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from the bad reviews I say this is trash not gonna waste my time on this.[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
A good betrayal system novel worth reading. I have seen that many are spamming with bad reviews but on the contrary it is many times better than the novels trending now. Most of the novels are cliche and this is different from them. Also most people are saying mc should do that, do this but what you have to understand is mc is not you. Mc is a unique individual so he may make good or bad decision and thinks different than you. so dont spam author saying he should do that and this. I hope author will continue to write this novel and your writing quality has improved as chapters increased. The reason i gave 5 stars even though it doesn't deserve it is because it is unique and different from cliche novels and has a good world building, character development
this is bad... !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I haven’t read the book but im giving five stars for the authors determination to continue even with all these comments (personally i would have dropped the novel if i was the author) Well from the comments so far my advice to the author is that at least you should do a rewrite cos in any situation first impression always counts Subconsciously human behavior is always to judge a book by its cover so i suggest you do a rewrite P.S Character development doesn’t mean the mc has to be dumb and then smart i mean from what im reading from the comments some decisions he makes shouldn’t be made Anyway this is my review
Author has a tendency of destroying immersion by interjecting personal comments right in the middle of the story on almost every chapter. Personal views are meant to be put at the end of the chapter so we can ignore or read them not in the middle of the story! This is why I have to drop it.... I personally like to be immersed in the book and don't appreciate being yanked out by silly author comments. Author cheats ..... This story is now about 260± chapters long but in reality it is maybe about half that. Every chapter has some sort of long explanation of levels, skills or such taking at least 250 words out of what is supposed to be a 1000 words chapter very irritating. The story itself is not too bad nice enough plot nothing special but still a good enough read. The pacing is just OK. It has potential. But the authors bad habits of involving himself in the story instead of just telling it. Is just too irritating
Everything is good but story is very slow paced . starting was amazing snd by far one of my top story development but it is very slow !!,! Pls author fast pace the novel for revenge .
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character is to stupid, and the early life gets rushed through with the writer spending more time trying to justify his stupidity than be writing a believable character
Could -Realms Example: Like the Six Realms of Buddhism: REALMS Gods/Heaven, REALMS Asuras, REALMS Humans, REALMS Animals, REALM Shungry Ghosts, And REALMS Demon/Hell. -Dimensions Example: Parallel, Secular and Virtual Dimensions. -Planets Example: Multiuniverses or Thousands of Planets. There are also three Worlds -Mortal World -Celestial World -Immortal World Alien, Terminator, Predator, Titan, Monster, God, Asura, Human, Beast, Ghost, Devil, Angel, Elf, Dragon, Phoenix, Fox, Mermaid, Undead, Golem, Spirit, Dwarf, Orc, Giant, Goblin, Djinn, Gnome, Troll, Centaur, Slithereen, Deep One, Skaven, Cyborg, Transformers. Races that definitely exist and are different Energy The Chaos, The Nihility, The Infinite, The Divinity, The Cosmic QI, MANA, SPIRIT, AURA, PRANA, ASTRAL, ELEMENTAL. BODY POWER, SPIRITUAL POWER, SOUL POWER MAGIC, MARTIAL ART, SKILL, TECHNIQUE, CULTIVATOR, MAGICIAN, SCI-FI, SYSTEM. LAW, DAO, AND, CULTIVATION
for those who are reading this comment, I would like make a small note... people are posting comments like... I could not continue reading after 37 chapter...or bad English... or MC is stupid and lame....so before you believe them...you should give it try, I mean i too have read comments and then gave up few novels because of bad review...but when I read them...I found that they were so awesome...what I am trying to say is everyone has different tastes and likes... as for different negative comments... people are expecting op mc in the first 30 chapters then what's the use of writing long stories...novel are all about story development, how mc goes from an ant to dragon...if you expect and instant op then please go and read those short stories with 20-30 chapters....as for stupid actions of mc, it is a part of character development...
Coom on dude the names stick in my head to much I'm droping this novel!!! I don't know how all the other people even managed to read beyond the 4th chapter! i cant even focus on the story because of character names its too much!
