defining features which are parts of a much more high profile personality, be it his unbending will, ambition for freedom and power, cunning, volatile temper, greed, used to killing thus calmer and having more time for calculations, having lived with the stronngest humans who have been told to themselves have high profile personalities and not at all passive or subdued, even implying the mc has taken much of his own personality from looking at his father and aunts and uncles, these characterics he suddenly shows in situations are supposed to be his personality not just parts of it, him having resentment towards being kept in the mansion and not let out for anything he likes to do has been implied but its just not strong enough to the extent where he doesnt seem to actually resent anyone but take everything as love, which is illogical for a teenager (even if reincarnated teenager) he is immature and should resent but doesnt, hes said to be lazy and a tantrum thrower, but these are barely shown,hes even said to be overbearing when fighting or in an agressive mood due to the things hes had to go theough in his childhood Honestly its quite weird with so many traits that the mc has been shown to have a neutral and passive personality and thought process(monologues) it makes no sense, nobody can have a neutral personality and have these volatile and high profile /active traits rather hes shown to be abnormally passive,neutral,polite and nice as if something is suppressing his soul and actual personality and it only breaks out when hes put in a situation, plus being trapped in one place for all his life should make him want to know lots of people, make lots of noise, couse a havoc, let the seven sins of his personality take over, make mistakes, whereas what we see is a guy who doesn't want any attention and is somehow a lone wolf, is lonely but wants to keep to himself, doesnt talk to people much, ofcourse not many his equals have been shown for him to equally talk to but thats not something that can be helped, he has no teenage pangs or much interest in the opposite gender or anything even though hes a 2 time teenager, who should be facing hormonal mood swings This personality of the mc with a rational, nuetral, passive, pragmatic core is paradoxical to his traits and is illogical, the god eyes mc having almost the same personality is another minus, but the god eyes mcs personality is justified unlike this one Unless the mc is fixed to what has actually been written about him rather than this, this story being very well written and a brilliant read takes a back seat as the mcs perspective makes no sense and almost makes it seem like the mcs soul is suppresed or that were somehow reading about the god eyes mc rather than this ones Honestly, i like the book and hope that the mc is atleast tweaked/fixed to some degree as i really hope to read till the end!

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Melan_Hijack

A satisfactory combination of system and normal cultivation setting A plus point for adding more races than the tipycal elf,dwarf,... +:mc isn't some stupid guy unaware of everything +:He isn't cold-blooded which is rare in recent novels +: Hunting beasts scenes appears real because we don't see mc hunting them with just a single slash of his sword -: the only thing that worries me a bit is that I don't see any description on what is beyond advanced dimension

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Ana_musings

The author has a penchant for writing YA heroes in a dystopian world and this book based on the initial few chaps seems to be as brilliant as his debut novel. Some people may not like info-dumps but I like to get a good look at the world and the background where the story is set in to get a feel of the book. The initial chapters help set the story in action. Shane’s transition from a conflicted youngster to the main character with a mission makes it a worthwhile read. I generally do not read system novels but I would gladly make an exception for this one.

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luckyblacksheep

The story is good it's just that it's going downhill boring. There's so many technical explanation than the story progression. If you disect the chapter 86% of that is explanation then the remaining is the story development. Sometimes I think this is a technical book instead of a novel.I got so bored from reading this that I wrote this review of a pent up frustration to relieved me from ruining my day.

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Barick_Ada

I really like the world build and the unique system every human has. Please release more chapters...:I support you with all my power stones!!

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MonarchOfSilence

Heavily overrated for how bad the grammar is, sure superb world building and character development, but if you have to read thrice the same phrase to understand what the author wants to say I can't give it a higher raiting. What's so hard to get an editor? You can find a half decent one for little to no money. I am sure the money made on the novel can cover for an editor. Well my opinion.

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Electron

So far so good, I really like the story development. The taming aspect is cool, and ranks are being pumped through like eating candy. That may change in the future, but so far so good.

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Daoist5dpydN

Just started reading but my first impression of it was why add the whole transmigration plot? Couldnt he just have the blessing? And in doing so the whole story and behavior would make much more sense, I am not a fan of having an adult transmigrated mc behave like teenager. And the whole progression of the story is kind of slow and dull, its arduous to read, I kind of get trying to make it more realistic with the whole normal cultivation but that's kinda duft since this is fantasy and cultivation in itself is fantasy so why try to make it realistic, give me so fast boosts man, give me some thrill.

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mushroomheart

I dont normally read cultivation novels, I prefer manga, but I am liking this story already. I will vote it with all my ps. Good Job author!!

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SorcererCat

[Author note: With this chapter, the first volume of Shane's adventure comes to an end. Thank you for accompanying me in Shane's adventures and I hope you all enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it. As I am building a multiverse, it is very important for the timelines to be aligned, which means that I have to divide Shane's journey into two parts! I don't want to spoiler you guys too much, after all! I hope this won't come across as an absolute shocker to all of you. My writing journey has just begun and I have a new novel in store for you. It will be released in order to create a suitable timeline and trust me, it is even better ;) This new novel will be released on the 1st January 2022, while the sequel detailing Shane's escapades will follow once the time is ripe! Happy reading!!] I understand what the Author is trying to do here and I hope it works out for him and his LNs. However, for me this means that I have to wait over a year or two to finally get to read anything more about this LN while he writes other ones. Right now as a reader all I care about is this one and moving forward with the story. By the time he gets back to this LN I will have stopped even caring about it or the MC.

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Jade_Theif

Honestly although quite wordy at times, the story is decently written. The mc is what I have a hard time believing. Now if it wasn't a transmigration story and the kid grew up in a home where he was pandered to and he had gained a very disdaining attitude towards pretty much everyone, then I can definitely see him being the character that he is now. It feels as if everyone but him is an idiot or a sycophant in his viewpoint. This could be a legitimate character that grows by discovering that he is not the center of the universe and that people generally don't like teenagers with explosive mood swings no matter how intelligent or handsome they may be. He could learn tact and humility for starters.

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spartacus34

honestly the story is quite good, but there are too much classification. It is really frustrating to have to look at the glossary every time to understand the level of classification. I think you should make an identical classification (grade / quality) for the Items/ Manuals....

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lustful_void

It just end like that or not but i hope it not end yet and will continue . Well the story is quite nice and the storyline is quite interesting.

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rohit_agarwal_2291

The concept is intriguing but that is where it ends. After that, wether it is story progression, being coherent or the Main character, everything is disappointing. Considering the militarised nature of the world, the lack of respect MC shows towards its military is very surprising. The only apt character trait that author has been able to bring forth is how a typical wealthy son would act. He has his narrow point of view which is based on the elite pov as is usually is.

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SorcererCat

Fantastic LN. Everyone should read this! Keep up the great work Author! Fantastic LN. Everyone should read this! Keep up the great work Author!

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Altara_Blue

pretty good, i hope you don't drop this one has become one of my favourite novels ............................................................ sorry for my bad english

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ankou_skeith

nice story, good world description, can't wait for more chapter !!! try it !!!

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TBS_23
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Overall background of the story and its progression is good... Too bad its a one man show... The MC is just being developed and his lack of interaction with SC is killing the novel...

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Ishda_Lala

I really like it, even though I hate system normally

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ForeverPupa

Grain has always been great in writing, world building, and update stability! The world building makes me wonder if I can also enter the primordial dimension, xD Great read!