Bad grammar. hurts my eyes when there are no punctuations. Stupid MC, Naive, gullible, idiotic, not intelligent, low EQ. terrible at describing things, No plot, bad plot for the sake of story progression, Low level NPC, English names in an indian kingdom, only the MC has indian name. The system is glitching, has many errors, inferior system, Experience is wrong, shows less stat points
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man said Mc gonna be stupid makes mistakes and stuff you did not say man gonna be stupid as in young masters ancestor stupid man doing the most stupidest things for a 15 year old and still did not figure out that everyone hates him this is why character development should start somewhere but not from here
I got to 38 and iam tired of the stupid stuff it had amazing potential but I Just don’t think this author is the right one for it and Breaking the 4 th wall sucks on my opinion
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The MC's power level are inconsistent, in the begining he was able to defeat a high level opponents, as he gains more levels and stats he was finding it harder to defeat his opponents, the author doesn't explain how the stats are related to the cultivation level, he was able to defeat some mid level opponents with his stats below 10, when his stats are 100+ he was having trouble with the same level of enemies
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to start this off properly I have to preface this with I haven't read this book yet I just wanted to say something to the author. you said roughly that the mc will start off weak and not to expect him to power level, i'm fine with that as long as his abilities are either interesting and or well explored. a example of this is the dao of magic it takes a already interesting and IMO ability/power cultivation and explores it rather thoroughly. the reason this is relavent is because "to me at least" this is one of the major draws to a op fan fiction almost instant access to cool abilities/powers to explore. this acts as a really good hook to get people to stay and continue reading especially on fan fic sites, because you most probably won't find people who care about the story or character development as long as the mc doesn't make them want to throw up in repulsion. ps sorry if this comes out as a big block of text I wrote this on my phone I tried to make it not one but I can only hope it worked.
The only thing I dislike about this novel is that the MC is super stupid. He does such basic mistake even in the late part of the story. If not for the plot Armor he would have died 100 times.
The story so far is a bit slow but it gets interesting and logical...so far loving it...and hope the mC does not make any stupid mistake or decisions. Well good work author but I think you could still in certain areas... . .
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Don't waste your time. Every 5 star review it's fake. It's just the author and his other accounts. I like reading new books to give honest reviews and this is the first time I will rate without reading because the authors behavior has disgusted me and if anyone has the means to reach app managers to shut this clown show down. Please do. BTW Author how old are to do something so dumb. Spamming reviews to raise your ratings? Let the readers decide.
I noticed that the author seems to give Themselves multiple 5/star reviews. which in my opinion shouldn’t be allowed. ive also noticed other reviewers have posted almost the same thing as the author which makes me think its the author on another account.
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I enjoyed reading this story and I also like the concept of this story it starts off slow but gets really better there are good action scenes and interesting storytelling. I’m just wondering, are you on hiatus or just done writing this Story?
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A good betrayal system novel worth reading. I have seen that many are spamming with bad reviews but on the contrary it is many times better than the novels trending now. Most of the novels are cliche and this is different from them. Also most people are saying mc should do that, do this but what you have to understand is mc is not you. Mc is a unique individual so he may make good or bad decision and thinks different than you. so dont spam author saying he should do that and this. I hope author will continue to write this novel and your writing quality has improved as chapters increased. The reason i gave 5 stars even though it doesn't deserve it is because it is unique and different from cliche novels and has a good world building, character development
this is bad... !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I haven’t read the book but im giving five stars for the authors determination to continue even with all these comments (personally i would have dropped the novel if i was the author) Well from the comments so far my advice to the author is that at least you should do a rewrite cos in any situation first impression always counts Subconsciously human behavior is always to judge a book by its cover so i suggest you do a rewrite P.S Character development doesn’t mean the mc has to be dumb and then smart i mean from what im reading from the comments some decisions he makes shouldn’t be made Anyway this is my review
Author has a tendency of destroying immersion by interjecting personal comments right in the middle of the story on almost every chapter. Personal views are meant to be put at the end of the chapter so we can ignore or read them not in the middle of the story! This is why I have to drop it.... I personally like to be immersed in the book and don't appreciate being yanked out by silly author comments. Author cheats ..... This story is now about 260± chapters long but in reality it is maybe about half that. Every chapter has some sort of long explanation of levels, skills or such taking at least 250 words out of what is supposed to be a 1000 words chapter very irritating. The story itself is not too bad nice enough plot nothing special but still a good enough read. The pacing is just OK. It has potential. But the authors bad habits of involving himself in the story instead of just telling it. Is just too irritating
Everything is good but story is very slow paced . starting was amazing snd by far one of my top story development but it is very slow !!,! Pls author fast pace the novel for revenge .
spectacular failure.........................................................................................................................