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卷 0 : Auxiliary Volume

  1. Glossary 3 years ago

卷 1

  1. 1
    Primordial Dimensions 3 years ago
  2. 2
    Escape 3 years ago
  3. 3
    Awakening 3 years ago
  4. 4
    Emerging 3 years ago
  5. 5
    System's restriction 3 years ago
  6. 6
    Assassination 3 years ago
  7. 7
    Shadow-snake valley 3 years ago
  8. 8
    Shane, the Plunderer 3 years ago
  9. 9
    Kidnapping! 3 years ago
  10. 10
    First Taming! 3 years ago
  11. 11
    Umbra 3 years ago
  12. 12
    Upgrade-missions 3 years ago
  13. 13
    Shop! 3 years ago
  14. 14
    Becoming rich overnight 3 years ago
  15. 15
    Trickster! 3 years ago
  16. 16
    Cultivation-Start! 3 years ago
  17. 17
    [Artemis' Blessing] 3 years ago
  18. 18
    Berserk [Mountain Boar] 3 years ago
  19. 19
    Taking advantage of the system 3 years ago
  20. 20
    Title [Berserk-Hunter] 3 years ago
  21. 21
    Quality amplification 3 years ago
  22. 22
    Go Umbra! 3 years ago
  23. 23
    Meaning of high mana purity 3 years ago
  24. 24
    Mankinds 'advantage' 3 years ago
  25. 25
    Slaughterer's dance 3 years ago
  26. 26
    System, the generous Fraudster 3 years ago
  27. 27
    'Real' Cultivator 3 years ago
  28. 28
    Home sweet home! 3 years ago
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    Nightshade flower field, the Goldmine 3 years ago
  30. 30
    Eerie Center 3 years ago
  31. 31
    Lord of the Valley 3 years ago
  32. 32
    Escaping death by a hair's breadth 3 years ago
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    Filthy and rich 3 years ago
  34. 34
    Do I really have to? 3 years ago
  35. 35
    Unexpected fair 3 years ago
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    Darkness cocoon 3 years ago
  37. 37
    Gathering Intel 3 years ago
  38. 38
    Evolution-path 3 years ago
  39. 39
    Difference 3 years ago
  40. 40
    Path out of misery 3 years ago
  41. 41
    He is searching for you! 3 years ago
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    Heirloom 3 years ago
  43. 43
    [Ancient ring of the Susurro] 3 years ago
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    [Perfect] body refining? 3 years ago
  45. 45
    Arduous schedule 3 years ago
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    Progress 3 years ago
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    Perfect foundation 3 years ago
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    Riskying everything 3 years ago
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    Nest 3 years ago
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    Within danger and wealth 3 years ago
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    Memorable view 3 years ago
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    Warm-up is over 3 years ago
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    Shane, the Miner 3 years ago
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    Approach 3 years ago
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    Shooing everyone away with honesty 3 years ago
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    Lust! 3 years ago
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    Mining-expert 3 years ago
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    Conquest 3 years ago
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    Joining the fray 3 years ago
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    The enemy of my enemy is my enemy 3 years ago
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    Beast-war 3 years ago
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    [Mythic]-mission accomlished 3 years ago
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    From riches to rags 3 years ago
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    Armed to the teeth 3 years ago
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    Beneficial past 3 years ago
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    Reason 3 years ago
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    'Rusty' Skills 3 years ago
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    Worth of high-quality 3 years ago
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    Wolf den 3 years ago
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    Stubborn Shelter captain 3 years ago
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    The might of connections 3 years ago
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    Obsessive group chat 3 years ago
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    Umbra's quality 3 years ago
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    System evaluation 3 years ago
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    Difficulty of being perfect 3 years ago
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    Might of the [Perfect] 3 years ago
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    Defensive measures 3 years ago
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    Bloodlust 3 years ago
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    Limit breaker 3 years ago
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    Miniature world& Beast sealing card 3 years ago
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    Moving out! 3 years ago
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    Betraying 3 years ago
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    Ground&Aerial 3 years ago
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    Beast's wisdom 3 years ago
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    Taking over... 3 years ago
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    Counteroffensive! 3 years ago
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    Struggle 3 years ago
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    Holy being 3 years ago
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    Retreat! 3 years ago
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    Time is Gold! 3 years ago
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    Blessed loneliness 3 years ago
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    Praise&Lecture 3 years ago
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    Realisation 3 years ago
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    Hard-working! 3 years ago
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    What is fun? 3 years ago
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    Game 3 years ago
  97. 97
    Getting to know each other 3 years ago
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    Shirai-Academy 3 years ago
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    Against the imagined 3 years ago
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    Rankings 3 years ago
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    Pigsty dorm room 3 years ago
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    Coincidence? 3 years ago
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    Peaceful mind 3 years ago
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    Displeased 3 years ago
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    Enemy number 1 3 years ago
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    Superior mastery 3 years ago
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    Refining capsule 3 years ago
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    Illusion 3 years ago
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    Entertaining 3 years ago
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    Waste of... 3 years ago
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    Mortal ranking 3 years ago
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    Perfect physique 3 years ago
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    Supreme tickets&Hidden shop 3 years ago
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    Occupation?! 3 years ago
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    Rejecting 3 years ago
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    Proposal 3 years ago
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    Rewards 3 years ago
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    They have to come too? 3 years ago
  119. 119
    Difference between Skill and Martial art technique 3 years ago
  120. 120
    Is that me? 3 years ago
  121. 121
    Creating Bloodlust? 3 years ago
  122. 122
    Preparations 3 years ago
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    Evolution 3 years ago
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    Feeling free 3 years ago
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    Pushing herself on me 3 years ago
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    Surrounded 3 years ago
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    Taking it lightly 3 years ago
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    Shy Killer 3 years ago
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    Stealing 3 years ago
  130. 130
    Ideals 3 years ago
  131. 131
    Gathering 3 years ago
  132. 132
    First Task 3 years ago
  133. 133
    Distraction 3 years ago
  134. 134
    Conquer the Cave! 3 years ago
  135. 135
    Variant: Elemental Subterra Centipedes 3 years ago
  136. 136
    Quasi Dungeon 3 years ago
  137. 137
    Instant Improvement 3 years ago
  138. 138
    Reluctance 3 years ago
  139. 139
    Scapegoat 3 years ago
  140. 140
    Glamorous floor 3 years ago
  141. 141
    Valkyries' might 3 years ago
  142. 142
    Split personality? 3 years ago
  143. 143
    Deal 3 years ago
  144. 144
    Unbreakable miner 3 years ago
  145. 145
    Envy 3 years ago
  146. 146
    Forced encounter 3 years ago
  147. 147
    Rainbow subterra Centipedes 3 years ago
  148. 148
    Golden centipede King 3 years ago
  149. 149
    Death! 3 years ago
  150. 150
    Blame 3 years ago
  151. 151
    Why should I feel guilty? 3 years ago
  152. 152
    Win-Win 3 years ago
  153. 153
    Shane's Greed 3 years ago
  154. 154
    Back home! 3 years ago
  155. 155
    Report 3 years ago
  156. 156
    Revelation 3 years ago
  157. 157
    World seed 3 years ago
  158. 158
    Creating a world 3 years ago
  159. 159
    Are you kidding me?? 3 years ago
  160. 160
    Downgrade 3 years ago
  161. 161
    Hidden Paradise 3 years ago
  162. 162
    One with the World 3 years ago
  163. 163
    Hidden occupation 3 years ago
  164. 164
    Wanna come with me? 3 years ago
  165. 165
    Honeymoon? 3 years ago
  166. 166
    Overworking? 3 years ago
  167. 167
    Learning by getting beaten up 3 years ago
  168. 168
    Acceptance 3 years ago
  169. 169
    Slow and steady 3 years ago
  170. 170
    Comprehension 3 years ago
  171. 171
    Meaning of Freedom 3 years ago
  172. 172
    Practice, practice, practice 3 years ago
  173. 173
    Dominant Force 3 years ago
  174. 174
    Blood aura 3 years ago
  175. 175
    Waste of time 3 years ago
  176. 176
    Time is ticking! 3 years ago
  177. 177
    Attaining the [Slaughterer’s Path] 3 years ago
  178. 178
    Trying not to cause a commotion 3 years ago
  179. 179
    Solitary Cultivation 3 years ago
  180. 180
    System's Collector 3 years ago
  181. 181
    Extinct 3 years ago
  182. 182
    Using the favor 3 years ago
  183. 183
    Elementals Empire 3 years ago
  184. 184
    Foresight 3 years ago
  185. 185
    Impatient race 3 years ago
  186. 186
    Did you make trouble? 3 years ago
  187. 187
    Into the unknown 3 years ago
  188. 188
    Disguised 3 years ago
  189. 189
    Misunderstanding 3 years ago
  190. 190
    Easy going 3 years ago
  191. 191
    Caera 3 years ago
  192. 192
    Teasing 3 years ago
  193. 193
    Fight? 3 years ago
  194. 194
    Odd request 3 years ago
  195. 195
    Destroyed Cultivation 3 years ago
  196. 196
    Greater Wind Elemental 3 years ago
  197. 197
    Why did you lose? 3 years ago
  198. 198
    How did that happen? 3 years ago
  199. 199
    Brawl 3 years ago
  200. 200
    Darkness Domain 3 years ago
  201. 201
    Change 3 years ago
  202. 202
    Ancestor 3 years ago
  203. 203
    First Question 3 years ago
  204. 204
    Smoking Brain 3 years ago
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    Experience 3 years ago
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    Home 3 years ago
  207. 207
    Reunion 3 years ago
  208. 208
    Mountain of ... 3 years ago
  209. 209
    Divine Visitor 3 years ago
  210. 210
    Exhilaration 3 years ago
  211. 211
    Why don't you get married? 3 years ago
  212. 212
    Mana-heart awakening 3 years ago
  213. 213
    Hidden occupation's 3rd requirement 3 years ago
  214. 214
    Sulking 3 years ago
  215. 215
    Revenge 3 years ago
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    Domination 3 years ago
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    New Ruler 3 years ago
  218. 218
    Searching for a Farmer 3 years ago
  219. 219
    Cleaning the mess 3 years ago
  220. 220
    Inconspicuous Geniuses?? 3 years ago
  221. 221
    Do you want to? 3 years ago
  222. 222
    Drawing her in 3 years ago
  223. 223
    Offer 3 years ago
  224. 224
    Furious Pugilist 3 years ago
  225. 225
    Difference in strength 3 years ago
  226. 226
    You are...WHAT? 3 years ago
  227. 227
    Answer 3 years ago
  228. 228
    Permanent contract 3 years ago
  229. 229
    Matchmaker 3 years ago
  230. 230
    Astronomical request 3 years ago
  231. 231
    Fortune 3 years ago
  232. 232
    Unexpected Expenses 3 years ago
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    Frustration 3 years ago
  234. 234
    Meeting the princess again 3 years ago
  235. 235
    Starlight-river 3 years ago
  236. 236
    Respect 3 years ago