character is to stupid, and the early life gets rushed through with the writer spending more time trying to justify his stupidity than be writing a believable character
Could -Realms Example: Like the Six Realms of Buddhism: REALMS Gods/Heaven, REALMS Asuras, REALMS Humans, REALMS Animals, REALM Shungry Ghosts, And REALMS Demon/Hell. -Dimensions Example: Parallel, Secular and Virtual Dimensions. -Planets Example: Multiuniverses or Thousands of Planets. There are also three Worlds -Mortal World -Celestial World -Immortal World Alien, Terminator, Predator, Titan, Monster, God, Asura, Human, Beast, Ghost, Devil, Angel, Elf, Dragon, Phoenix, Fox, Mermaid, Undead, Golem, Spirit, Dwarf, Orc, Giant, Goblin, Djinn, Gnome, Troll, Centaur, Slithereen, Deep One, Skaven, Cyborg, Transformers. Races that definitely exist and are different Energy The Chaos, The Nihility, The Infinite, The Divinity, The Cosmic QI, MANA, SPIRIT, AURA, PRANA, ASTRAL, ELEMENTAL. BODY POWER, SPIRITUAL POWER, SOUL POWER MAGIC, MARTIAL ART, SKILL, TECHNIQUE, CULTIVATOR, MAGICIAN, SCI-FI, SYSTEM. LAW, DAO, AND, CULTIVATION
for those who are reading this comment, I would like make a small note... people are posting comments like... I could not continue reading after 37 chapter...or bad English... or MC is stupid and lame....so before you believe them...you should give it try, I mean i too have read comments and then gave up few novels because of bad review...but when I read them...I found that they were so awesome...what I am trying to say is everyone has different tastes and likes... as for different negative comments... people are expecting op mc in the first 30 chapters then what's the use of writing long stories...novel are all about story development, how mc goes from an ant to dragon...if you expect and instant op then please go and read those short stories with 20-30 chapters....as for stupid actions of mc, it is a part of character development...
Coom on dude the names stick in my head to much I'm droping this novel!!! I don't know how all the other people even managed to read beyond the 4th chapter! i cant even focus on the story because of character names its too much!
Bad grammar. hurts my eyes when there are no punctuations. Stupid MC, Naive, gullible, idiotic, not intelligent, low EQ. terrible at describing things, No plot, bad plot for the sake of story progression, Low level NPC, English names in an indian kingdom, only the MC has indian name. The system is glitching, has many errors, inferior system, Experience is wrong, shows less stat points
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man said Mc gonna be stupid makes mistakes and stuff you did not say man gonna be stupid as in young masters ancestor stupid man doing the most stupidest things for a 15 year old and still did not figure out that everyone hates him this is why character development should start somewhere but not from here
I got to 38 and iam tired of the stupid stuff it had amazing potential but I Just don’t think this author is the right one for it and Breaking the 4 th wall sucks on my opinion
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The MC's power level are inconsistent, in the begining he was able to defeat a high level opponents, as he gains more levels and stats he was finding it harder to defeat his opponents, the author doesn't explain how the stats are related to the cultivation level, he was able to defeat some mid level opponents with his stats below 10, when his stats are 100+ he was having trouble with the same level of enemies
east meet west, cultivation is the best gfgjgvbbfvgjg ygjdjfjdKYdkidicultivationtxhusbidbusb8r cultivationfjtvofvifhvkggjufgjyggcu ydj7ch5r6figd:. cultuvationudjigirvidfiyf
to start this off properly I have to preface this with I haven't read this book yet I just wanted to say something to the author. you said roughly that the mc will start off weak and not to expect him to power level, i'm fine with that as long as his abilities are either interesting and or well explored. a example of this is the dao of magic it takes a already interesting and IMO ability/power cultivation and explores it rather thoroughly. the reason this is relavent is because "to me at least" this is one of the major draws to a op fan fiction almost instant access to cool abilities/powers to explore. this acts as a really good hook to get people to stay and continue reading especially on fan fic sites, because you most probably won't find people who care about the story or character development as long as the mc doesn't make them want to throw up in repulsion. ps sorry if this comes out as a big block of text I wrote this on my phone I tried to make it not one but I can only hope it worked.
The only thing I dislike about this novel is that the MC is super stupid. He does such basic mistake even in the late part of the story. If not for the plot Armor he would have died 100 times.
The story so far is a bit slow but it gets interesting and logical...so far loving it...and hope the mC does not make any stupid mistake or decisions. Well good work author but I think you could still in certain areas... . .
揭示劇透 Don't waste your time. Every 5 star review it's fake. It's just the author and his other accounts. I like reading new books to give honest reviews and this is the first time I will rate without reading because the authors behavior has disgusted me and if anyone has the means to reach app managers to shut this clown show down. Please do. BTW Author how old are to do something so dumb. Spamming reviews to raise your ratings? Let the readers decide.
I noticed that the author seems to give Themselves multiple 5/star reviews. which in my opinion shouldn’t be allowed. ive also noticed other reviewers have posted almost the same thing as the author which makes me think its the author on another account.
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I enjoyed reading this story and I also like the concept of this story it starts off slow but gets really better there are good action scenes and interesting storytelling. I’m just wondering, are you on hiatus or just done writing this Story?