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    Playfulness 3 years ago
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    Patience is a virtue 3 years ago
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    Unwanted visitor 3 years ago
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    Resurfacing values 3 years ago
  241. 241
    Rescue 3 years ago
  242. 242
    Superior awakened beast 3 years ago
  243. 243
    Save them, by all means! 3 years ago
  244. 244
    Creating a mess 3 years ago
  245. 245
    What did you say?? 3 years ago
  246. 246
    Won't a treaty be enough? 3 years ago
  247. 247
    Non disclosure agreement 3 years ago
  248. 248
    How did I not notice that? 3 years ago
  249. 249
    Aunt, I can give you a discount! 3 years ago
  250. 250
    Needy 3 years ago
  251. 251
    Cosmo 3 years ago
  252. 252
    Forgotten missions 3 years ago
  253. 253
    Appealing contract 3 years ago
  254. 254
    Study group 3 years ago
  255. 255
    Tricked 3 years ago
  256. 256
    Exam results 3 years ago
  257. 257
    Astral Artisans 3 years ago
  258. 258
    Expansion 3 years ago
  259. 259
    Mana awakening 3 years ago
  260. 260
    No time 3 years ago
  261. 261
    My Astral Artisans can do that! 3 years ago
  262. 262
    Might of great teamwork 3 years ago
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    Pandemonium 3 years ago
  264. 264
    Demonification 3 years ago
  265. 265
    Shortcut 3 years ago
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    Starlight guild 3 years ago
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    Astral Starlight 3 years ago
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    Neptua Ladra 3 years ago
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    Leviathan 3 years ago
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    Short reunion 3 years ago
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    Prove themselves 3 years ago
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    No return! 3 years ago
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    Jump into the cold water 3 years ago
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    Similar 3 years ago
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    Realization 3 years ago
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    Elemental champion crabs 3 years ago
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    Shopping spree during a fight 3 years ago
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    Superior beast pack 3 years ago
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    Suicidal assassination 3 years ago
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    Stingy 3 years ago
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    Attendance! 3 years ago
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    Emblem 3 years ago
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    Mana awakening event! 3 years ago
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    Meet your fiance! 3 years ago
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    Strongest prodigy! 3 years ago
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    Humiliation 3 years ago
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    One after another 3 years ago
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    Weird constellation 3 years ago
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    Hidden-Universal mission 3 years ago
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    Initiated 3 years ago
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    Journey 3 years ago
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    Carnage 3 years ago
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    Reward 3 years ago
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    Perspective of the rich! 3 years ago
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    Time to pay! 3 years ago
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    Unwanted message 3 years ago
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    You're too weak 3 years ago
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    Velocity 3 years ago
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    I'll claim what you've promised! 3 years ago
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    Floating train 3 years ago
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    Conflict 3 years ago
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    Melodrama 3 years ago
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    Last 3 years ago
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    Customized mission 3 years ago
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    Escalation 3 years ago
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    Descendant 3 years ago
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    Pick 3 years ago
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    Shocking rewards 3 years ago
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    Tower 3 years ago
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    First floor 3 years ago
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    Support MVP 3 years ago
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    Resting zone 3 years ago
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    Protect the Kingdom 3 years ago
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    Devil's brood 3 years ago
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    Warfare 3 years ago
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    Malfunction 3 years ago
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    Treasury 3 years ago
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    Final rest 3 years ago
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    Shane, the Fool 3 years ago
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    Detail 3 years ago
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    All-in 3 years ago
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    Malfunction 3 years ago
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    Upgrade 3 years ago
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    Everything has a meaning! 3 years ago
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    Another Error?? 3 years ago
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    Out 3 years ago
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    Individual strength 3 years ago
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    No holding back 3 years ago
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    Nirvana 3 years ago
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    The strongest 3 years ago
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    Primordial tournament 3 years ago
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    Better than nothing 3 years ago
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    Unexpected 3 years ago
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    Blazing 3 years ago
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    [Mythic] Tamer 3 years ago
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    Approaching danger 3 years ago
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    Unparalleled speed 3 years ago
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    Cold 3 years ago
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    War God 3 years ago
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    Realisation 3 years ago
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    Sin 3 years ago
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    Meaning of Invincibility 3 years ago
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    Butcher 3 years ago
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    Big picture 3 years ago
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    30 seconds 3 years ago
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    Beyond the possible 3 years ago
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    Forbidden ability 3 years ago
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    Rescue 3 years ago
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    Warning 3 years ago
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    No Time 3 years ago
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    Interlinked 3 years ago
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    [Conqueror] 3 years ago
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    Meeting 3 years ago
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    Acting as they want 3 years ago
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    Path of Independance 3 years ago
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    Speed run 3 years ago
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    Challenge 3 years ago
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    Complete the Perfect 3 years ago
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    Extreme! 3 years ago
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    Origin of the cursed Halfling 3 years ago
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    Change 3 years ago
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    Worth of trust 3 years ago
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    Soul world 3 years ago
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    Let's work together! 3 years ago
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    Descendant of the Ancient 3 years ago
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    System's rescue 3 years ago
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    Next time 3 years ago
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    Inherited traits 3 years ago
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    Knowledge crystal 3 years ago
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    Blocked out 3 years ago
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    World tree 3 years ago
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    Center 3 years ago
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    Pentagram 3 years ago
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    Call of Nature 3 years ago
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    Hidden Valley 3 years ago
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    Gaia 3 years ago
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    Walking treasures 3 years ago
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    Core 3 years ago
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    Where to place...? 3 years ago
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    Sea dragon boat 3 years ago
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    Preps 3 years ago
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    With ease 3 years ago
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    Ready to evolve 3 years ago
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    Search 3 years ago
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    The Creator 3 years ago
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    System 3 years ago
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    True reason 3 years ago
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    Enemy 3 years ago
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    New Plan 3 years ago
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    Wish 3 years ago
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    30 Days 3 years ago
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    Infiltration 3 years ago
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    Dominance 3 years ago
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    Achilles' heel 3 years ago
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    Crack 3 years ago
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    Drastic changes 3 years ago
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    Evil? 3 years ago
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    Convinced 3 years ago
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    Retaliation 3 years ago
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    Still possible? 3 years ago
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    Repelled 3 years ago
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    Rescue Mission 3 years ago
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    Distraction 3 years ago
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    Rage 3 years ago
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    Pain&Agony 3 years ago
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    At own risk 3 years ago
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    Serious 3 years ago
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    With ease 3 years ago
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    Doubt 3 years ago
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    I'm sorry 3 years ago
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    Betrayal 3 years ago
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    Life-and-Death 3 years ago
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    Until death 3 years ago
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    Once incident after another 3 years ago
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    Change 3 years ago
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    The End is just the Beginning 3 years ago
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